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第一次作业：
issue51
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-602407-1-1.html

[ 本帖最后由 dahaoren 于 2007-2-2 11:51 编辑 ]

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1： ISSUE51
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D1

2：第一篇Argument147
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=602582&page=1&extra=page%3D1#pid1769652349

3：ISSUE48
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-603681-1-1.html

4：ISSUE38
http://bbs.gter.ce.cn/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=604494&extra=page%3D2

5：argument17
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=604477&extra=page%3D1

6：issue41
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=605202&extra=page%3D1

7：argument38
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=607507&extra=page%3D1

8:issue185
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=607508&extra=page%3D1

9：argument65
http://bbs.gter.ce.cn/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=611198&extra=page%3D5

[ 本帖最后由 sylvie0211 于 2007-2-16 21:51 编辑 ]

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[ 本帖最后由 kexinyupiao 于 2007-2-12 11:32 编辑 ]

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[ 本帖最后由 xwqq2 于 2007-2-3 23:03 编辑 ]

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第一次作业
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第二次作业
谁有空就请帮我改一下，太感谢了
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第二次作业
谁有空就请帮我改一下，太感谢了
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第二次作业 Argument 147
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-602430-1-1.html

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT200 - Statistics collected from dentists indicate that three times more men than women faint while visiting the dentist. This evidence suggests that men are more likely to be distressed about having dental work done than women are. Thus, dentists who advertise to attract patients should target the male consumer and emphasize both the effectiveness of their anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of their staff to nervous or suffering patients.
WORDS: 179          TIME: 0:30:00          DATE: 2007-2-27

In this argument, the writer cites statistics collected from dentists and came into a conclusion that men are more likely to be distressed at the dentist’s. Based on this conclusion, he considered it was the male consumer who should be targeted with the anesthetic techniques and its service on the advertisement. However, in this article, the writer made several logical mistakes, and the conclusion is unwarranted.

Firstly, the writer fell to make it clear that how does the statistics come out, when and where was it  accounted. Maybe it is just a peculiarity which is not typical, insufficient representative. Or the male target group which had been surveyed is much greater that the number of female group, which made a larger number of men faint than women in the final statistics. What is also important, the writer should make sure that it is not out of date. So whether the statistics is warrant and suitable is still a problem. Even the statistics being proved justified, imagining, if man’s teeth are natively crispier than woman’s, and also likely to suffer more serious illness, it will actually cause fainting more continually. Without proving the statistics is justifiable, we can not agree with the conclusion.

Despite the considerations presented above, the writer could not make the assumption that men are more likely to be distressed. He has made logical mistakes here. In one point, fainting, the symptom, may be caused by numerous clinical reflections besides distress. For instance, pain or fever. Male patients who get more painful tooth illness or have a fever will faint in the dentist’s. Another case in this point is that distress may not cause fainting either.

Even imaging the conclusion is right, it is unfounded to target on male consumers. Children are more likely to get illness on tooth, when they have some thing wrong with their teeth, mostly they will ask their mother to send them to see the dentist. So who make the decision? Probably women do. So just target the male consumers for fixing their eyes on them is unwise and will lose a large pack of client.

What is more, people choose their dentists mainly depend on the quality and price. Emphasize both the effectiveness of their anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of their staff is not sufficient. If the price is too high, the dentist can not attract client too.

To sum it up, there is no convince that men are more likely to be distressed about having dental work done than women be before the writer precludes the other aspects and proves the statistics is justificative. And the fainting and distress does not have cause and conclusion relationship. The instructure of the technology and sensitivity will do effect is not sufficient. To make the article found, the author needs more evident.
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[ 本帖最后由 alice.shen 于 2007-3-2 22:04 编辑 ]

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第十次作业  ISSUE 50       https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=608101&extra=page%3D1
第十一次作业  issue 17       https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=608402&extra=page%3D1
请大家有空时能帮助批改一下!谢谢大家!有拍必会!
第十二次作业argument 137     https://bbs.gter.net/thread-608972-1-1.html                                                        
第十三次作业ISSUE208          http://bbs.gter.ce.cn/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=609727&extra
第十四次作业argument51         http://bbs.gter.ce.cn/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=610309&extra=
第十五次作业ISSUE36             http://bbs.gter.ce.cn/bbs/thread-610866-1-1.html
第十六次作业argument2 http://bbs.gter.ce.cn/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=611451&extra=
第二十三次作业  https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=615466&page=1&extra=#pid1769775570
第二十八次作业issue 152 https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=620378&extra=
                       argument 177  https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=623101&extra=
请大家帮我批改一下,有拍必回谢谢啦!

[ 本帖最后由 zdj 于 2007-3-8 09:34 编辑 ]

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原帖由 alice.shen 于 2007-2-8 23:26 发表
ARGUMENT200 - Statistics collected from dentists indicate that three times more men than women faint while visiting the dentist. This evidence suggests that men are more likely to be distr ...

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