issue51 Myth小组第2次作业-phevos

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51"Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."

+ Firstly and fundamentally, the individual needs and interests are the most factors to stimulate the passion to study.
+Needs also leading our studying.
- However, the education is divided into two parts, the general one and the specified one. Over-specified education will narrow down students’ ken and capability of acclimation to future career.

TOPIC: ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
WORDS: 363          TIME: 0:45:00          DATE: 2006-10-21

Nowadays, education is more and more significant to people. When a man is born, the education to him starts. The parents teach him how to stand, how to walk and how to run when he is a baby. Then, the primary school, senior school, high school and university are on his education list. The problem is how to make education be more effective. The speaker suggests that it will be truly effective when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests. However, I partly agree with this assertion.

Firstly and fundamentally, the individual needs and interests are the most important factors to stimulate the passion for study. It is said that the interests are the best teacher. When we are studying, for example, there are several subjects, such as mathematics, physics, chemistry, history, etc. We usually have interests on some subjects, not all subjects. The subjects we are interest in usually will get a good score, representing that we study well on these subjects. The interest stimulates our desire to gain the unknown knowledge, to find answers to some issues, to learn more about the subjects. So the more time we spend in the interested subjects, the better we learn.

And, the needs will also lead our studying. When a person goes in to the society after graduation, the most important thing is what he can do. For example, in IT (information technology) area, the skill of coding in C/C++ is usually basically needed. If a man wants work in IT area, he has the desire for the C/C++ education.

However, the education is divided into two parts, the general one and the specified one, not both of them need to meet the individual needs and interests. When we are teenagers, the education for us is general. We have our own interest in certain subjects, but we also should have the knowledge of the subjects we do not have interest in. Because all the subjects are basic, most of us can not find the real interest in such a subject at such a young age. Moreover, Over-specified education will narrow down students' ken and capability of acclimation to future career. In today’s society, the person with several skills is much more welcome. So to teach students the general knowledge is also an significant factor that would make education more effective.

In conclusion, it is important that the education is specifically designed to meet to individual needs and interests, and it is also important to teach students the general knowledge.

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51"Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."

+ Firstly and fundamentally, the individual needs and interests are the most factors to stimulate the passion to study.
+Needs also leading our studying.把INTERESTS和NEEDS分开说有些成问题，毕竟二者本质上是一致的
- However, the education is divided into two parts, the general one and the specified one. Over-specified education will narrow down students’ ken and capability of acclimation to future career.

TOPIC: ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
WORDS: 363          TIME: 0:45:00          DATE: 2006-10-21

Nowadays, education is more and more significant to people. When a man is born, the education to him starts. The parents teach him how to stand, how to walk and how to run when he is a baby. Then, the primary school, senior school, high school and university are on his education list. 这段显得有些多余，即不能强化论点，也不能对后文的行文结构和论证做出贡献The problem is how to make education be more effective. The speaker suggests that it will be truly effective when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests. However, I partly agree with this assertion.自己的观点是什么没有说，很不利于后面的论证

Firstly and fundamentally, the individual needs and interests are the most important factors to stimulate the passion for study. It is said that the interests are the best teacher. When we are studying, for example, there are several subjects, such as mathematics, physics, chemistry, history, etc. We usually have interests on some subjects, not all subjects. The subjects we are interest in usually will get a good score, representing that we study well on these subjects. The interest stimulates our desire to gain the unknown knowledge, to find answers to some issues, to learn more about the subjects. So the more time we spend in the interested subjects, the better we learn. 这一段都在泛泛而谈，而且什么有兴趣的会拿高分没做更深入的分析，缺乏细致到位的论证

And, the needs will also lead our studying. When a person goes in to the society after graduation, the most important thing is what he can do. For example, in IT (information technology) area, the skill of coding in C/C++ is usually basically needed. If a man wants work in IT area, he has the desire for the C/C++ education.
说句不客气的话，这段基本都跑题了，这里说的是Social needs，不是individual needs，这也是为什么我觉得那个提纲不妥当的原因，个人需求到底是什么？按照人本主义的观点，有1生存2物质享受3实现自我价值，而这些技能都是为了个人需求而迎合的社会需求，也就是说PHEVOS同学在这里把教育-个人需求-社会需求的中间环节给漏掉了

However, the education is divided into two parts, the general one and the specified one, not both of them need to meet the individual needs and interests. When we are teenagers, the education for us is general. We have our own interest in certain subjects, but we also should have the knowledge of the subjects we do not have interest in. Because all the subjects are basic, most of us can not find the real interest in such a subject at such a young age. Moreover, Over-specified education will narrow down students' ken and capability of acclimation to future career. In today’s society, the person with several skills is much more welcome. So to teach students the general knowledge is also an significant factor that would make education more effective.
这段作为发展也缺乏实际具体的例子

In conclusion, it is important that the education is specifically designed to meet to individual needs and interests, and it is also important to teach students the general knowledge.
结尾过于潦草，两句话都没有精确表达出之前的论点

总体而言这篇文章的提纲有些单薄，一般我们写ISSUE都是提出一个论点，然后说原因1，原因2，原因3……发展1，发展2，发展3……，但这个文章却是把论点拆成两个，然后分头论证，相对的也就显得单薄无力了。
我个人认为ETS不会在两个并列短语这种小地方做文章，它要说什么和什么，那么这两个基本是统一的，本质上讲是一回事，可以一起论证。
另外文章基本都在泛泛而谈，推理又不够连贯和严密，所以会让人看得一头雾水不知所云，建议把论证精简些，然后加入实际的例子，不用具体到哪个学校哪个人，只要假设一种现实的情况就可以了。