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既然学习过了, 就顺便发表一下看法吧~
Prior to hastily advise left-handers to pursue a business career, whereas right-handers to imitate the left-handers, the reasoning of this suggestion should be closely scrutinized from other angles. The author alleges that the left-handers are more likely to succeed in business, without considering other potential alternatives, which may severely undermine the credibility of the final suggestion.
A threshold fallacy with this argument involves the study’s statistically unreliability. Firstly, we are not informed whether the 1,000 prominent business executives is representative enough to reflect the general situation. Failing to infer the sampling process, it is highly possible that those people are selected beforehand by the researcher.[我写的时候觉得这个是弱攻击, 你这里反击似乎也不很有力] Also, the quantity of respondents is only 1,000, which is too limited to be statistically significant. Secondly, the author simply equates the people who wrote with left hand with people who are left-handed, which is obviously unwarranted. To be specific, some people could write with both hands, whereas some people who are right-handed are also able to write with left-handed. If so, those people cannot be included in the left-handers, which subsequently make the 21 percent insignificant. [我写的时候觉得这个有些无理, 也没有写, sigh…] Thirdly, the comparison between 21 percent and 11 percent is unreasonable to some extent[somehow]. Actually, to evaluate the real situation, the author needs the[to] compare the 21 percent with [all我觉得有必要强调一下] the left-handers [percentage] who are pursuing a career in business rather than the general population, which, of course, includes children, the old, and so forth.[赫赫, 这个问题我也有说] Therefore, from these three perspectives, unless the author provides more information about the study, it is hasty and risky to accept the result of the study and base the following deduction on it.
Additionally, providing the study is valid, the author fails to establish a reliable relationship between left-handers and business success. Actually, a myriad of other reasons could help to explain this phenomenon. Possibly, the business success is because the left-handers are diligent people who are studying hard and working hard, and consequently become success. Or possibly, they are promoted to the business executives due to their intimate relationship with their boss rather than their so-called capabilities. In short, no strong data is given to solidify the asserted relationship. Thus, any of these scenarios, if true, may undermine the relationship. [手不一定是成功的原因我承认, 但为什么容易被promote? 而且这种事情同时在1000人身上发生似乎也不大可能吧.]
[另外我觉得这一个攻击点是不是不大合适, 作者只是声称左手更容易成功, 即使如你所说是因为他们左手, 而更勤奋, 或人际关系更好, 但是最终不管过程, 还是左手者更容易取得成功, 还是证明了作者的论点.]
Furthermore, even if the causal relationship is substantiated, it is unwarranted to recommend those left-handers need pursue a career in business, and those right-handers imitate left-handers. On the one hand, consider the left-handers. Though they may be successful in business area, without the information about what the situation is in other areas like education, politics, arts, it is presumptuous to urge them to pursue a career in business. Perhaps, they can be better off in those areas besides the business. As a result, they can pursue a career in those areas as well. In return[? To this point似乎更适合], the business area cannot be the left-handers[‘] only choice. On the other hand, consider the right-handers. Common sense tells us that a successful career involves various factors, say education, experience, intelligence and etc. Whether merely imitating left-handers could be helpful to right-handers in business is open to doubt. It is completely possible that some innate left-handed genius in business are hardly be imitated by right-handers. Meanwhile, as the saying goes, “Every roads lead to Roma”, [赞, 第一次看到A中用引言的] the right-handers also have their own approach to achieve the business success, instead of the mere imitation. Failing to see the potential differences, the arguer's analogical deduction is not justifiable. Hence, taking there two points into consideration, lacking further evidence about the recommendations, the speaker cannot convince us that these two suggestion is the best and the only way for left-handers and right-handers respectively.
[和楼上不一样, 我觉得这一段写的最好, 典型的D风格, 呵呵]
On conclusion, the argument is not well reasoned and inherently flawed. To buttress up the final suggestion, the author is required to provide detailed sampling process about the study, to make the study reliable. Moreover, if we can be offered with more substantial evidence to prove the causal relationship, the conclusion could be further persuasive. |
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