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aruixmuUID: 2232580

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170 Groups or organizations are an important part of some people's lives. Why groups or orgnizations important to people? indispensably
Groups or organizations are not only an important part of some people's lives, but also an essential part of the society to make it work more effective and fluent. There are a number of reasons as to why this is the case.
First of all, groups or organizations provide a platform where peope can strive together for a same goal(aim) ,which they are all intrested in. Working with so many people who have the same target with you is a thing that make people feel excited , and people will be inspired to work more hard and more effective. Besides work, people  are always fond of something and want to share what they love with the people who have the same feeling as them. They want to be identified that the thing they are fond of is worthy, and they love the feeling that they are not alone in the world. So joining a group or an organization is such an important thing for people to indentify themselves from which they can work with people who have same habit with them.
Another reason why groups or organizations are so important for some people is because they proide an environment in which people can have a relax away from the work. The pace of the modern society is so fast that every person bears so much pressure from work or from the family. Therefore, it is necessary for people to take a break from the tense life, throught which they can continue with this kind of life. In this condition, groups or organizations offer a place where people will feel no pressure and no competetion. The only thing they should do is to do what they like to do.
In addition, groups or organizations have already been an essenial part of the society to make it run more fluent. There are so many groups or organization play an important role in protecting the environment of our world and do positive effort to the society.The hope project in China have save  millions of childs from dorping out of school. As we all know that the World Health Organization paly an important part in  retrievaling people who are in danger. And I have an example around myself. I have taken part in a group aiming at protect the enviroment. Every weekend we would go to the pubilic to pick up garbages in different palces in order to maintain a healthy pubilic environment. And now more and more people have join our group and we are so happy to see the resule we have done. I am sure that the more the groups like this are ,the more paceful and civilized will our society be.
In couclution,groups or organizations not only provide a platform for people to do what they interested in with people who have similar habit with them, but also provide an environment where people can relax themselves from the stress of the life, which make them to be an important part of some people's life. In addition, they also do some positive effect to the society, which make the society more paceful and civilized.

kevinliu6883UID: 2338522

Groups or organizations are an important part of some people's lives. Why groups or orgnizations important to people?

Indispensably Groups (groups) or organizations are not only an important part of some people's lives, but also an essential part of the society to make it (what “it” refers) work more effective and fluent. There are a number of reasons as to why this is the case.
First of all, groups or organizations provide a platform where peope (people) can strive together for a same goal(aim) ,which they are all intrested (interested) in. Working with so many people who have the same target with you is a thing that make people feel excited , and people will be inspired to work more hard and more effective. Besides work, people  are always fond of something and want to share what they love with the people who have the same feeling as them. They want to be identified that the thing they are fond of is worthy, and they love the feeling that they are not alone in the world. So joining a group or an organization is such an important thing for people to indentify (identify) themselves from which they can work with people who have same habit with them.
Another reason why groups or organizations are so important for some people is because they proide (provide) an environment in which people can have a relax away from the work. The pace of the modern society is so fast that every person bears so much pressure from work or from the family. Therefore, it is necessary for people to take a break from the (their) tense life, throught which they can continue with this kind of life. In this condition, groups or organizations offer a place where people will feel no pressure and no competetion (competition). The only thing they should do is to do what they like to do.
In addition, groups or organizations have already been an essenial (essential) part of the society to make it run more fluent. There are so many groups or organization(s) play an important role in protecting the environment of our world and do (take) positive effort to the society. The hope project (Hope Project) in China have save (saved) millions of childs (children) from dorping (dropping) out of school. As we all know that the World Health Organization paly(s) an important part in  retrievaling (retrieving) people who are in danger. And I have an example around myself. I have taken part in a group aiming at protect the enviroment (environment). Every weekend we would go to the pubilic (public) to pick up garbages (garbage) in different palces (places) in order to maintain a healthy pubilic (public) environment. And now more and more people have join(ed) our group and we are so happy to see the resule(result) we have done. I am sure that the more the groups like this are(removed) ,the more peaceful (peaceful?) and civilized will our society be.
In couclution (conclusion), groups or organizations not only provide a platform for people to do what they interested in with people who have similar habit with them, but also provide an environment where people can relax themselves from the stress of the life, which make them to be an important part of some people's life. In addition, they also do(generate) some positive effect to the society, which make the society more peaceful(peaceful) and civilized.

kevinliu6883UID: 2338522

Social organizations serve many important functions to our society. They become an essential part of many people's lives.

First, it is these organizations that provide people an occcation to gether so they can do their common favority. A chess club attracts chess fans to play together and so these fans can play together. English schools provide a site for those with strong motivation in english laguage learning. Soccer clubs make people with same hobbies to do their favority together. We can have numerous such examples. without group activity, the fun and interest wil be significantly reduced. with these group activity, people can communicate each other and make their life more interesting.

Second, groups can do many things whereas an individual can not. Like Hope Project, an organization can effecticely collect money and send to the place where money is badly in need. During American civil war, many peple came to fight the federate under the sloagan of "united, we stand". Great cause always require many many people to join.

Furthermore, human being is socialized. People enjoy group activity because they feel more comfortable than live alone. Through the reflection from other members of the group, they find their existence. The encouragement, appraisement, advice, and information for specific event are all human mental requirement. They can get these through group meeting.

Anyway, social organization is an important part in many people's life.

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