ibt凤凰涅磐小组 第一次作业

weiweiwawaUID: 2208145

不好意思
昨天没上GTER
不知道自己有幸被选入到组中，今天上网才发现
作业只能明天才能交了，谢谢了

weiweiwawaUID: 2208145

3.10: Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

When I was 12 years old, my family moved from Baoji, a small town in China, to the capital Beijing, which definitely changed my later life and benefited my future development. According to my own experience, I prefer to live in a big rather than in a small town due to the following reasons.

First and foremost, big city that is equipped with advanced and ample educational resource can guarantee a greater opportunity of accepting a better and more comprehensive education. That will, out of question, bring more opportunity in social survival. To make it specific, as I learn in the high school in big city, the content of computer class contains more advanced usage of computer and even the basic instruction to the computer language, all of which I cannot gain from the school in the small city. Plus, there are more useful and interesting classes, which are seldom cultivated in the small city, available for me to choose. So, to get prepared better to the further education in college, big city will virtually preferred.

Additionally, big city can continuously add fresh challenges to our routine, which brings great excitement and enthusiasm to my personal life while small town fail to. Living in big city, I can meet with different kinds of people with varied backgrounds, even including foreigners. Those people can particularly break the current schedule of my life by establishing a new friendship, informing me interesting stories, and inspiring fresh thinking. Also, competition in big city is much more serious compared with the small town in which I can always be noticeable; consequently, the formal encourages me to try harder to improve my quality and capacity while the latter just turn me proud maintaining the ceased level.

More importantly, big city can provide myriads of convenient social circumstances, which makes the life more comfortable. Whereas, the limited resource in small town make many living demands rigorous and impossible and that we may need to cost much money. For example, living in big city, there is developed transportation system by which citizens can go anywhere they want to. But in small town each family needs to own their car to travel around fulfilling their business. Again, we can buy anything we want directly and quickly in the big city; contrarily, we have to travel a long distance to find the things we need, or even ask the relatives who will go to the big city to buy it for us. For that matter, the resource in big city guarantees a better living condition.  

weiweiwawaUID: 2208145

作文怎么改？
我改谁的？

janesnowUID: 2272881

I like the big city just like most people do. Living in the big city offers more opportunities ,Different jobs attract different people .people corperate together to contribute to the society .（用who 丛句更好吧） more chances exist in the big city .while little risk in the town.(大小写要当心噢~)

In the big city people could enjoy life better ,(语法感觉不通呢，用because从句或另起一句)various of activities are held related to every field ，more concerts,more matches,more exhibitions . ,（三个more……这种句型我不懂呢，chinglish还是英语某种我不知的表达方式？）People also get better education in the big city,because of the better teaching resourse .when you walk in the big city, you could contact with different people from worldwide .so in the big city ,wo could know better about the world ,and show us to the world.（and 并列句主语一致吧？）

Sometimes big city expose its weakness,such as traffic , environment .As is known ,the terrible air polution （pollutioin） often affects ours health.many people are sick just due to the poor living condition. Traffic jam makes everybody upset, wasting time can be forgived because time is more significant in the big city .

Compared with big city ,small town is quiet and relaxible （无词词 ，relaxed吧？）.there is not so much pressures,which is more suitable for patient to recover. As a result ,many successful businessmen choose to enjoy their old ages here.

Everyone has his own opinion about where to live ,whether living in the big city or in a small town ,we just hold a faith that life is full of hope and happiness.

[ 本帖最后由 横行泡沫 于 2007-3-10 17:22 编辑 ]
(Snow不晓得这样的文章结构合不合ets胃口,大家的意见呢？)

[ 本帖最后由 janesnow 于 2007-3-11 18:04 编辑 ]

janesnowUID: 2272881

janesnowUID: 2272881

kino722UID: 2272986

哈哈，现在小组还真多
这个我们也写过

sweetyivanchenUID: 2307744

When I was young I always thinking that why my father came to the small village married my mother and offspring me. I was jealous of my younger sister who was born in a big city.
When I was a child, I lived in a small town. I don’t know how the plane looks like. Probably, I even don’t know how the washing machine works. If you ask me which place would you prefer to live in, there is no doubt that I will choose the big city as my first choice.

In the past, the people which lived in a small village their thoughts and ideas were very traditional and simple. They thought that study was the only way to success. The children study all the time. There is no way to go out to play with their friends and develop their hobbies. After school they have to do homework which would never be finished. Sometimes they must stay up all night to review the lessons; especially the final exam is draw near. On the contrary of the big city, the parents are paying attention to their children’s all the fields of development. The children can do what they really want to do. In a big city, the children are versatile.

When I was 16 years old, my parents eventually back to their hometown which is the modernization and biggest city in China. I found there are very different from the small town. In the big city, the school’s facilities are modernization and the teachers’ teaching conceptions are otherwise-minded. The teaching methods are so flexible and interesting. We can learn from the games.

The most important way why I choose live in a big city is the social security. My parents lived in a small town had no social welfare and social security in the past. Now in a big city the social security system is very complete and as clear as a bell. They are getting older and older, the city provide the medicine to them, so they don’t need to worried about that when they are fall ill and they haven’t enough money to cure the disease.

All in all, the reasons why I choose to live in a big city, because of the modernization, good quality of study environment and complete social security system.

weiweiwawaUID: 2208145

when I was young I always thinking that why my father came to the small village married my mother and offspring这是名词生孩子就用give birth to me. I was jealous of my younger sister who was born in a big city.
when I was a child, I lived in a small town. I don’t know how [is] was the plane looks语法 like. Probably, I even don’t know what does the washing machine do你应该说明一下你不知道的原因是不是因为在小城市长大，不然这句话毫无意义. If you ask me which place would you prefer to live in, There is no doubt that I will choose the big city as my first choice.

In the past, 这个时间词很有疑惑，过去怎样不等以现在怎样，这个似乎不能作为现在的你选择居住在城市的原因the people which lived in a small village their thought and ideas were very traditional and simple. They thought that study was the only way to success. The children study all the time. There is no way to go out play with their friends and developing their hobbies. After school they have to do homework which will never be finished. Sometimes they must stay up all night to review the lessons, especially the final exam is draw near. On the contrary of the big city, the parents are pay attention to their children’s all the field development. The children can do what they really want to do. In a big city, the children are versatile.我觉得极自然是依你作为出发点，你应该精良从你的角度来写，而你写的东西过于空洞，即使有你所说的吸纳向，可是如果你的父母和开明给你提供了分赴的学习机会和钠溶，那么你的论者就问题大了

when I was 16 years old, my parents eventually come back to their hometown which is the modernization and biggest city in China. I found there are very different from the small town. In the big city, the school’s facilities are modernization and the teachers’ teaching conception are otherwise-minded. The teaching methods are so flexible and interesting. We can learn from the games.

The most important way why I choose live in a big city is the social security. My parents lived in a small town had no social welfare and social security in the past. Now in a big city the social security system is very complete and as clear as a bell. They are getting older and older, the city provides the medicare to them. so they don’t need to worried about that when they are fall ill they haven’t enough money to cure the disease.

All in all, The reasons why I choose to live in a big city, because of the modernization, good quality of study environment and complete social security system.语法问题 the reason that ... is..

[ 本帖最后由 weiweiwawa 于 2007-3-11 12:43 编辑 ]

orange3333UID: 2245161

The environment of living, which is one of the most essential aspects in people’s life, influences human behaviors, the line of thinking, the way of dressing, the way of people speaking. It is becoming a culture of social community. Taking this into consideration, I think small town is better than big city that provides people with optimal living conditions.

Initially, the reason for dwelling in the small town is the smoothing and comfortable life provided by the pastoral view. There, I can enjoy the sun rising in the morning, the first cock crow, the twittering of birds in the tree. I feel so close to the nature and the gentle pace of living. Dwellers living here are able to hold a more positive attitude for life and achieve more goals. For example, an artist of aestheticism can have an inspiration of creating when he/she lives in the idyllic environment.

Oppositely, the obvious things brought about by noisy and flashy city life are more pressure and forever-lasting anxiety, agonizing and torching people’s mind day in and day out. Dwelling in the country, people can relax themselves through the peaceful environment.

Finally, the suble explanation rests on the fact that country inhabitants are fortunate enough to enjoy the cozy and pleasant ambience of the family without exhausting social life. People in city are always busy working, so that they spend little time with their family. The relationship is getting less and less.

Although, city life makes it move convenient to purchase a job, and city salaries are significantly higher than those in small town, I would prefer the small town for its comfortable living conditions.
ps:不知道怎么变颜色

orange3333UID: 2245161

谢谢啊,可是怎么变颜色呢字体?
我回去再改改,谢谢娃娃猪

横行泡沫UID: 2267226

Where to live in is a hot issue now. More and more persons are plunging into big cities, however; many uptown people move to small town to enjoy peaceful life there. To me, I have to live in a big city now.

Obviously in China, life necessaries in high quality are more convenient to buy in a big city than that in a small town. China as a developing country, only its big city can provide us various productsin high level. In a small town, the food-safety is still in low level. The problem products may sell in a small town and less power can control them than that in a big city.

And then, I can enjoy my work more if I live in a big city. As is know to all, there’re more opportunities in a big city than in a small town. I prefer to work in a big city such as Shanghai so that my career life may be in a bright way. Because of terrible traffic jams, liveing in a big city means I can have more time to sleep if I live in uptown.  And there more kinds of vehicles(transport) can be chosen in a big city, such as developed subway and public bus systems.

What’s more, there’re more operas and stadiums in a big city. Being a music fan, I can’t imagine the life without the concert. And now, famous oversea bands and orchestras only perform in big cities so I have to live in a big city now. Apparently, swimming pool and yoga house are also not available in a small town.

Nowadays, the small towns in China are in fast development while the big cities are try there best to promote its living environment .Many small towns developing their industrial, trees and mountains are destroyed, grey smoke rising into the air. On the way to pursue fortunes, people in the small town are busy and work hard, ignoring the environment. Traffic up and down on the roads. Lacking good management experience, safety problems and incidents(accidents) are rising up.

All in all, I have no choice but to live in a big city now.


[ 本帖最后由 横行泡沫 于 2007-3-11 17:35 编辑 ]

janesnowUID: 2272881

发表，，，编辑。。。。

amadeus_sheaUID: 2231224

Living in a small town or a big city is a littile bit difficult for most people to choose .Both of them have many benefits and defects ..(利益与缺点?意思上能理解,总觉得直接用advantages和disadvantages比较好)

For me I would like to choose living in a big city. Living in a big city has many advantages.

Firstly,much higher educations can be received by us(people can accept better education on a higher level). Because I’m the(a) university student, I need to learn the most advanced knowledge which alwanys be spreaded(always spreads) much faster in big cities than in small towns.Moreover, in big cities, I have the change to take part in the(非特指,删去) international exhibitions conveniently which can open my eyes extraordinary(这句有点Chinglish了吧... can widen my view of the world in a considerable extend).

Secondly,there’re more chance for us to face the society in big cities(要说明这种情况发生在大城市中).Lives(生命？生活？生命时可数，生活时不可数) in big cities are more complex ,more flesh than in small towns so that when I’m(I) graduate from school I would(could) quickly join in the job(workforce)..(这段的论据似乎不能很好的支持你的论点哦...)

Last but not the least,living in big cities has a superior living standard to that in small towns .Public installations are more completed in big cities such as old people’s home(这是什么东西?),kindergarten.

However many people wish to choose living in small towns .The environments there are better than in big cities. Air and water pollition is not as serious as that in big cities.People can breathe the fresh air ,and see the blue sky .That is almost extravagance(extravagant) for the people who live in big cities..Aslo the public order and relations between people are more harmonious.They are well known to each other, so most of the time they would like to talk together and enjoy the happy atmosphere .In addition , the price of daily necessities is cheaper in small towns ,although the pay(payment) is less.

With the limitations of the city space and the development of the town,the differences between big cities and small towns are becoming smaller..It(指代什么?) will be a more(much) easier issue to discuss .

[ 本帖最后由 amadeus_shea 于 2007-3-11 18:52 编辑 ]

ibt凤凰涅磐小组UID: 2308768

Kerry_xuming 批 amadeus
As（as貌似不必要） for most people, the spending on house property is probable the largest investment in their whole life, deciding where to settle down becomes the most important issue(issue这样的用法不是很清楚，我跟趋向point or key。) while choosing a house or a flat. Many struggle between living in big cities and small towns, for either of them has advantages attracting people to spend their life there. From my point of view, I prefer living in big cities.（观点明确）

The fundamental reason for my choice is that life is much more colorful in big cities. We are living in a world with whole new things coming up everyday（这句貌似有点chglish,改：new things come up here and there everytime）,thus there are plenty of information and knowledge for us to learn. Undoubtly, we can get all of them much easier in big cities. For instance, I am studying on the new campus of my university, which is settled in a town near a large city in which the main campus of my university is settled. Compared with the students on the main campus, our life is quite simple—taking classes and relaxing, for it is arduous for us to realize what is happening outside immediately in a small, peaceful and quiet town. On contrary, students in big cities are always up to date, as there are many ways for them to get the information. This is really(really is) a big advantage of(for) living in big cities.(理由貌似不是很充分，再乡村的大学总有电视新闻和互联网吧，当然，理由不是重点，语言还是蛮流畅的，不错)

Secondly, the bustling atmosphere in big cities can inject our life with energy. People in small towns can easily feel slothful（boring,懒散slothful并不能突出无聊的本意） when life is too comfortable there(个人的建议是不要用there,定义不明确). That will be a problem when people feel becoming old psychologically even though they are in their best ages actually(本句读的不顺，建议改为：that will make people who live in country feel tired and old in psychological, while one of these residents are teen-age who should be filled with energy). Yet, aged people in big cities can keep energetic when they see hopeful smiles on those pretty young faces, as human beings are easily influenced by the environment. Therefore, this energy can lead people to live a positive and valuable life in big cities.(these hopeful smiles are so powerful that make people who live in big city keep a positive and energetic psychology in their brilliant life)

Last but never the least, life in big cities is more convenient than in small towns. With lots of worldwide famous supermarket chains around you and mature traffic system, people can get everything they want and go everywhere they wish(排比的不错), which may seem impossible sometimes in small towns.

However, small towns are attractive for some people because of the fresh air and amazing sights there. For me, that will be quite inviting for traveling, but not for living. With the reasons mentioned above, I would like to live in big cities rather than small towns.（最后一段我觉得比较完美了，批不出什么了。）

[ 本帖最后由 ibt凤凰涅磐小组 于 2007-3-24 23:33 编辑 ]