argument147 [076g--背水一战小组]duduhaha的的第一篇a,求拍。

duduhahaUID: 2273118

提纲:
1.调查不可靠。
2.需要更新硬件，可能很多玩家做不到。
3.没有证据表明10到25岁的人最喜欢游戏，而且年轻人经济能力有限。
4.没有给出竞争对手和市场的相关信息。
The author asserts that after a 2-year decline in sales of video games, Whirlwind ,the company which has just introduced several games with lifelike graphics will succeed and gain a increase in sales.However, this argument suffers from several critical flaws and therefore is unconvincing.

Fisrt of all,the author fails to provide any information about the samples in the survey so that it isn't reasonable to come to the conclusion that players prefer games that
provide lifelike graphics. It's entirely possible that people who are interested in graphics were more willing to respond to the survey.And the players who are inclined to other features  in the games  such as story or music might care less about the survey.In a word,the more biased the survey's sample, the less reliable that the most important in a game is lifelike graphics.If Whirlwind provides games lacking in other important features,it'll probably face a declined sales trend.

Secondly,the new games's requirments for up-to-date computers will force the players to upgrade their hardwares.It's not realistic for most players to upgrade their computers with lots of money only for a game.

Thirdly,there is no indication that people aged 10 to 25 are most likely to play video games.So the advertising campaign might be a failure.Even though it's true that young people are more interested in games,we also know the fact this age group is not financially independent,how can they afford the expense?

Finally,it's entirely possible that a number of competing games companies may have excellent games to be released and it'll be a great challenge to Whirlwind.Without providing more information about the market, the author can't ensure that Whirlwind will undoubtedly receive a good sale.

In sum, the argument relies on certain unsubstantiated  assumptions, which make the conclusion unbelievable.To strengthen it, the author should provide detailed data about the survey of games.To better assess the argument, i also need to know the detailed infomation about its oppoents and the market.

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The author asserts that after a 2-year decline in sales of video games, Whirlwind ,the company which has just introduced several games with lifelike graphics will succeed and gain a increase in sales.However, this argument suffers from several critical flaws and therefore is unconvincing.好喜欢你写的开头哦，要好好学习一下

Fisrt of all,the author fails to provide any information about the samples in the survey so that it isn't reasonable to come to the conclusion that players prefer games that provide lifelike graphics. It's entirely possible that people who are interested in graphics were more willing to respond to the survey.And the players who are inclined to other features  in the games  such as story or music might care less about the survey.In a word,the more biased the survey's sample, the less reliable that the most important in a game is lifelike graphics.If Whirlwind provides games lacking in other important features,it'll probably face a declined sales trend.

Secondly,the new games's requirments for up-to-date computers will force the players to upgrade their hardwares.It's not realistic for most players to upgrade their computers with lots of money only for a game.这段会不会太少了点？论证的不充分

Thirdly,there is no indication that people aged 10 to 25 are most likely to play video games.So the advertising campaign might be a failure.Even though it's true that young people are more interested in games,we also know the fact this age group is not financially independent,how can they afford the expense?

Finally,it's entirely possible that a number of competing games companies may have excellent games to be released and it'll be a great challenge to Whirlwind.Without providing more information about the market, the author can't ensure that Whirlwind will undoubtedly receive a good sale.

In sum, the argument relies on certain unsubstantiated  assumptions, which make the conclusion unbelievable.To strengthen it, the author should provide detailed data about the survey of games.To better assess the argument, i also need to know the detailed infomation about its oppoents and the market.

这篇argue 的字数不够吧？感觉论证没有深入，不过思路倒是蛮清晰的，加油！

duduhahaUID: 2273118

是哈，阿公也在说我的问题呢，确实是写得比较烦，都懒得写了，呵呵。