issue11 【0710G Victors互助小组】第二次作业

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           Issue      11
“Money spent on research is almost always a good investment, even when the results of that research are controversial.”


              It is no doubt that science and technology is the essential factor to prompt the progress of human’s society. From mankind’s history, first to third Revolution of Science & Technology, everytime Revolution is main propellent of procedure of history of mankind. While all those advancements on science and technology rely on kinds of researches that need investment---- large amount of money. However all investments on research are beneficial for us regardless of how the results are, even controvercial? Apparently I will not agree this opinion. In my view, we should invest in research with thinking about ethics, environment,its negative influence etc.
            Dolly, the first sheep also animal through clone, brought so many controverse, most of them concentrated in problem of ethics. Indeed technology of clone have many advantages for us. A couple desiring have a children because of that their eight years old son had died several years ago was happy for this research. They imaged this technology can bring their son again.And accually, theoretically this way seemed feasible.Nevertheless most of people were worried about it would arose ethical problems. After all no one hoped some day suddenly met a familiar man who had passed away. And some people claimed that they did not want to see Hitler II. Maybe a famous critic’ words can represent opponents’ idea: “We do not want to destroy natural rule God made.Our money should not be wasted on boring things like this. ”
           Pollution, the most attractive issue nowadays, have became one of the most severe problems.Our ocean, farmland, atmosphere …almost no any gift god give is not polluted .While it is sure that all due to our research on science and technology. According to a poll, carban dioxide in atmosphere increase by 25 percent from Industry Revolution on. Unquesionable, “our money is taxed to use to invest sorts of science and technology researches is killing ourselves.”A American public official for agency of environment said ironically. In fact, our those researches in spite of consequence give our and our earth anguish not only rest with above I discussed. Some times I really suspect if money invested on controversial research is worthy.
         Our fortune, mostly root in propelling of science and technology that we sink into.To some degree, we pay more money to research, we deserve further more treasure. But when we create our ideal home, we should not just only engaged in investment of research can benefit us, for those controversial researches, we ought to pay more attentions to their shortcomings.


[ 本帖最后由 puzilong 于 2007-5-9 19:45 编辑 ]

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there is???It is no doubt that science and technology is the essential factor to prompt the progress of human’s society. Fromin mankind’s history, first to third Revolution of Science & Technology, every time改成each Revolution is themain propellent of procedure of history of mankind. While all those advancements on science and technology relyrelies on kinds of researches that need investments---- large amount of money. However all investments on research are beneficial for us regardless of how the results are, even controversial?语序貌似不对 Apparently I will not agree with this opinion. In my view, we should invest in research with thinking aboutwith thinking about改成concerning ethics, environment, its negative influence etc. 论点最好能说清楚一些
            Dolly, the first sheep also animal through clone???这句话什么意思, brought so many contriversbrought这好象用的不对, most of them concentrated in problem of ethics我猜想你这句话是想说dolly results in a mass of controversy most of which are concentrated in ethic. Indeed technology of clone has many advantages for us. A couple desiring to have a children because of of去掉 that their eight years old son had died several years ago或者because of the death of their son就OK了 was happy for this research. They imaged this technology can bring their son back again. And actually, theoretically同时用俩副词？？可以去掉一个或者把theoretically放在seemed后面 this way seemed feasible. Nevertheless most of people were worried about把about换成that it would arose ethical problems. After all, no one hoped some day suddenly met a familiar man who had passed away这句话表述不清楚，可能是想说碰到和自己一样的人吧. And some people claimed that they did not want to see Hitler II这句话可有可无. Maybe a famous critic’ words can represent opponents’ idea: “We do not want to destroy natural rule God made. Our money should not be wasted on boring things like this. ”提个小建议吧，我比较喜欢先提论点，再论证，最后举例分析，你这样写的比较乱，条理不清晰，而且没有提出自己的观点，就最后一句话能看成是你的态度
           Pollution, the most attractive 这大概用attractive不合适吧 issue nowadays, have became one of the most severe problems. Our ocean, farmland, atmosphere …almost no any 去any gift from god give去give is not polluted .While it is sure that it is all due to our research on science and technology太过于绝对了. According to a poll, carbon dioxide in atmosphere increase by 25 percent from Industry Revolution on最后这个状语用法好象不对. Unquestionable, “our money is 把is去了  taxed to use to invest sorts of science and technology researches is killing ourselves.” AAn American public official for改成of agency of environment said ironically. In fact, our 去了our those researches in spite of consequence give our and our earth anguish not only rest with above改成what I discussed. Some times I really suspect if money invested on controversial research is worthy有点太偏激了吧.
         Our fortune mostly roots in propelling of science and technology that we sink into这个词用在这里不大合适. To some degree, we pay more money to research, we deserve further more treasure 改成the more money we invest in research, the more treasure we deserve . But when we create our ideal home, we should not just only engaged in investment of research can benefit us, for those controversial researches, we ought to pay more attentions to their shortcomings.
语法要加强啊，还有论证顺序，最好在每一段前写出自己的分论点，这样能够条理清晰，论证和分析过程也比较少，作文用词比较绝对，而且文章主旨模糊，在开篇要清楚说明自己立场，而且最好不要太过与偏向一边，整篇文章的分析的两段都在说反面的，我想投资与研究还是有很多可取之处的吧，最后句式可以尝试多样化一些，加油

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承让 !  天啊,看来我要闭棺修炼了.