issue41 [清凉夏日二组]

leonnieUID: 2216142

题目：ISSUE 41 - "Such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science."
字数：563                    日期：2006-7-27

The speaker asserts that nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits exerts a positive effects to address human needs. As for me, although these areas meet human needs to certain extent, they also have potential negative effects on human lives, which far outweigh the benefits.

I concede that nonmainstream fields--astrology, fortune--telling, psychic and paranormal pursuits-- cater to the human needs in some cases. In the first place, the reason why populace is ardent to these fields is that human is born of the nature of curiosity and exploration to uncharted territories. The increasing development of the mainstream areas--science and technology—happens to illustrate this point. After all, the recent outcome of science and technology could not serve the needs which human wishes to know about their future and destiny. Such startling desire impels human to turn to stack of tarot cards or fortune--tellers for answer.

In the second place, it is undeniable that participating in nonmainstream areas of inquiry alleviate participant’s pains, both mentally and psychologically. People experience common things in mundane lives involving making choices and decisions and therefore enduring the consequences. Oftentimes, people are afraid of making choices because they are more scared of facing miserable aftermath. For this reason, people turning to fortune—tellers for suggestion would be escaped from the dilemma to make choices and regretful feelings about undesirable aftereffects. Even if the consequence is anguished, people would natrually arrtibute it to the destiny determined by God. Indeed, non-mainstream fields of inquiry respond to the needs of hunams and prevent them from bogging into panic suffers.

While aside from the ostensibly psychological comfort to humans, non—mainstream areas of inquriy can not manifest in itself in benefiting other aspects of the scoiety, by contrast, there lies potential harmful effects on our everyday lives. My point of contention with the speaker involve two aspects. For one aspect, these areas stem from irrational imagination and illusion rather than creditable reasoning; they simply cater to the needs of human speculatively and its initial intent is not to provide the best solution to the human’s problems. Inherently, these areas can not bring any construcive suggestion or ideas to make problems more clearly, by contrast, the participants would be trapped into passive conditions and patiently endure all the aftermaths. In a long term, people with this attitude would eschew reality and responsibilities; our society will be replete with pseudo-scientific speeches.

For another, the non-mainstream areas of inquiry become the means of charlatants to mislead the populace. Since it is unaccessible to assess the credibility of the fortune—teller’s words, people are easily trapped into the deception. At the time when they need the psychological comfort, people would rather to follow it, while the charlatans know very well how to make their magic credible and gain money from the dupes. It is possible that the dupes follow the way which the charlatans tell without questioning, which is more likely to be misled and go astray. Undoubtedly, exorbitant dependence on the fortune—teller would bring harmful effects on our society.
From what have been discussed above, non—mainstream areas of inquiry indeed do favor to human’s needs which is unaccessible for recent mainstream science. Nevertheless, those fields without empirical proof reject the criterion of science and will inherently do nothing but mislead the people when facing problems.

Amelia1214UID: 2228270

The speaker asserts that nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits exerts a[a去掉] positive effects to address human needs. As for me, although these areas meet human needs to certain extent, they also have potential negative effects on human lives, which far outweigh the benefits.

I concede that nonmainstream fields--astrology, fortune-telling, psychic and paranormal pursuits-- cater to the human needs in some cases. In the first place, the reason why populace is ardent to these fields is that human is born of the nature of curiosity and exploration to uncharted territories. The increasing development of the mainstream areas--science and technology—happens to illustrate this point. After all[这个地方应该用Nevertheless等表示"但是,然而”吧], the recent outcome of science and technology could not serve the needs which human wishes to know about their future and destiny. Such startling desire impels human to turn to [a]stack of tarot cards or fortune-tellers for answer.

In the second place, it is undeniable that participating in nonmainstream areas of inquiry alleviate[alleviate] participant’s pains[participants’ pain, pain作为肉体上或精神上的痛苦来讲是不可数的;身体的疼痛可数], both mentally and psychologically. People experience common things in mundane lives involving making choices and decisions and therefore enduring[endure, 感觉用endure不是很好] the consequences. Oftentimes, people are afraid of making choices because they are more scared of facing miserable aftermath. For this reason, people turning to fortune—tellers for suggestion would be[be多余, escape]] escaped from the dilemma to make choices and regretful feelings about undesirable aftereffects. Even if[这里用even if句子之间的关系不对,前面已经在说人们要逃避带来的痛苦了,这里再说”即使结果是痛苦的”就显得多余] the consequence is anguished, people would natrually arrtibute it to the destiny determined by God. Indeed, nonmainstream fields of inquiry respond to the needs of hunams and prevent them from bogging into panic suffers[suffer去掉].

While aside from the ostensibly psychological comfort to humans, non—mainstream areas of inquriy can not manifest in itself in benefiting other aspects of the scoiety,[句号] by contrast, there lies potential harmful effects on our everyday lives. My point of contention with the speaker involve[involves] two aspects. For one aspect, these areas stem from irrational imagination and illusion rather than creditable reasoning; they simply cater to the needs of human speculatively and its initial intent is not to provide the best solution[solutions] to the human’s problems. Inherently, these areas can not bring any construcive suggestion or ideas to make problems more clearly,[句号] by contrast, the participants would be trapped into passive conditions and patiently endure all the aftermaths. In a long term, people with this attitude would eschew reality and responsibilities; our society will be replete with pseudo-scientific speeches.

For another, the non-mainstream areas of inquiry become the means of charlatants to mislead the populace. Since it is unaccessible to assess the credibility of the fortune—teller’s words, people are easily trapped into the deception. At the time when they need the psychological comfort, people would rather to follow it, while the charlatans know very well how to make their magic credible and gain money from the dupes. It is possible that the dupes follow the way which the charlatans tell without questioning, which is more likely to be misled and go astray[这句有问题]. Undoubtedly, exorbitant dependence on the fortune—teller would bring harmful effects on our society.
From what have been discussed above, non—mainstream areas of inquiry indeed do favor to human’s needs which is unaccessible for recent mainstream science. Nevertheless, those fields without empirical proof reject the criterion of science and will inherently do nothing but mislead the people when facing problems.

整体感觉不错, 就是一些句子之间的逻辑关系要注意.
还有, 也可能是这个题目的原因, 主要是通过说理来论证的, 显得单调了一些

leonnieUID: 2216142

感谢Amelia在百忙之中为我改文章