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235.The following appeared in a memorandum from the general manager of KNOW radio station.

"Several factors indicate that radio station KNOW should shift its programming from rock-and-roll music to a continuous news format. Consider, for example, the number of older people in our listening area has increased dramatically, while the total number of our listeners has recently declined. Also, music stores in our area report decreased sales of recorded music. Finally, continuous news stations in neighboring cities have been very successful, and a survey taken just before the recent election shows that local citizens are interested in becoming better informed about politics."

若干因素表明KNOW电台应该把它的节目从摇滚乐转成连续的新闻节目。举例来说，我们覆盖范围内的老年人数量显著增加，而总的听众数量最近减少了。而且，我们地区音像店中录制音乐的销量下降。最后，邻近城市的连续新闻节目非常成，最近大选前组织的一次调查显示，本地居对于及时的政治报导很感兴趣。
分析：
结论：radio station KNOW should shift its program
论据：1.more older people in our listening area increase, while the total number of our listeners has recently decline.
      2. music stores in our area report decreased sales of recorded music.
      3. (comparison) success in neighboring cities
      4. a survey taken just before the recent election shows that local citizens are interested in becoming better informed about politics.
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感觉开头不够精练！ 希望多提提意见

In this memorandum, the manager concludes that radio station KNOW should shift its programming from rock-and roll music to a continuous news format. To support that, he points out several facts: the increase in the number of older people in their listening; the decrease in sales of recorded music; the success of continuous news stations in neighboring cities; fourth; a survey taken before the recent election showing interests of local citizens in becoming better informed about politics. At first glance, the argument seems plausible. However, through close consideration we can find that there are several flaws there.

First of all, the fact that the number of older people in their listening area has increased, while the total number of their listeners has recently declined, has little indication that a continuous news format will attract more listeners. Although there are more older people listen to their program, the total number of older people may be still a very small part of the listeners. Young people may always take the primary part. In this case, if KNOW radio station has changed their program from rock-and roll music to a continuous news format, they may lose a large listeners and the popularity of their radio may decline.

Further, the manager has made several false comparisons. One of false comparisons is that the decrease in sales of recorded music reported by music stores has nothing to do that people's interests toward rock-and-roll decreased. To the opposite, it is very likely that as people becomes more interested in listening to the radio and they no longer buy recorded music because it will save much money. The other one is that the success of continuous news stations in neighboring cities may have no link with that that will also realize in their area. No information shows that the situations are very similar in neighboring cities and their area. So it is hardly to say that a continuous news format will be success in KNOW radio station.

Finally, a survey taken before the recent election showing interests of local citizens in becoming better informed about politics have little indication about that people will also keep the same attitude in future. As the recent election is often a big event to people, there will be a period that people highly concerned to the reports on it. But it will not take a long time, as a result of which it is very possible that after the election few people would still listen to the radio.

To sum up, the manager’s recommendation is not sound, because most of his assumptions are unsubstantiated. To well support his recommendation, he should take more information to investigate what kind of people are like a continuous news format and analyze that whether they take a large part of total listeners. Take more information from other radio stations and check that whether some of it will help KNOW radio station in transforming its programming from rock-and-roll music to a continuous news format.

[ 本帖最后由 ChunyanLi2005 于 2006-8-22 23:27 编辑 ]

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235.The following appeared in a memorandum from the general manager of KNOW radio station.

"Several factors indicate that radio station KNOW should shift its programming from rock-and-roll music to a continuous news format. Consider, for example, the number of older people in our listening area has increased dramatically, while the total number of our listeners has recently declined. Also, music stores in our area report decreased sales of recorded music. Finally, continuous news stations in neighboring cities have been very successful, and a survey taken just before the recent election shows that local citizens are interested in becoming better informed about politics."

若干因素表明KNOW电台应该把它的节目从摇滚乐转成连续的新闻节目。举例来说，我们覆盖范围内的老年人数量显著增加，而总的听众数量最近减少了。而且，我们地区音像店中录制音乐的销量下降。最后，邻近城市的连续新闻节目非常成，最近大选前组织的一次调查显示，本地居对于及时的政治报导很感兴趣。
分析：
结论：radio station KNOW should shift its program
论据：1.more older people in our listening area increase, while the total number of our listeners has recently decline.
      2. music stores in our area report decreased sales of recorded music.
      3. (comparison) success in neighboring cities
      4. a survey taken just before the recent election shows that local citizens are interested in becoming better informed about politics.
限时没成功          ÈÕÆÚ£º8/21/2006                     527words
感觉开头不够精练！ 希望多提提意见

In this memorandum, the manager concludes that radio station KNOW should shift its programming from rock-and roll music to a continuous news format. To support that, he points out several facts: the increase in the number of older people in their listening; the decrease in sales of recorded music; the success of continuous news stations in neighboring cities; fourth; a survey taken before the recent election showing interests of local citizens in becoming better informed about politics. At first glance, the argument seems plausible. However, through close consideration we can find that there are several flaws there.
（建议多些句式变换，另外新东方说argument开头写100多字很正常，能有效增加字数，不过下面论证不能太简短，以免显得头大）
First of all, the fact that the number of older people in their listening area has increased, while the total number of their listeners has recently declined, has little indication that a continuous news format will attract more listeners. Although there are more older people listen to their program, the total number of older people may be still a very small part of the listeners. Young people may always take the primary part. In this case, if KNOW radio station has changed their program from rock-and roll music to a continuous news format, they may lose a large listeners and the popularity of their radio may decline.

Further, the manager has made several false comparisons. One of false comparisons is that the decrease in sales of recorded music reported by music stores has nothing to do that people's interests toward rock-and-roll decreased. To the opposite, it is very likely that as people becomes more interested in listening to the radio and they no longer buy recorded music because it will save much money. The other one is that the success of continuous news stations in neighboring cities may have no link with that that will also realize in their area. No information shows that the situations are very similar in neighboring cities and their area. So it is hardly to say that a continuous news format will be success（successful） in KNOW radio station.
(论点还比较新)
Finally, a survey taken before the recent election showing interests of local citizens in becoming better informed about politics have（has） little indication about that people will also keep the same attitude in future.（最好换个句式了，这个和上面一段句式一样） As the recent election is often a big event to people, there will be a period that people highly concerned（concern） to the reports on it. But it will not take a long time, as a result of which it is very possible that after the election few people would still listen to the radio.

To sum up, the manager’s recommendation is not sound, because most of his assumptions are unsubstantiated. To well support his recommendation, he should take more information to investigate what kind of people are like a continuous news format and analyze that whether they take a large part of total listeners. Take more information from other radio stations and check that whether some of it will help KNOW radio station in transforming its programming from rock-and-roll music to a continuous news format.
总体来说很不错，我打5分
但最好注意一下句子和用词的多样性
另外再互拍一篇吧~~issue69
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In this memorandum, the manager concludes that radio station KNOW should shift its programming from rock-and roll music to a continuous news format. To support that, he points out several facts: the increase in the number of older people in their listening; the decrease in sales of recorded music; the success of continuous news stations in neighboring cities; fourth; a survey taken before the recent election showing interests of local citizens in becoming better informed about politics. (到这里为止，都是复述，我觉得多了，纯个人观点)At first glance, the argument seems plausible. However, through close consideration we can find that there are several flaws there.

First of all, the fact that the number of older people in their listening area has increased, while the total number of their listeners has recently declined, has little indication that a continuous news format will attract more listeners. Although there are more older people listen to their program, the total number of older people may be still a very small part of the listeners. Young people may always take the primary part. In this case, if KNOW radio station has changed their program from rock-and roll music to a continuous news format, they may lose a large listeners and the popularity of their radio may decline.(不错)

Further, the manager has made several false comparisons. One of false comparisons is that the decrease in sales of recorded music reported by music stores has nothing to do (with?) that people's interests toward rock-and-roll decreased. To the opposite, it is very likely that as people becomes more interested in listening to the radio and they no longer buy recorded music because it(指代不明，少用代词) will save much money. The other one is that the success of continuous news stations in neighboring cities may have no link with that that(两个that在一起好别缪啊，虽然没问题，是不是可以用it表示news呢？) will also realize in their area. No information shows that the situations are very similar in neighboring cities and their area. (这块有待加强，为什么不一定一样呢，什么样的不一样会导致谬误呢？为了说明他们的一致，作者是不是要进行一个什么什么调查呢？)So it is hardly to say that a continuous news format will be success in KNOW radio station.

Finally, a survey taken before the recent election showing interests of local citizens in becoming better informed about politics have little indication about that people will also keep the same attitude in future. As the recent election is often a big event to people, there will be a period that people highly concerned to the reports on it. But it will not take a long time, as a result of which it is very possible that after the election few people would still listen to the radio. (这段没问题。)

To sum up, the manager’s recommendation is not sound, because most of his assumptions are unsubstantiated. To well support his recommendation, he should take more information to investigate what kind of people are like a continuous news format and analyze that whether they take a large part of total listeners. Take more information from other radio stations and check that whether some of it will help KNOW radio station in transforming its programming from rock-and-roll music to a continuous news format

总的来说，语言很丰富，攻击点找得很准，但是总是觉得没有看范文那种拍案叫绝的感觉。
我给分：5

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有空的话，帮我看看这篇吧，限时没写完，只到620，后来又补充了一些话。谢谢阿.
Argument97

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In this memorandum, the manager concludes that radio station KNOW should shift its programming from rock-and roll music to a continuous news format. To support that, he points out several facts: the increase in the number of older people in their listening; the decrease in sales of recorded music; the success of continuous news stations in neighboring cities; fourth; a survey taken before the recent election showing interests of local citizens in becoming better informed about politics. At first glance, the argument seems plausible. However, through close consideration we can find that there are several flaws there. (开头确实应该精简，如果打字快，也可以，呵呵！）

First of all, the fact that the number of older people in their listening area has increased, while the total number of their listeners has recently declined, has little indication that a continuous news format will attract more listeners. Although there are more older people listen to their program, the total number of older people may be still a very small part of the listeners. Young people may always take the primary part. In this case, if KNOW radio station has changed their program from rock-and roll music to a continuous news format, they may lose a large listeners and the popularity of their radio may decline. （非常好！）

Further, the manager has made several false comparisons. One of false comparisons is that the decrease in sales of recorded music reported by music stores has nothing to do that people's interests toward rock-and-roll decreased. To the opposite,（每见过这么用的，可能是欧才疏学浅） it is very likely that as people becomes more interested in listening to the radio and they no longer buy recorded music because it will save much money. The other one is that the success of continuous news stations in neighboring cities may have no link with that that will also realize in their area. No information shows that the situations are very similar in neighboring cities and their area. So it is hardly to say that a continuous news format will be success （successful ? ) in KNOW radio station.

Finally, a survey taken before the recent election showing interests of local citizens in becoming better informed about politics have little indication about that people will also keep the same attitude in future. As the recent election is often a big event to people, there will be a period that people highly concerned to the reports on it. But it will not take a long time, as a result of which it is very possible that after the election few people would still listen to the radio. ( 这点好像不是很Sound？）

To sum up, the manager’s recommendation is not sound, because most of his assumptions are unsubstantiated. To well support his recommendation, he should take more information to investigate what kind of people are like a continuous news format and analyze that whether they take a large part of total listeners. Take more information from other radio stations and check that whether some of it  (  them? )  will help KNOW radio station in transforming its programming from rock-and-roll music to a continuous news format.