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" The study of an academic discipline alters the way we perceive the world. After studying the discipline,

we see the world as before, but with different eyes."

提纲:同意

1,提供了新的认识工具--天文的发展;X射线的应用

2,提供了新的认识角度

3,培养了理性的思维方法--对疾病的认识;培根的名言

4,并非先带来世界的变化从而导致认识方式的变化

Everyday is a new day if we learn something new. There is nothing more reasonable on the assertion that how we achieve understanding of the whole world is amazingly distinctive after our academic study.
  
  To begin with, new technology that people would never imagine centuries ago improves sharply on the basis   of   the
development  of academic researches.  People,  as a result, would probably  change  their  method of perceiving the world in that such improved techniques might help them expand their senses progressively by  means of providing novel tools. That does not mean our eyes or ears becomes different but instead we can

see what we can not before just as a distant nebula or cells constructing our body and we can hear what we

can not before such as the voice of breath or the beats of heart. If we can observe the world more directly,

more precisely and make acquaintance of what we would never be aware of before, there is every reason to

assume that the mode in which we apprehend the world might alter. For instance, The vital event in the process of that astrology gives way to astronomy is the invention of telescope so that people who observe stars belie

former illusions and fallacies about stars. The same is the use of X-ray.  It is impossible for our remote

ancestors to check human body and diagnose human diseases in this way. Denying the indispensable role the academic study plays in perceiving our world, we are most likely to fail to explain  how all this innovation

functions cogently.

  Further more, we would apprehend the world in a distinctive method even if no invention is introduced. The

study of an academic disciplines provides new angles to explore the truth in the world. Interestingly, we will find a completely new world if we examine our nature and society in light of a certain discipline because of the

change of our focus. A student fascinated by logic and mathematics tends to examine the surroundings in a

rational manner while one other who is keen on music and poem would probably portray the nature emotionally and somewhat sensitively. Even when people see the same violet, The manners they make understanding of it varies. A painter tended to depict it as a charming creature, perceiving its beauty. A perfume manufacturer

may be pro to value it as a productive material, holding its potential fortune. A scientist might analyze its

metabolism impartially, ruling out its superficial facts. A working farmer would probably trample it carelessly,

ignoring the value of it. All of these afford persuasive evidence to conclude that people with distinctive

academic background will see the world with various eyes.
   
  Another crucial point is that such academic studies helps us cultivate our ability of reasoning so that we could

establish a rational and effective manner to make understanding of the world. In Middle ages, people consider the Black Death as a punishment of God, having no method to address it. Nowadays, we comprehend that

such epidemic disease is due to microorganism through the study of microbiology. That is one of the reasons why we can overcome them successfully through the study of medicine and pharmacy. Through science, we

gradually learns how distinguish fallacies from truth in extremely intricate phenomenons and facts. We also

learns how to deduce warranted conclusion from chaos of statistics and numbers through reasoning. All

this make us grasp the essence of the world effectively. That's why Francis Bacon said(And I paraphrase) "Reading make a full man; conference a ready man; and writing an exact man. Histories make men wise; poets witty; the mathematics subtitle; natural philosophy deep; moral grave; logic and rhetoric able to contend."

  

  Some people,  in additon, would probably ascribe the change of the way we perceive the world directly to the change of the world coming from intellectual research rather than the study itself. However, given that a

person's action is determined, at least deeply influnced, by his or her mind, these changes is more likely to

stem from the study. If you teaches an ancient people surgery, supplying best teacheres, latest instruments and plenty of practice opportunities does that ensure this study will be satisfying? This ancient people is more

likely to refuse to study at the first class, shocked by the idea of opening human bodies and dealing with

organs inside. Another example is the glorious geographic discoveries in 16th century. If the study of science

did not convince captains that the earth is round, America and Australia would never be found. Therefore, the

study of academic discipline tended to alter the way people take acquaintance of the world, the world later.
  
  Conclusively, I insist that our apprehending the whole world in a different manner will be altered by the academic study.



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Issue177 欢迎拍砖多多益善

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" The study of an academic discipline alters the way we perceive the world. After studying the discipline, we see the world as before, but with different eyes."

提纲:同意

1,提供了新的认识工具--天文的发展;X射线的应用

2,提供了新的认识角度

3,培养了理性的思维方法--对疾病的认识;培根的名言

4,并非先带来世界的变化从而导致认识方式的变化

Everyday is a new day if we learn something new. There is nothing more reasonable on the assertion that how we achieve understanding of the whole world is amazingly distinctive after our academic study. (开头的论点很清楚,要是能再稍微照顾一下下文,也就是说这里的内容和后面的展开有具体一点的呼应可能会更好)
  
  To begin with, new technology
(这里用复数会比较好一点吧) that people would never imagine centuries ago improves sharply on the basis   of   the development  of academic researches.  People,  as a result, would probably  change  their  method of perceiving the world in that such improved techniques might help them expand their senses progressively by  means of providing novel tools.(这个第二句才是你的TS,我觉得最好放在第一句) That does not mean our eyes or ears becomes different but instead(这个词用在这里读着别扭,前后并没有明显的对比的意思吧) we can see what we can not before just as a distant nebula or cells constructing our body(这样的并列如果后面一个cell被修饰了,nebula空在那儿不舒服) and (这么长的句子,and前面总应该有个逗号吧)we can hear what we can not before such as the voice of breath or the beats of heart. If we can observe the world more directly, more precisely and make acquaintance of what we would never be aware of before, there is every reason to assume that the mode in which we apprehend the world might alter. For instance, The vital event in the process of that astrology gives way to astronomy is the invention of telescope so that people who observe stars belie former illusions and fallacies about stars. The same is the use of X-ray.  It is impossible for our remote ancestors to check human body and diagnose human diseases in this way.(这里不要只说先人。虽然隐含的意思大家都知道,作文里还是清楚直接地说它对现在地贡献和影响比较好) Denying the indispensable role the academic study plays in perceiving our world, we are most likely to fail to explain  how all this innovation functions cogently.

  Further more, we would apprehend the world in a distinctive method even if no invention is introduced.(这里是ISSUE,不是ARGUMENT。为什么要说even if no。。。呢况且这是你自己的观点,还是不要这样比较好。还有一个问题就是你这一句又不是真正的TS,第二句才是。英文文章的特点应该是直接有效) The

study of an academic disciplines provides new angles to explore the truth in the world. Interestingly, we will find a completely new world if we examine our nature and society in light of a certain discipline because of the change of our focus. A student fascinated by logic and mathematics tends to examine the surroundings in a rational manner while one other who is keen on music and poem would probably portray the nature emotionally and somewhat sensitively. Even when people see the same violet, The manners they make understanding of it varies. A painter tended to depict it as a charming creature, perceiving its beauty. A perfume manufacturer may be pro to value it as a productive material, holding its potential fortune. A scientist might analyze its metabolism impartially, ruling out its superficial facts. A working farmer would probably trample it carelessly, ignoring the value of it. All of these afford persuasive evidence to conclude that people with distinctive academic background will see the world with various eyes. (这一段还是比较流畅清楚的)
   
  Another crucial point is that such academic studies helps us cultivate our ability of reasoning so that we could establish a rational and effective manner to make understanding of the world. In Middle ages, people consider the Black Death as a punishment of God, having no method to address it. Nowadays, we comprehend that such epidemic disease is due to microorganism through the study of microbiology. That is one of the reasons
(因果关系好像反了。前面说的是结果,后面why引导的是原因) why we can overcome them successfully through the study of medicine and pharmacy. Through science, we gradually learns how distinguish fallacies from truth in extremely intricate phenomenons and facts. We also learns how to deduce warranted conclusion from chaos of statistics and numbers through reasoning. All this make us grasp the essence of the world effectively. That's why Francis Bacon said(And I paraphrase) "Reading make a full man; conference a ready man; and writing an exact man. Histories make men wise; poets witty; the mathematics subtitle; natural philosophy deep; moral grave; logic and rhetoric able to contend." (这一段和主题关联得不明确:主题涉及的研究、世界观的改变,在这里后者只是隐含在你试图表达的例子中。但是ISSUE是要明确表达的)

  

  Some people,  in additon, would probably ascribe the change of the way we perceive the world directly to the change of the world coming from intellectual research rather than the study itself.(不太明白这句话的意思) However, given that a person's action is determined, at least deeply influnced, by his or her mind, these changes is more likely to stem from the study.(这里和前面几段一样,TS出现在了第二句) If you teaches an ancient people surgery, supplying best teacheres, latest instruments and plenty of practice opportunities does that ensure this study will be satisfying? This ancient people is more likely to refuse to study at the first class, shocked by the idea of opening human bodies and dealing with organs inside.(呵呵,这个例子似乎并不恰当啊。人家第一堂课拒绝不代表后面一定也拒绝吧,这个例子想证明什么都没说清楚就结束了) Another example is the glorious geographic discoveries in 16th century. If the study of science did not convince captains that the earth is round, America and Australia would never be found. Therefore, the study of academic discipline tended to alter the way people take acquaintance of the world, the world later.(说实话这一段我不太明白你LZ试图说明的观点)
  
  Conclusively, I insist that our apprehending the whole world in a different manner will be altered by the academic study.

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谢谢了,我确实还有点中式思维,老想绕绕再点出观点

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