Argument65 【0706G－LOVEAW小组大贴】第十一次作业 by aic00

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65. The following appeared in a memo from the president of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States.

"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, the five best-selling cheeses at our newest store were all domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses."

The conclusion offered by the author is unacceptable, for they are based on a vague survey and several steps of logical confusing reasoning. I will discuss them one by one in the following details.
First, the author places emphasis on the assertion that the five best-selling cheeses at the newest store are domestic cheeses. Thus, there is no evidence to suggest that the same situation will appear in other chain stores in considering the different food habit, especially for those stores not as new as ones mentioned above. Other factors, like better services in new stores and people's mind in pursuit of novelty may also be involved in the cheeses selling. Unless it can be shown that business in the five newest stores is representative of all the stores in chain, any conclusion we drawn is completely unwarranted.
In the second place, the survey the author provided is insufficient to support the conclusion that its subscribers have increasing interst in choose domestic cheeses. Lacking information about the number of respondents, it is impossible to assess the validity of the results. Another problem is the representative of the respondents, that is, we do not know exactly the distribution of respondents. lacking such evidence the author can not draw any firm conclusion based on the study.
Given that the survey by the magazine is reasonable and abundant, how many the subscribers of the magazine will consume in the these chain stores is still a question. An exact example comes to mind. People may, for example, be used to the food habit either in Mcdonald's or KFC despite little accurate differences could be found between them. Just like that, the subscribers of the magazine in majority are likely to buy cheeses from some other stores. If so, the survey will be of no value for the stores in chain mentioned above.
In addition, the author assert that the company should not continue stocking many of the varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses to reduce expenses. Admittedly, limiting inventory is one route to reduce expense, nevertheless, profitability is function of both revenue and expense. Contingencies such as competition, labor costs and working efficiency can all lead to the changes of profit. Lacking abundant consideration the influence of the above factors to expense, it is arbitrary to draw certain any conclusion. Moreover, without weighing revenue against expenses the argument's conclusion is premature at best.
To sum, the conclusion based on the ill-logical reasoning and a vague survey is unconvincing. The author has to rule out other possibilities to prove the given conclusion. Moreover, the author has to offer more detailed evidence to substantiate his claim.

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The conclusion offered by the author is unacceptable, for they are based on a vague survey and several steps of logical confusing reasoning. I will discuss them one by one in the following details.

First, the author places emphasis on the assertion that the five best-selling cheeses at the newest store are domestic cheeses. Thus, (这个词是顺接...可能不是很好) there is no evidence to suggest that the same situation will appear in other chain stores in considering the different food habit, especially for those stores not as new as ones mentioned above. (为什么???) Other factors, like better services in new stores and people's mind in pursuit of novelty may also be involved in the cheeses selling. (nice!) Unless it can be shown that business in the five newest stores is representative of all the stores in chain, any conclusion we drawn is completely unwarranted.

In the second place, the survey the author provided is insufficient to support the conclusion that its subscribers have increasing interst in choose domestic cheeses. Lacking information about the number of respondents, it is impossible to assess the validity of the results. Another problem is the representative of the respondents, that is, we do not know exactly the distribution of respondents. lacking such evidence the author can not draw any firm conclusion based on the study. (这段建议删去,可以在上一段中间直接补充说明到domestic的问题.还有,除非study错误非常明显或者有个性,不要去攻击)

Given that the survey by the magazine is reasonable and abundant, how many the subscribers of the magazine will consume in the these chain stores is still a question. An exact example comes to mind. (哪见到的的用法?可能是我没见过所以觉得不好~) People may, for example, be used to the food habit either in Mcdonald's or KFC despite little accurate differences could be found between them. Just like that, the subscribers of the magazine in majority are likely to buy cheeses from some other stores. If so, the survey will be of no value for the stores in chain mentioned above. (这段太乱,下面详细讲) (看了很长时间觉得这段又不乱了....关键在段首的given.请不要随便乱用given这个词...如果没有明显的让步你这个词用了之后非常misleading....让我抓狂了半个小时,看来看去越看越乱)

In addition, the author assert that the company should not continue stocking many of the varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses to reduce expenses. Admittedly, limiting inventory is one route to reduce expense, nevertheless, profitability is function of both revenue and expense. Contingencies such as competition, labor costs and working efficiency can all lead to the changes of profit. Lacking abundant consideration the influence of the above factors to expense, it is arbitrary to draw certain any conclusion. Moreover, without weighing revenue against expenses the argument's conclusion is premature at best. (可以,继续补充丰满即可)

To sum, the conclusion based on the ill-logical reasoning and a vague survey is unconvincing. The author has to rule out other possibilities to prove the given conclusion. Moreover, the author has to offer more detailed evidence to substantiate his claim.

第一body攻击很好
第二body删掉
第三body我至少看了半个小时.............................................................................
可能把我自己的脑子也看乱了...不是很清醒 sorry....
这个argu的逻辑顺序survey(两个)-domestic-discount-purchase-profit
建议每次攻击的时候参照好argu本身的逻辑顺序,
每一段的攻击不要太散 否则看起来很容易相当凌乱
多多自己琢磨.. 加油

[ 本帖最后由 iq28 于 2007-3-7 23:52 编辑 ]