argument71 我们的九月小组-----第十次作业

maggie-leeUID: 2220892

In this analysis, the arguer comes to the conclusion that the amount of electricity utilized in the copper-extraction industry is expected to reduce to a large extent. In order to validate the allegation, the arguer provides some statistical facts on the amount of electricity consumed under new and old methods respectively. Unfortunately, the limited and insufficient evidences are not able to support the claim.

To begin with, a critical assumption underlying in this analysis that the universal availability of ore with high proportion of copper. However, the arguer fails to provide any evidence to convince us that this kind of ore containing much copper is available. Generally speaking, the abundance of mineral resource and the quality of the ore is fixed in a region; meanwhile the import of ore from other places might be costly. Therefore, whether there is enough high quality copper ore is still open to doubt.

Nevertheless, the new technology will bring such a signigicant saving of electricity as stated in the analysis specially when the ore containing high proportion of copper is used in the production. Therefore, the nonexistence of sufficient high quality ore will result in the failure of new technology.  

Secondly, granted that the high quality copper ore exists extensively, the arguer fails to convince us that the majority of the local enterprise or manufacturers will adopt the innovative technologies to extract copper from ore in the production process. Specifically, the potential causes are various and understandable. For instance, the exploitation of new technology require the relevant expensive equipments, nevertheless, most enterprise might not be able to afford the price. Also, it is equally possible that the factories have got no staff who can manipulate the relevant machine. In a word, no evidence is provided to substantiate that the new technology has been universally utilized in the production.

In addition, the conclusion is reached regardless of the production output. For instance, if the production has been on the increase significantly due to the dramatic market demand for raw copper, the factories probably would increase the input to produce more, which implies that more ore need to be processed. Then the amount of electricity for extracting copper from ore will probably augment even the new technologies have been exploited, because the consumed electricity for more output  might outweigh and surpass the saved electricity due new technology. To make the claim acceptable, the arguer should provide more information concerning the concrete condition in the industry.

To sum up, the provided evidences in this analysis is insufficient and unconvincing; therefore they cannot appropriately substantiate the assumptions and conclusion. To strengthen the claim, the arguer has to present more persuasive evidence concerning the relevant condition on the new technology, and the availability of the ore.

juzijuntuanUID: 2231815

In this analysis, the arguer comes to the conclusion that the amount of electricity utilized in the copper-extraction industry is expected to reduce to a large extent. In order to validate the allegation, the arguer provides some statistical facts on the amount of electricity consumed under new and old methods respectively. Unfortunately, the limited and insufficient evidences are not able to support the claim.

To begin with, a critical assumption underlying in this analysis that the universal availability of ore with high proportion of copper. However, the arguer fails to provide any evidence to convince us that this kind of ore containing much copper is available. Generally speaking, the abundance of mineral resource and the quality of the ore is fixed in a region; meanwhile the import of ore from other places might be costly. Therefore, whether there is enough high quality copper ore is still open to doubt.

Nevertheless, the new technology will bring such a signigicant saving of electricity as stated in the analysis specially when the ore containing high proportion of copper is used in the production. Therefore, the nonexistence of sufficient high quality ore will result in the failure of new technology.  

Secondly, granted that the high quality copper ore exists extensively, the arguer fails to convince us that the majority of the local enterprise or manufacturers will adopt the innovative technologies to extract copper from ore in the production process. Specifically, the potential causes are various and understandable. For instance, the exploitation of new technology require the relevant expensive equipments, nevertheless, most enterprise might not be able to afford the price. Also, it is equally possible that the factories have got no staff who can manipulate the relevant machine. In a word, no evidence is provided to substantiate that the new technology has been universally utilized in the production.

In addition, the conclusion is reached regardless of the production output. For instance, if the production has been on the increase significantly due to the dramatic market demand for raw copper, the factories probably would increase the input to produce more, which implies that more ore need to be processed. Then the amount of electricity for extracting copper from ore will probably augment even the new technologies have been exploited, because the consumed electricity for more output  might outweigh and surpass the saved electricity due new technology. To make the claim acceptable, the arguer should provide more information concerning the concrete condition in the industry.

To sum up, the provided evidences in this analysis is insufficient and unconvincing; therefore they cannot appropriately substantiate the assumptions and conclusion. To strengthen the claim, the arguer has to present more persuasive evidence concerning the relevant condition on the new technology, and the availability of the ore.


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