issue150 [smile-B组] 第五次作业， 喜欢砖头雨！～

applehattieUID: 2195344

issue 150
"Because of television and worldwide computer connections, people can now become familiar with a great many places that they have never visited. As a result, tourism will soon become obsolete."

The speaker asserts that tourism will soon become obsolete, for the reason that people become familiar with many places that they have never visited with the aid of television and internet. However, in my view it not only might be quite conveniently for people to obtain a general impression of the places they have never toured but also can advocate to appeal people, who would like to travel to local place to experience the wonderful view themselves.

With the development of technology and science, the television and internet have knitted the world to be a seamless web of information, people can get access to large amounts of information concerning about one's attention. For instance, you might be informed by your friends that he know lots about China, which is one of the most attractive and beautiful countries in the world. Then he may tell you many interest of places and resorts of China, such as Great Wall, summer palace, West Lake and so forth, even the details like where they locate, how many years have they been standing there, and what the quaint stories about them. It is most likely that he had already visited China for many times, in fact he review and download those knowledge from television and internet.  People rely more and more on the modern high-tech tools to get familiar with the places that they have never had opportunity to tour, the overall world has become a small village. It seems to us that the tourism business would definitely decline since people can visit those places without moving their foot or paying for the tickets.

In contrast, the population of traveler would never decrease, it will bring more and more people to arrive to the resorts and spend their time and money willingly, because the primary function of the television and worldwide computer connection is to attract those people to visit the places through the approaches of advertising. By setting detailed description and vivid pictures of the instruction of the resorts, the agents or relative organizations intend to call people's attention and make every effort to appeal their potential customer. And it both benefits the consumers and the place that resorts locate, on the one hand, putting the information of these interest of places, people do not have to waste much time and energy to collect relative materials, only thing they should do is to click the mouse or remote control searching for instruction about the place which they want to visit over the internet or television; on the other hand, large number of travelers can enhance the local revenue and be an original impetus of development of the local economy. So, the tourism will not become obsolete, with the help of internet and TV.

In sum, although through the internet and television people can enjoy the places that they have never visited in the first time, it is promising that television and internet will play significant role in propagandize the place of tourism.

zhy5186612UID: 2167373

issue 150
"Because of television and worldwide computer connections, people can now become familiar with a great many places that they have never visited. As a result, tourism will soon become obsolete."

The speaker asserts that tourism will soon become obsolete, for the reason that people become familiar with many places that they have never visited with the aid of television and internet [直接说你观点就行了，这不是argument不用复述]. However, in my view it not only might be quite conveniently for people to obtain a general impression of the places they have never toured but also can advocate to appeal people, [ in my view，  not only might it be quite conveniently for people to obtain a general impression of the places they have never toured， but also can （it） advocate to appeal people,] who would like to travel to local place to experience the wonderful view themselves.我们观点一致阿，电视其实只是起了广告作用

With the development of technology and science, the television and internet have knitted the world to be a seamless web of information, people can get access to large amounts of information concerning about one's attention [attention--interest] . For instance, you might be informed by your friends that he know [-s or knew] lots about China, which is one of the most attractive and beautiful countries in the world. Then he may tell you many interest of places and resorts of China, such as Great Wall, summer palace, West Lake and so forth, even the details like where they locate, how many years have they been standing there, and what the quaint stories about them. It is most likely that he had already visited China for many times, in fact he review and download those knowledge from television and internet [你最好直接说从电视或web了解的，不用朋友告诉了，更切题].  People rely more and more on the modern high-tech tools to get familiar with the places that they have never had opportunity to tour, the overall world has become a small village. It seems to us that the tourism business would definitely decline since people can visit those places without moving their foot or paying for the tickets.

In contrast, the population of traveler would never decrease, it will bring more and more people to arrive to the resorts and spend their time and money willingly, because the primary function of the television and worldwide computer connection is to attract those people to visit the places through the approaches of advertising. By setting detailed description and vivid pictures of the instruction of the resorts, the agents or relative organizations intend to call people's attention and make every effort to appeal their potential customer. And it both benefits the consumers and the place that[that--where] resorts locate, on the one hand, putting the information of these interest of places, people do not have to waste much time and energy to collect relative materials, only thing they should do [only thing should they  do ] is to click the mouse or remote control searching for instruction about the place which they want to visit over the internet or television; on the other hand, large number of travelers can enhance the local revenue and be an original impetus of development of the local economy. So, the tourism will not become obsolete, with the help of internet and TV.

In sum, although through the internet and television people can enjoy the places that they have never visited in the first time, it is promising that television and internet will play significant role in propagandize the place of tourism.
总体评价
1 不错的，很少犯错了，我每次从PP3.1里拷贝出来总是一堆拼写错误 郁闷死了
2 有些观点，比如第二段电视和网络的广告作用和旅游的互利性分开写 可能内容更充实
:victory:

smiles11UID: 2232631

issue 150
"Because of television and worldwide computer connections, people can now become familiar with a great many places that they have never visited. As a result, tourism will soon become obsolete."

The speaker asserts that tourism will soon become obsolete, for the reason that people become familiar with many places that they have never visited with the aid of television and internet. However, in my view it not only might be quite conveniently for people to obtain a general impression of the places they have never toured but also can advocate to appeal people, who would like to travel to local place to experience the wonderful view themselves.

With the development of technology and science, the television and internet have knitted the world to be a seamless web of information, people can get access to large amounts of information concerning about one's attention. For instance, you might be informed by your friends that he know lots about China, which is one of the most attractive and beautiful countries in the world. Then he may tell you many interest of places and resorts of China, such as Great Wall, summer palace, West Lake and so forth, even the details like where they locate, how many years have they been standing there, and what the quaint stories about them. It is most likely that he had already visited China for many times, in fact he review and download those knowledge from television and internet.  People rely more and more on the modern high-tech tools to get familiar with the places that they have never had opportunity to tour, the overall world has become a small village. It seems to us that the tourism business would definitely decline since people can visit those places without moving their foot or paying for the tickets. 你可以讲朋友告诉，但是从未到过中国的朋友，知道得比你多，似乎到过的地方也比你多，这样也满有说服力的。

In contrast---看来看去，还是觉得这个短语不顺眼，都是转折，还是看看在什么情况下用吧？, the population of traveler would never decrease, it will bring more and more people to arrive to---可以不用的 the resorts and spend their time and money willingly, because the primary function of the television and worldwide computer connection is to attract those people to visit the places through the approaches of advertising. By setting detailed description and vivid pictures of the instruction of the resorts----好像没有说完？, the agents or relative organizations intend to call people's attention and make every effort to appeal their potential customer. And it both benefits the consumers and the place that resorts locate, on the one hand, putting the information of these interest of places, people do not have to waste much time and energy to collect relative materials, only thing they should do is to click the mouse or remote control searching for instruction about the place which they want to visit over the internet or television; on the other hand--有轻微转折的意味，所以还是少用, large number of travelers can enhance the local revenue and be an original impetus of development of the local economy---这句好像和主题没有关系，但是如果讲他们又将钱用于旅游资源的开发和保护就有关了. So, the tourism will not become obsolete, with the help of internet and TV.

In sum, although through the internet and television people can enjoy the places that they have never visited in the first time, it is promising that television and internet will play significant role in propagandize the place of tourism.

挺好的，看了很舒服，因为不怎么用改错别字，我们的作文都没有做到呢，所以向你学习！大家都到这个程度，进步就会更快的，加油！

yxjessieUID: 194526

issue 150
"Because of television and worldwide computer connections, people can now become familiar with a great many places that they have never visited. As a result, tourism will soon become obsolete."

The speaker asserts that tourism will soon become obsolete, for the reason that people become familiar with many places that they have never visited with the aid of television and internet. However, in my view, it not only might be quite conveniently for people to obtain a general impression of the places they have never toured but also can advocate to appeal people, who would like to travel to local place to experience the wonderful view themselves.

With the development of technology and science, the television and internet have knitted the world to be a seamless web of information, people can(个人感觉用are able to) get access to large amounts of information concerning about one's attention. For instance, you might be informed by your friends that he know(s) lots about China, which is one of the most attractive and beautiful countries in the world. Then he may tell you many interest of places and resorts of China, such as Great Wall, summer palace,(大写) West Lake and so forth, even the details like where they locate, how many years have they been standing there, and what the quaint stories about them. It is most likely that he had already visited China for many times, (. But) in fact he review and download those knowledge from television and internet.  People rely more and more on the modern high-tech tools to get familiar with the places that they have never had opportunity to tour, the overall world has become a small village. It seems to us that the tourism business would definitely decline since people can visit those places without moving their foot or paying for the tickets.

In contrast, the population of traveler would never decrease, it will bring more and more people to arrive to(at) the resorts and spend their time and money willingly, because the primary function of the television and worldwide computer connection is to attract those people to visit the places through the approaches of advertising. By setting detailed description and vivid pictures of the instruction of the resorts, the agents (travel agents) or relative organizations intend to call people's attention and make every effort to appeal their potential customer. And it both benefits the consumers and the place that resorts locate, on the one hand, putting the information of these interest of places, people do not have to waste much time and energy to collect relative materials, only (the one)thing they should do is to click the mouse or remote(remote不能用click吧) control searching for instruction about the place which they want to visit over the internet or television; on the other hand, large number of travelers can enhance the local revenue and be an original impetus of development of the local economy. So, the tourism will not become obsolete, with the help of internet and TV.

In sum, although through the internet and television people can enjoy the places that they have never visited in the first time, it is promising that television and internet will play significant role in propagandize the place of tourism.

感觉你这篇文章应该是大负小正的，可是第只有第三段说明了负观点，展开的不够深入，而且最好能有两段的解释，也许是你时间不够吧。有时间的话再想想负的观点怎么展开。

[ 本帖最后由 yxjessie 于 2006-8-2 22:40 编辑 ]