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rubenUID: 2163558

56"Governments should focus more on solving the immediate problems of today rather than trying to solve the
anticipated problems of the future."

提纲：
1. 解决当务之急能起到立竿见影的效果。
2. 眼前问题若不能得到及时解决，将会积累成更大的问题。
3. 当务之急如果处理不当，将会影响长远利益。
4. 只有长远之计解决好了，才能从根本上解决眼前问题。

    Should governments focus more on the immediate problems of today rather than the anticipated problems of the
future? I agree that current problems are more urgent to account for than future ones. Nevertheless, I think that
solving the problems of the future are more significant in the long term.
    Admittedly, focusing on the immediate problems will obtain evident results. For example, when the river which
provides drinking water to a city is reported to be polluted by a chemical plant, the government should force the
plant to stop draining their waste water to river immediately. Once pollution resource disappears, citizen will
drink safe water again. It could be easily concluded from above instance that the timely actions will take effect on
immediate problems.
    Further more, the immediate problems which are not regarded highly will probably develop to more serious issues.
This may be well illustrated by the example of a patient with common cold. If the patient refuses to accept any
treatments and his anti-virus system does not work well, his cold will be likely to develop to pulmonary disease to
cure which is far more difficult from the beginning slight illness.
    Yet, the incorrect method to solve current problems will damage the future benefit. For instance, woods are much
in demand in our life, but if the speed of disafforestation exceeds the speed of forest growth, there will be no
tree to use in one day. So future benefit must be took into account when current problems are solved.
    Besides, some immediate problems are the reflection of the anticipated problems of the future. Let us take
energy sources crisis for example. In the face of the absence of energy sources, people attempt to explore more oil
and even not hesitate to initiate a war. But, excessive exploration will result in more serious lack of sources. To
develop more replaceable sources is just the real solution which benefits both future and current problems.
    In the final analysis, the immediate problems in deed need more concern to meet current requirements. But it is
unreasonable to deal with the problems of today without considering the problems of the future. Governments should
make a balance between both.

norman518UID: 188582

提纲：(364w 字数少了点哈)
1. 解决当务之急能起到立竿见影的效果。
2. 眼前问题若不能得到及时解决，将会积累成更大的问题。
3. 当务之急如果处理不当，将会影响长远利益。
4. 只有长远之计解决好了，才能从根本上解决眼前问题。
【从提供看你应该是：赞同】

Should governments focus more on the immediate problems of today rather than the anticipated problems of the future? I agree that current problems are more urgent to account for than future ones. Nevertheless, I think that solving the problems of the future are more significant in the long term.
【估计你应该是平衡观点，但从你的Thesis Statement看比较混乱，至少没有提出自己明确的（并具有有争议性）的观点。】

Admittedly, focusing on the immediate problems will obtain evident results. For example, when the river which provides drinking water to a city is reported to be polluted by a chemical plant, the government should force the plant to stop draining their waste water to river immediately. Once pollution resource disappears, citizen will drink safe water again. It could be easily concluded from above instance that the timely actions will take effect【语态】 on immediate problems.

Further more, the immediate problems which are not regarded highly【用个“分词or短语”足够】 will probably develop to more serious issues. This may be well illustrated by the example of a patient with common cold. If the patient refuses to accept any treatments and his anti-virus system does not work well, his cold will【would】 be likely to develop to pulmonary disease to cure which is far more difficult from the beginning slight illness.

Yet, the incorrect method to solve current problems will damage the future benefit. For instance, woods are much in demand in our life, but if the speed of disafforestation exceeds the speed of forest growth, there will be no tree to use in one day. So future benefit must be took into account when current problems are solved.

Besides, some immediate problems are the 【+direct】reflection of the anticipated problems of the future. Let us take energy sources crisis for example. In the face of the absence of energy sources, people attempt to explore more oil and even not hesitate to initiate a war. But, excessive exploration will result in more serious lack of sources. To develop more replaceable sources is just the real solution which benefits both future and current problems.

    In the final analysis, the immediate problems in deed need more concern to meet current requirements. But it is unreasonable to deal with the problems of today without considering the problems of the future. Governments should make a balance between both.
【在此确认了对你Begin的猜想】

【建议：
1）    语言上应该没有大问题；
2）    总体上看你的文章不象是在写I（立论文），而是在陈述一个现象。本文作者希望我们就政府而言，是应该关注“当前问题”还是“长远问题”。为此我们需要建议一种价值标准/体系，来对上述问题进行判断和取舍：即，哪些问题是当前问题？哪些问题是长远问题？哪些问题是紧迫的？而哪些问题又是当务之急？为此，政府首先应该有能力判断哪些immediate problems是严重性和紧迫性（关系到人民的生命安全关系到、关系到国家安定），进而有选择地、有重点地处理immediate problems；只有如此，文章才可能深入进去，从问题现象看其本质，而不是就事论事。
3）    对与你的主体段Body感觉有有问题，首先应该提出一个明确的观点，然后展开论述，再用例子来支持你的论述，最后小结；而你的文章：观点—举例---小结，也许是你观点本就不具有争议性，所以感觉完全没有展开（的必要），因此使得论证比较单薄。】