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PrudenceUID: 2286952

TOPIC: ARGUMENT180 - The following is a recommendation from the personnel director to the president of Acme Publishing Company.

"Many other companies have recently stated that having their employees take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course has greatly improved productivity. One graduate of the course was able to read a five-hundred-page report in only two hours; another graduate rose from an assistant manager to vice president of the company in under a year. Obviously, the faster you can read, the more information you can absorb in a single workday. Moreover, Easy Read costs only $500 per employee-a small price to pay when you consider the benefits to Acme. Included in this fee is a three-week seminar in Spruce City and a lifelong subscription to the Easy Read newsletter. Clearly, Acme would benefit greatly by requiring all of our employees to take the Easy Read course."
WORDS: 490          TIME: 0:39:48          DATE: 2007-4-4

First, the director cites examples of many other companies that their productivity has been greatly improved since their employees take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course. Then, the director draws a hasty conclusion that Acme should follow their examples and would benefit greatly.  However, this specious argument suffers several flaws, which render it unconvincing.

To begin with, the director fails to provide direct and relevant specifics to substantiate that taking these course do work, and therefore be beneficial to these companies. First, the graduate who can read a five-hundred-page report in only two hours may be able to read in this speed before taking course. And the fast reading of this graduate is attributable to his/her character, which make him/her not only reading fast but also eating and walking fast. Life experience has provided us abundant of such examples to prove this possibility. Second, another graduate who rose from an assistant manager to vice president in under a year may be the son of manager, and his company is a family one. In that case, even he do not take this course, he will get manager's position as well. Third, reading fast does not mean absorbing more information. Common sense informs us that when you read fast, your most attention will be paid mainly on looking the words, very little is given to thinking. In this respect, rather limited information is gained after fast reading, no matter how much one person read. Accordingly, the effect of taking this course is still dubious at best.

Even if this course does help these companies, the director cannot prove that they will be beneficial towards Acme. It is entirely possible that other companies' job mostly different from Acme's. Such as other companies' jobs largely are those which demand workers to translate other people's English speech into Chinese and speak out instantly. However, Acme is a publishing company, most workers of which are operating publish machines, therefore has no need to take this course.

Granted this course will be of great help to Acme, I wonder whether Acme can afford it. Although it is only $500 per employee, if Acme is a big company and has hundreds of workers, now, the total cost would be a high one, which probably cannot be afforded by Acme.

Finally, it is presumptuous for the director to conclude hastily that Acme would benefit greatly by requiring all of their employees to take the Easy Read Course. First, I wonder whether it is necessary to let the guards and dustman to take this course. Besides, to gain great benefits involves many other factors such as the quality of their products and their service, faith of company, and so forth. If such factors cannot be promised, even if all of their employees take this course, great benefits would only be a pure fiction.

In conclusion, the argument is well-presented, however, its evidence is too specious and insufficient to draw any conclusion.

ILOVEISSUEUID: 2300195

First, the director cites examples of many other companies that their productivity has been greatly improved since their employees take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course. Then, the director draws a hasty conclusion that Acme should follow their examples and would benefit greatly.真的没有必要restate开头  However, this specious argument suffers several flaws, which render it unconvincing.

To begin with, the director fails to provide direct and relevant specifics to substantiate that taking these course do work, and therefore be beneficial to these companies. First, the graduate who can read a five-hundred-page report in only two hours may be able to read in this speed before taking course. And the fast reading of this graduate is attributable to his/her character前一句已经足够了，后面的实在太鸡肋, which make him/her not only reading fast but also eating and walking fast.喷饭，无关的东西没有必要写 Life experience has provided us abundant of such examples to prove this possibility.ft，我们是在写argument，不是写issue，你是不是还要举几个名人的例子？ Second, another graduate who rose from an assistant manager to vice president in under a year may be the son of manager, and his company is a family one.昨天的饭也喷出来了…据反例要做多层层递进，你直接给出一个细节，让人怎么受的了.应该先指出提升可能不是由于阅读速度快造成的，可能是其他原因，然后再列举它因。In addition,举出来的他因不要那么bt好不好。你就说说可能是由于其他能力猛，例如…,…,..and so forth.何必举一个那么不讲道理的反例 In that case, even he do not take this course, he will get manager's position as well. Third, reading fast does not mean absorbing more information.这个层次有点偏离ts Common sense informs us that when you read fast, your most attention will be paid mainly on looking the words, very little is given to thinking.这段reasoning还有点道理 In this respect, rather limited information is gained after fast reading, no matter how much one person read. Accordingly, the effect of taking this course is still dubious at best.

Even if this course does help these companies, the director cannot prove that they will be beneficial towards Acme. It is entirely possible that other companies' job mostly different from Acme's. Such as other companies' jobs largely are those which demand workers to translate other people's English speech into Chinese and speak out instantly. However, Acme is a publishing company, most workers of which are operating publish machines, therefore has no need to take this course.这段还不错

Granted this course will be of great help to Acme, I wonder whether Acme can afford it。。。这也算错误？要把握作者的逻辑主线，不要把乱七八糟的东西单独一段攻击. Although it is only $500 per employee, if Acme is a big company and has hundreds of workers, now, the total cost would be a high one, which probably cannot be afforded by Acme.大公司，不仅人多，钱也多。小公司，人少，钱也少。因此你这个反例完全没有说服力

Finally, it is presumptuous for the director to conclude hastily that Acme would benefit greatly by requiring all of their employees to take the Easy Read Course.ts写得和第二个body太像 First, I wonder whether it is necessary to let the guards and dustman to take this course.不要就这样结束嘛。举几个例子出来说说为什么有些人不需要，这就叫做细节 Besides, to gain great benefits involves many other factors such as the quality of their products and their service, faith of company, and so forth. If such factors cannot be promised, even if all of their employees take this course, great benefits would only be a pure fiction.至少有一样上去了，总会有benefits的。攻击点选得不好，可以从钱的方面进行攻击。 500dollar呢，谁能保证每个人都能帮公司赚这么多？还有那一堆附属品有没有用，没用的话只是浪费钱财

In conclusion, the argument is well-presented, however, its evidence is too specious and insufficient to draw any conclusion.

全文逻辑不清楚
把作者思路理清在动手写吧

PrudenceUID: 2286952

感谢ILOVEISSUE
恩,问题看来真的很严重啊!
请多多指教啊!

PrudenceUID: 2286952

The argument is well-presented, however, its evidence is specious. Thus, the conclusion is unconvincing. I will discuss its flaws in turn.

To begin with, the director fails to provide direct and relevant specifics to substantiate that taking these course do work, and therefore be beneficial to these companies. First, the graduate who can read a five-hundred-page report in only two hours may be able to read in this speed before taking course. Second, another graduate who rose from an assistant manager to vice president in under a year is entirely possible an excellent employee, whose capacity and interpersonal skill help him to get promotion quickly. Thus, without ruling out these possibilities, the author fails to make the assertion that taking Easy Read course works convincing.

The author’s hasty conclusion that “the faster you can read, the more information you can absorb” is easily arguable. Common sense informs us that when you read fast, your most attention will be paid mainly on looking the words, very little is given to thinking. In this respect, rather limited information is gained after fast reading, no matter how much one person read. Accordingly, the effect of taking this course is still dubious at best.

Even if this course does help these companies, the director cannot prove that they will be beneficial towards Acme. It is entirely possible that other companies' job mostly different from Acme's. Such as other companies' jobs largely are those which demand workers to translate other people's English speech into Chinese and speak out instantly. However, Acme is a publishing company, most workers of which are operating publish machines, therefore has no need to take this course.

Furthermore, an absurd assumption about the benefits brought by this course is suspect at best. Even though this course only costs ￥500 per employee and company can ford it easily, what if the benefits brought by one employee is less than $500?  In that case, even if the company can make it through, the expense will leave it a lesson.

Finally, do all employees of Acme need to take this course? How about the dustmen? Can reading fast help them to clean quickly and thoroughly?

In conclusion, the argument, while it seems logical at first, has several flaws as discussed above. In order to persuade us, the author should provide sufficient evidence to prove all assumptions and answer my questions above.

zsa1983UID: 2299564

The argument is well-presented, however, its evidence is specious. Thus, the conclusion is unconvincing. I will discuss its flaws in turn.
好开头哦，学习了
To begin with, the director fails to provide direct and relevant specifics to substantiate that taking these course do work, and therefore be beneficial to these companies.{Many other companies have recently stated that having their employees take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course has greatly improved productivity.这句话是题目的背景，并不包含作者观点，我感觉不应该批驳，而且后面你是在驳论graduate，并没有提及these companies } First, the graduate who can read a five-hundred-page report in only two hours may be able to read in this speed before taking course. Second, another graduate who rose from an assistant manager to vice president in under a year is entirely possible an excellent employee, whose capacity and interpersonal skill help him to get promotion quickly（加一句与阅读速度无关更好）. Thus, without ruling out these possibilities, the author fails to make the assertion that taking Easy Read course works convincing.

The author’s hasty conclusion that “the faster you can read, the more information you can absorb” is easily arguable. Common sense informs us that when you read fast, your most attention will be paid mainly on looking the words, very little is given to thinking. In this respect, rather limited information is gained after fast reading, no matter how much one person read. Accordingly, the effect of taking this course is still dubious at best.

Even if this course does help these companies？？, the director cannot prove that they will be beneficial towards Acme. It is entirely possible that other companies' job mostly different from Acme's. Such as other companies' jobs largely are those which demand workers to translate other people's English speech into Chinese and speak out instantly. However, Acme is a publishing company, most workers of which are operating publish machines, therefore has no need to take this course.

Furthermore, an absurd assumption about the benefits brought by this course is suspect at best. Even though this course only costs ￥500 per employee and company can ford it easily, what if the benefits brought by one employee is less than $500?very good In that case, even if the company can make it through, the expense will leave it a lesson.

Finally, do all employees of Acme need to take this course? How about the dustmen? Can reading fast help them to clean quickly and thoroughly?
这点想的好哦
In conclusion, the argument, while it seems logical at first, has several flaws as discussed above. In order to persuade us, the author should provide sufficient evidence to prove all assumptions and answer my questions above.

要学习下这样的开头和结尾