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Argument138  黄皮

The arguer asserts that we should abandon the five-year plan to purshase additional buses for
the campus of Southside University.Based on the results of a compaign sponsored by a club of
the university,he assumes that  the currently offer is sufficient to serve the campus because
students there are unlikely to use them .However, in my views,the argument commits several  
conspicious fallacies.

Firstly,just based on a survey of a radio program sponsored by a club and by means of the radio
can not  get a conclusion about majority of the students of the compus.to begin with,whether the
respondants tothe survey over the redio including the sufficient students is open to doubt.maybe
there are just a small group of students ,or maybe the groups happens to be the students who are
not willing to take buses of the compus.furthermore,the survey is sponsoed by a environmental club
who are against to take cars .so we can not see any realationship with the problems about the five-year
plan.the survey's purpose is surely concerned  with enviroment ,so is  unreasonable to cite here for
illustrating the arguer's assetion.

Secondly,even if the outcome of this survey can stand for the students of the university,there are
still some logic  mistakes in the results.on the first hand,they advocate that the students should
commute to school by bus instead of by automobile at least one day per week.this question seems
little relationship with attitude towards the number of buses.on the second hand,about ten percent
of the students called in and pledged can not domonstrate there are more likely to commute by cars.
maybe no body can make sure he will take bus once every week,maybe these students lived in
school and their parents will pick them home by priviate cars.or maybe some of them lived so near
that they need not take any vehicles.So this survey commits so server fallacies that unable to assist
the conclusion.

In sum,the mistaken using of an unrelated and unconvincible survey make the argument unsustainable.
and the arguer's assumption concerns with the conclusion is still qusetionable.if the arguer can
proceed a survey which ioncludes most of the students and using a reasonable way,maybe we will
get a correct conclusion.

[ 本帖最后由 amiamiami 于 2007-3-9 14:03 编辑 ]

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138.Thefollowing report appeared in a memo from the vice president of the SouthsideTransportation Authority.

"We should abandon our current five-year plan to purchase additional busesto serve the campus of Southside University, becausestudents there are unlikely to use them. Consider the results of the recentcampaign sponsored by the Environmental Club at Southside University:in a program on the campus radio station, the club asked students to call inand pledge that they would commute to school by bus instead of by automobile atleast one day per week. Only ten percent of the students called in and pledged.In view of the campaign's lack of success, we can assume that the bus servicewe currently offer will continue to be sufficient to serve the university."

The arguer asserts that we should abandonthe five-year plan to purchase additional busesfor the campus of Southside University. Based on theresults of a campaign sponsored by a club of the university, he assumesthat the currently offer is sufficient to serve the campus becausestudents there are unlikely to use them .However, in my views, the argumentcommits several conspicuous fallacies.

Firstly, just based on a survey of a radio program sponsored by a club and bymeans of the radio can not  get (draw or arrive at )a(the) conclusionabout the majority of the students of the compus(university), to begin with, whetherthe respondents to the survey over the radioincluding the sufficient students is open to doubt. Maybe there are just asmall group of students, or maybe the groups happento be the students who are not willing to take buses of the campus. Furthermore, thesurvey is sponsored by anenvironmental club who are against to take cars. So we can not see any relationship with the problems about the five-year plan.The survey's purpose is surely concerned with environment, so is unreasonableto cite here for illustrating the arguer's assertion.

Secondly, even if the outcome of this survey can stand for(象征诶，不合适 ; represent J) the students of the university, there are still somelogic  mistakes in the results. On the first hand, they advocate thatthe students should commute to school by bus instead of by automobile at leastone day per week. This question seems little relationship with attitude towardsthe number of buses. (这个地方攻击的不太恰当) On the second hand, about (the evidence that) ten percent of thestudents (were) called in and pledged can not demonstratethere are more likely to commute by cars. Maybe no body( no one individual)can make sure he will take bus once every week, maybe these students lived in schooland their parents will pick them home by private cars. Or maybe some of themlived so near that they need not take any vehicles (unfortunately你支持了 argument) . So this surveycommits so server fallacies that unable to assist the conclusion.

In sum, the mistaken using an unrelated and inconvincible survey make theargument unsustainable. And the arguer's assumption concerned with theconclusion is still questionable. If the arguer can proceed with a survey whichcovers most of the students and uses a reasonable way, maybe we will get acorrect conclusion.

My view:
Whether there is any increase of the numberof the students in the next five years. The current five-year plan is stillneeded for the students of the university; whether the program of the radiostation is propagated all over the campus. What the percentage of the studentswho know about the campaign is; whether all the students, who pledged in thecampaign, can have access to their own cars. Perhaps the students who have nocars will not participate in the campaign; whether the present buses are notsufficient even for the ten percent of the students who pledged in thecampaign;

Advice: certain paragraphs and sentences commit several flaws. Be careful :)


[ 本帖最后由 longxu 于 2007-3-9 15:26 编辑 ]