Issue4【flying小组】第1次作业 by mubby

mubbyUID: 2300654

TOPIC: ISSUE4 - "No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study."
WORDS: 467    DATE: 2006-2-16  限时失败:(

In the philosophy perspective, the world is an integrity which combines many branches and fields in a complicated way. That is, all the matters and objects are linked with each other. It is definitely that any domain of study can’t be absolutely independent from any other extraneous fields. What’s more, only with the assistance of corresponding outside knowledge, can one field make sound achievements.

There can be sometimes when scientists are stagnant in a field of study and can’t brew the new idea. If a scientist focused on some regular perspectives or prototypes, his horizon and ken could have been framed and restricted which will necessarily led to diminished possibilities of making breakthroughs. On the other hand, if he could have been more open-minded and ready to view the phenomenon in another feasible way by using some potential outside knowledge, the result would have been completely different. For instance, the dentists’ conventional work has not changed for years. Not until last year when a dentist in Swiss developed a revolutionary method which introduced computer in gathering and analyzing the 3D information of teeth. This breakthrough can help the dentist with making denture automatically and precisely which will benefit nearly all the dentists and emancipate them from the boring work.

In the new emerging technique, it’s especially important for the scientists to learn from and integrate other knowledge in his study. And since human society are in information age now, convenience is available when the researchers switch on the computer and connect to the internet. No one can fancy the harvests in certain fields without the communication with other fields. Take  Liquid Crystal Display for example which is one of the hottest techniques in today's world. The study involved is not only the imperative integrate circuit science and displaying technology but also some other subjects such as the material science and manufacture engineering. Without the new findings on material science and new methods on making the liquid screens, the study of Liquid Crystal Display could still be stay in a marsh and can’t make breakthroughs.

Even in some traditional and mature fields like the study concerning on the history or the archeology, knowledge from the other field still helps a lot. New scientific methods shed light on analyzing the history remains. It is reported that developing optical technology can enhance the accuracy in chronology. With the help of the spectrum analyzing instrument, the constitute of the history remains can be more analyzed more accurately.

The knowledge of man is only a little part of a giant iceberg. In the research of one specific subject, we need knowledge and experience from other studies to widen our ken, to inspire us and to help us. This kind of cooperation helps the study in every domain to be more accurate and effective.

感觉这个题目不是很好写，不容易分层，我的提纲：
1 开头，阐明立场，同意issure观点
2  a 不引进其他领域的知识会产生的不良的后果
   b 在信息社会里，新领域要想取得突破，必须需要互相协作
   c 在一些传统领域，比如对历史的研究和考古学中，汲取其他学科的知识同样重要
3 结论

刚刚开始练习，很多不足的地方请大家无情指出，十分感谢。
有拍必回，嘿嘿。

[ 本帖最后由 mubby 于 2007-2-17 11:09 编辑 ]

hujunhaoUID: 191309

TOPIC: ISSUE4 - "No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study."WORDS: 467    DATE: 2006-2-16  限时失败 In the philosophy perspective, the world is an integrity which combines many branches and fields in a complicated way. That is, all the matters and objects are linked with each other. It is definitely that any domain（恩，借鉴一个。我一直都用field和area，） of study can’t （在正式的作文中千万不要用缩写，写全can not）be absolutely independent from any other extraneous fields. What’s more（我觉得这里最好不用这句话，因为现在表明你的主题句，用总结的词好一点，比如therefore，accordingly）, only with the assistance of corresponding outside knowledge, can one field make sound achievements.
总的来说第一段写的不错。（你的这个第一句不是主题句啊。只是一种情况，最好放在第二句里来展开扩展）There can be sometimes（这个“有可能有时”的说法我觉得有点问题，可以直接就说it is possible that sometimes.不需要加there are）when scientists are stagnant in a field of study and can’t brew the new idea. If a scientist focused on some regular perspectives or prototypes, his horizon and ken（词汇丰富啊） could have been framed and restricted which will necessarily led to diminished possibilities of making breakthroughs. （你和我一样用了正反论述，但我觉得你应该把正的放在前面。因为你的观点是要引进。然后在说如果不引入的话会有stagnant，这样你的例子也在前面一大块。后面的补充方面说明更好的突出主题）On the other hand, if he could have been more open-minded and ready to view the phenomenon in another feasible way by using some potential outside knowledge, the result would have been completely different. For instance, the dentists’ conventional work has not changed for years. Not until last year when a dentist in Swiss developed a revolutionary method which introduced computer in gathering and analyzing the 3D information of teeth. This breakthrough can help the dentist with making denture automatically and precisely which will benefit nearly all the dentists and emancipate them from the boring work.
（我觉得你的第一段的观点有一点偏题了，因为题目中说的是外来的人的知识和经历。你说的是内在人引用外在的知识。题目注重是那些人起的作用）所以这个例子也不是太恰当。
（段与段之间最好有个承接的关系）In the new emerging technique, it’s especially important for the scientists to learn from and integrate other knowledge in his study. And since human society are in information age now, convenience is available when the researchers switch on the computer and connect to the internet. No one can fancy（有学习你一个词。我一般都用最图的image，assume） the harvests in certain fields without the communication with other fields. Take  Liquid Crystal Display for example which is one of the hottest techniques in today's world. The study involved is not only the imperative integrate circuit science and displaying technology but also some other subjects such as the material science and manufacture engineering. Without the new findings on material science and new methods on making the liquid screens, the study of Liquid Crystal Display could still be stay in a marsh and can’t make breakthroughs.
（我还是觉得和题目有点偏差）

Even in some traditional and mature fields like the study concerning on the history or the archeology, knowledge from the other field still helps a lot. New scientific methods shed light on analyzing the history remains. It is reported that developing optical technology can enhance the accuracy in chronology. With the help of the spectrum analyzing instrument, the constitute of the history remains can be more analyzed more accurately.（这一段的例子举的不错。简洁有力。最优最好在价格总结句。一段才完整）
The knowledge of man is only a little part of a giant iceberg. In the research of one specific subject, we need knowledge and experience from other studies to widen our ken, to inspire us and to（to可以去掉吧） help us. This kind of cooperation helps the study in every domain to be more accurate and effective.

总的来说这篇文章我觉得结构不是太好。题目有些偏题的嫌疑。所以导致证明不够充分。
而且整个段落的分配不是太好。中间的三段最好有内在的联系，而且简洁明了的让人知道你的段落分配。
感觉你的用词很充分。词语变化很多。这我要向你学习啊。

mubbyUID: 2300654

写的时候有些着急，看样子破题确实很重要，我这篇确实写偏了，你不说我自己还看不出来。
看样子好好分析题目是很必要的，这点自己做得好差，继续努力，嘿嘿。