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The following appeared in an editorial in a business magazine.

"Although the sales of Whirlwind video games have declined over the past two years, a recent survey of video-game players suggests that this sales trend is about to be reversed. The survey asked video-game players what features they thought were most important in a video game. According to the survey, players prefer games that provide lifelike graphics, which require the most up-to-date computers. Whirlwind has just introduced several such games with an extensive advertising campaign directed at people 10 to 25 years old, the age-group most likely to play video games. It follows, then, that the sales of Whirlwind video games are likely to increase dramatically in the next few months."
尽管Whirlwind游戏公司的游戏销量在过去两年中下降了，最近一次对于电子游戏玩家的调查显示这种销售趋势可能会逆转。该调查询问游戏玩家对于一个游戏来说他们所认为的最重要特征是什么。根据调查结果，玩家倾向于那些需要最先进的电脑的，具有活灵活现图象的游戏。Whirlwind刚刚面向10－25岁的人群开展了大力的广告活动来推广若干此类游戏，10－25岁是最喜欢玩游戏的年龄层。这说明Whirlwind公司的游戏销量将会在未来几个孕猛增。
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1 Whirlwind游戏公司忽视了游戏的其他特征
2 调查并不是针对10－25岁的人
3 并不是每个人都有最先进的电脑
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The article conclude that the sales of Whirlwind video games are likely to increase dramatically in the next few mouths. On the surface, this article seems logical, nevertheless, oweing to invalid survey, the article fails to be convincing. As the article provide, Whirwind has just introducd several game, and these games provide lifelike graphics, but, merely based on theses dubious evidence, no one could draw a valid conclusion.
In the first place, whirlwind neglects to mention other features, and it is possible that other features are also uesful. Although the lifelike graphics is the most important one, only through the improvement in graphics, Whirlwind is unlikely to reverse the edded sales. After all a popular game should owns multitude of advantages which could cause a everlasting interest. For instance, the music.The desirable music influence our attitude to video game as same as to a movie.Another example is the plot, if the game is based on an ravishingly story, the plot will be an additional attraction. In a word, whirlwind require comprehensive improvement, not just from graphics.
In the second place, the games, which are introduced by Whirlwind, direct at people 10 to 25 years old, but the survey faced to entire video-game players. Even if we concede that people 10 to 25 years old are more likely to play video game, as this age-group is so limited, it is aburd to disregard other players. Adults are willing to play the game because of the tension from socity and community. Even children like play video games, since morden life increase the gap of people, and the pupils does not have enough playmates.It is more likely that other age-group have larger amount than 10 to 25 years old. In conclusion, it is need to make a further survey to see clear the current situation.
In the third place, the game require up to date computer is hardly to prevail over the whole socity.It is likely that up to date computers is too luxuriant to people 10 to 25 years old afford. The teenagers pay most time at shool, and they does not earn money at all, and peoples just graduate equally lacks income. Fitting most computers, the video game will be gratful.
To sum up, the article lacks credibility information to support the arguer’s assumption, and the arguer make fallacies to draw the conclusion from the groundless survey. To accuratly judge the instance, further ivestigation is required.

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The article conclude that the sales of Whirlwind video games are likely to increase dramatically in the next few mouths. On the surface, this article seems logical, nevertheless, oweing to invalid survey, the article fails to be convincing. As the article provides, Whirwind has just introducd several games, and these games provide lifelike graphics, but, merely based on theses dubious evidence, no one could draw a valid conclusion.
In the first place, whirlwind neglects to mention other features, and it is possible that other features are also useful. Although the lifelike graphics is the most important one, only through the improvement in graphics, Whirlwind is unlikely to reverse the edded sales. After all a popular game should owns multitude of advantages which could cause a everlasting interest. For instance, the music.The desirable music influence our attitude to video game as same as (可以这么表达么？)to a movie.Another example is the plot, if the game is based on an ravishingly story, the plot will be an additional attraction. In a word, whirlwind require comprehensive improvement, not just from graphics.
In the second place, the games, which are introduced by Whirlwind, direct at people 10 to 25 years old, but the survey faced to entire video-game players. Even if we concede that people 10 to 25 years old are more likely to play video game, as this age-group is so limited, it is aburd to disregard other players. Adults are willing to play the game because of the tension from socity and community. Even children like play video games, since morden life increase the gap of people, and the pupils does not have enough playmates.It is more likely that other age-group have larger amount than 10 to 25 years old. In conclusion, it needs to make a further survey to see clear the current situation.
In the third place, the game require up to date computer is hardly to prevail over the whole socity.It is likely that up to date computers is too luxuriant to people 10 to 25 years old afford. The teenagers pay most time at shool, and they does not earn money at all, and peoples just graduate equally lacks income. Fitting most computers, the video game will be gratful?.
To sum up, the article lacks credibility information to support the arguer’s assumption, and the arguer make fallacies to draw the conclusion from the groundless survey. To accurate judge the instance, further ivestigation is required.


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