issue51 【076G——背水一战】第二次作业

kylinUID: 2242436

51"Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."

——提纲——
reject
TS 这样做是不现实的  也不可能达到教育truly effective的效果
1.教育基本任务是扫盲。
a. common sense，needed by all students, cannot be ignored.
b.何况学生刚开始还不会独立思考 兴趣有时也只是whims 所以最开始应该先打基础。
2. Over-specific education will narrow students 知识范围（ken） 现在社会知识越来越多都是跨学科的 专业太细会影响自己对社会上新鲜事物、大量信息的接收量 这样教育就不可能truly effective了 反而detrimental
3.没有这样多的教育资源来满足每个individual 的要求

——正文——
The speaker would prefer the education is specifically designed for each students instead of serving to offer a unified educational system, as he/she opines that it is the only way to make education truly effective. I concede that the speaker's idea indeed responds today's tendency of student-centered education, but it seems that the proposition is too idealistic to go into effect, and it may finally undermine the function of education.

As it is known, the education's fundamental mission is enlightening and helping people escape from ignorance. Young students always lack the ability of analyzing and judging, and their interests are always whims that cannot endure long, so it is educators' duty to offer guidence until students are able to make up their mind. Besides, the common sense, only upon which the profound academic knowledge could be constructed, is essential to either individuals or society. Thus, even if there are people who are likely to be reluctant to absorb knowledge from some certain subjects, a common core curriculum should be provided for introducing basic knowledge, such as arithmetic, to all students. In a word, before students' independent thinking is built and the basic knowledge is instilled, education should not pursue for the higher goal of satisfying each students' own preference.

Furthermore, over-specific education will narrow students' ken. If the educational system adopts the policy of only feeding knowledge to students following what they like, instead of making positive effects to students' development, however, it is probably that the method would impair their further studying and even set obstacles in their daily life. For instance, a student who is talented in the language while has never been taught how to count numbers, may be fooled when pay bills--even though he/she can speak several languages. On the other hand, with the era of information explode and the advancing technology, people always exposure to overflowing fresh things which sometimes are complicated. Hence, over-specific education, which brings about lacking knowledge of interdisciplinarity,may impede people to understand new concepts and utilize advanced tools to benefit their daily life.

Meanwhile, it is unfeasible to design an educational system to content each student’s needs and interests, as no government or organization could afford the consumption of tremendous teaching resources required by this project. Especially in some populous countries, such as China, which owns 300 million students, can hardly ensure the quality of instruction to each individual is equally high. Therefore, if the "education of truly effective" is defined as the speaker maintains, those countries may never achieve the state.

In sum, the specifically designing education for catering to inclination of each student is an unwise method as well as impractical. This over-specific education is even detrimental to both individuals and nations in long-term, as a truly effective one should offer enough basic knowledge to all students and broaden their ken.

[ 本帖最后由 kylin 于 2007-2-5 13:57 编辑 ]

tongwawawUID: 2176887

The speaker would prefer(偶就想不出来这么说~) the education is specifically designed for each students instead of serving to offer a unified educational system,(perfer a to b a和b是不是应该都是名词形式啊) as he/she opines that it is the only way to make education truly effective. I concede that the speaker's idea indeed responds today's tendency of student-centered education, but it seems that the proposition is too idealistic to go into effect, and it may finally undermine the function of education.

As it is known, the education's fundamental mission is enlightening and helping people escape from being illiterates(看着有点别扭啊 ignorance行吗:). Young students always lack the ability of analyzing and judgement(judging比较对称啊), and their interests are always whims that cannot endure long, so it is educators' duty to offer guidence until students are able to make up their mind. Besides, the common sense, only upon which the profound academic knowledge could be constructed, is essential to either individuals or society. Thus, even if there are people who are likely to be reluctant to absorb knowledge from some certain subjects, a common core curriculum should be provided for introducing(感觉多余啦) basic knowledge, such as arithmetic, to all students. In a word, before students' independent thinking is built and the basic knowledge is instilled, education should not pursue for the higher goal of satisfying each students' own preference.

Furthermore, over-specific education will narrow students' ken. If the educational system adopts the policy of only feeding knowledge to students following what they like, instead of making positive effects to students' development, however, it is probably that the method would impair their further studying and even set obstacles in their daily life. For instance, a student who is talented in the language while has never been taught how(多余啊) to count numbers, may be fooled when pay bills--even though he/she can speak several languages. On the other hand, with the era of information explode(?) and the advancing technology, people always exposure to overflowing fresh things which sometimes are complicated. Hence, over-specific education, which brings about lacking knowledge of interdisciplinarity,may impede people to understand new concepts and utilize advanced tools to benefit their daily life.

Meanwhile, it is unfeasible to design an educational system to content each student’s needs and interests, as no government or organization could afford the consumption of tremendous teaching resources required by this project. Especially in some populous countries, such as China, which owns 300 million students, can hardly ensure the quality of instruction to each individual is equally high. Therefore, if the "education of truly effective" is defined as the speaker maintains, those countries may never achieve the state.

In sum, the specifically designing education for catering to inclination of each student is an unwise method as well as impractical. This over-specific education is even detrimental to both individuals and nations in long-term, as a truly effective one should offer enough basic knowledge to all students and broaden their ken.

偶还是好喜欢你的文章啊~看你的文章会学到很多东西,喜欢你的论证过程

kylinUID: 2242436

谢谢楼上的建议！呵呵
不过文章首句偶是模仿北美范文里的一篇开头，刚才又去仔细看了看那篇范文开头句的结构，应该是没模仿错的

偶那里用的不是prefer...to..句型，连接词是would prefer.....instead of....
  至于那个to 就是serve to 了～呵呵

dallenlinUID: 2247050

51"Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."

——提纲——
reject
TS 这样做是不现实的  也不可能达到教育truly effective的效果
1.教育基本任务是扫盲。
a. common sense，needed by all students, cannot be ignored.
b.何况学生刚开始还不会独立思考 兴趣有时也只是whims 所以最开始应该先打基础。
2. Over-specific education will narrow students 知识范围（ken） 现在社会知识越来越多都是跨学科的 专业太细会影响自己对社会上新鲜事物、大量信息的接收量 这样教育就不可能truly effective了 反而detrimental
3.没有这样多的教育资源来满足每个individual 的要求

——正文——
The speaker would prefer the education is specifically designed for each students instead of serving to offer a unified educational system, as he/she opines that it is the only way to make education truly effective. I concede that the speaker's idea indeed responds today's tendency of student-centered education, but it seems that the proposition is too idealistic to go into effect, and it may finally undermine the function of education.

As it is known, the education's fundamental mission is enlightening and helping people (to)escape from ignorance. Young students always lack the ability of analyzing and judging, and their interests are always whims that cannot endure long, so it is educators' duty to offer guidence until students are able to make up their mind. Besides, the common sense, only upon which the profound academic knowledge could be constructed, is essential to either individuals or society. Thus, even if there are people who are likely to be reluctant to absorb knowledge from some certain subjects, a common core curriculum should be provided for introducing basic knowledge, such as arithmetic, to all students. In a word, before students' independent thinking is built and the basic knowledge is instilled, education should not pursue for the higher goal of satisfying each students'(student's) own preference.

Furthermore, over-specific education will narrow students' ken. If the educational system adopts the policy of only feeding knowledge to students following what they like, instead of making positive effects to students' development, however(这里不该用转折，用then是不是好一点）, it is probably that the method would impair their further studying and even set obstacles in their daily life. For instance, a student who is talented in the language while has never been taught how to count numbers, may be fooled when pay bills（这句看不懂什么意思）--even though he/she can speak several languages. On the other hand, with the era of information explode and the advancing technology, people always exposure（expose) to overflowing fresh things which sometimes are complicated. Hence, over-specific education, which brings about lacking knowledge of interdisciplinarity,may impede people to understand new concepts and utilize advanced tools to benefit their daily life.

Meanwhile, it is unfeasible to design an educational system to content each student’s needs and interests, as no government or organization could afford the consumption of tremendous teaching resources required by this project. Especially in some populous countries, such as China, which owns 300 million students, can hardly ensure the quality of instruction to each individual is equally high. Therefore, if the "education of truly effective" is defined as the speaker maintains, those countries may never achieve the state.

In sum, the specifically designing education for catering to inclination of each student is an unwise method as well as impractical. This over-specific education is even detrimental to both individuals and nations in long-term, as a truly effective one should offer enough basic knowledge to all students and broaden their ken.

   论证挺好的～～～基本没什么问题

tongwawawUID: 2176887

原帖由 kylin 于 2007-2-5 14:00 发表
谢谢楼上的建议！呵呵
不过文章首句偶是模仿北美范文里的一篇开头，刚才又去仔细看了看那篇范文开头句的结构，应该是没模仿错的

偶那里用的不是prefer...to..句型，连接词是would prefer.....instead of.. ...

那个perfer后面可以接整句吗??

kylinUID: 2242436

The speaker would prefer a national curriculum for all children up until college instead of allowing schools in different regions the freedom to decide on their own curricula.

这是范文里原句～～我也不知道要怎么说。。从小最头痛的就是语法。。光凭感觉瞎摸索 呵呵
ls看看吧～～如果真的模仿错了 我得改吖～～吼吼

kylinUID: 2242436

The speaker would prefer a national curriculum for all children up until college instead of allowing schools in different regions the freedom to decide on their own curricula.

这是范文里原句～～我也不知道要怎么说。。从小最头痛的就是语法。。光凭感觉瞎摸索 呵呵
ls看看吧～～如果真的模仿错了 我得改吖～～吼吼

tongwawawUID: 2176887

原帖由 kylin 于 2007-2-5 22:27 发表
The speaker would prefer a national curriculum for all children up until college instead of allowing schools in different regions the freedom to decide on their own curricula.

这是范文里原句～ ...

我觉得要是用 prefer..a. instead of/to b 这里a和b都应该是名词形式才对
我感觉可以说I would prefer that....但是我也不确定~:)