issue154 51互助组第2次作业 by ruczephyr

ruczephyrUID: 2181202

TOPIC: ISSUE 154 - "Both parents and communities must be involved in the local schools. Education is too important to leave solely to a group of professional educators."
WORDS: 644         TIME: 1:00:00          DATE: 2007-5-24

Should parents and communities participate in the process of children's education, or leave it solely to professional educators? Concerning this complicated issue, any extreme response would be improper. Fundamentally, I am prone to assert that  the importance of teachers and other educators, for their unique professionalism in subjects taught in schools and teaching experience, must be regarded enough. However, it can not be more emphasizing the role of parents and the outer society is of extraordinary significance.

First and foremost, parents do have the advantages and duty to have involved in the activities in local schools to ensure the overall effect of education and further offer assistances to the teachers.  As parents are the first teachers of the children, and the children , inevitably, might follow their parents' examples, though unconsciously. Thus, habits and predispositions of their fathers' might greatly influence the behaviors of these young kids. Good behaviors exemplify to the children good, while bad behaviors brings about evil .Consider, for instance, suppose a child's parents keep quarrelling all day long, naturally testy temper keeps deep in mind of the child. When he or she grows up, this child could do nothing but to follow the parents' irritable manner, which further incurs denouncement of others.  Additionally, the parents also have the convenience and ability to supervise the behaviors of the children. To extend the point, in schools the teachers might give many regulations to offer guide, while, it is in the realm of home and its adjacent locations that the children perform under the guide from the teachers. Without supervision of the parents, poor ability of self-rule might drives children commit mistakes, sometimes deleteriously.  To such extent, it is the most suggestion that parents joins local schools and educational system to cooperate with the teachers.

What is more, as children inevitably join the activities of the society directly or indirectly, communities also place paramount impact in the process of children's growing. Individuals, no matter child or adult, live in the society, just as fish to the water. If the water offers litter nutrition, such species could not grow large. And if the water gets polluted, the fish might confront the faith of death, let alone growing large species. Similarly, the society may beneficially assist the forming of probity of the children, if there worships the trend of being good. An illustrating example involves that once the government endows with awards to the hero who saves others' lives in great danger. And this definitely presents as an enlightening example to the youth, who might in the future form the habits of help others with glad. Consequently, society and communities should fulfil their responsibility to set positive examples to the children.

Admittedly, no one could take the place of teachers and other professional educators even though parents and communities are extraordinarily paramount in education. On the one hand, to much extent, the significance of parents and communities presents as assistance to the work of educators. While in contrary the core in educational system is the teacher. So, simply put, without effective instructions from the teachers, even parents and society successfully carry out their role of assistance, the result could not turn out good. On the other hand, the teachers have passed professional training to lead children to the right track. Andthe professional knowledge storages and experiences of teaching, no matter in the fields of subjects they teach or the aspects of guiding positive living attitude, are beyond the capacities of both the parents and the society. Thus, teachers and other educators deserve our fully regard and extra attention.

To sum up, parents and the society are encouraged to further engaged in the process of children's education, while this can not be a compensation of neglecting the effect of the teachers. Further, it is rather suggested that both parents, communities and teachers work together to promote the efficiency of education.

[ 本帖最后由 ruczephyr 于 2007-5-25 10:29 编辑 ]

gluttonUID: 2330210

Should parents and communities participate in the process of children's education, or leave it solely to professional educators? Concerning this complicated issue, any extreme response would be improper. Fundamentally, I am prone to assert that  the importance of teachers and other educators, for their unique professionalism in subjects taught in schools and teaching experience, must be regarded enough. However, it （can not be more）（感觉这里有点问题） emphasizing the role of parents and the outer society is of extraordinary significance.

First and foremost, parents do have the advantages and duty to have involved in the activities in local schools to ensure the overall effect of education and further offer assistances to the teachers.  As parents are the first teachers of the children, and the children , inevitably, might follow their parents' examples, though unconsciously. Thus, habits and predispositions of their fathers' might greatly influence the behaviors of these young kids. Good behaviors exemplify to the children good, while bad behaviors brings about evil .Consider, for instance, suppose a child's parents keep quarrelling all day long, naturally testy temper keeps deep in mind of the child. When he or she grows up, this child could do nothing but to follow the parents' irritable manner, which further incurs denouncement of others.  Additionally, the parents also have the convenience and ability to supervise the behaviors of the children. To extend the point, in schools the teachers might give many regulations to offer guide, while, it is in the realm of home and its adjacent locations that the children perform under the guide from the teachers. Without supervision of the parents, poor ability of self-rule might drives children commit mistakes, sometimes deleteriously.  To such extent, it is the （most）（这个词感觉不太恰当） suggestion that parents joins local schools and educational system to cooperate with the teachers.

What is more, as children inevitably join the activities of the society directly or indirectly, communities also place paramount impact in the process of children's growing. Individuals, no matter child or adult, live in the society, just as fish to the water. If the water offers litter nutrition, such species could not grow large. And if the water gets polluted, the fish might confront the faith of death, let alone growing large species. Similarly, the society may beneficially assist the forming of probity of the children, if there worships the trend of being good. An illustrating example involves that once the government endows with awards to the hero who saves others' lives in great danger.（觉得给一个hero endows awards 是一个goverment 的基本职责，用这个例子似乎不太恰当） And this definitely presents as an enlightening example to the youth, who might in the future form the habits of help others with glad. Consequently, society and communities should fulfil their responsibility to set positive examples to the children.

Admittedly, no one could take the place of teachers and other professional educators even though parents and communities are extraordinarily paramount in education. On the one hand, to much extent, the significance of parents and communities presents as assistance to the work of educators. While in contrary the core in educational system is the teacher. So, simply put, without effective instructions from the teachers, even parents and society successfully carry out their role of assistance, the result could not turn out good. On the other hand, the teachers have passed professional training to lead children to the right track. Andthe professional knowledge storages and experiences of teaching, no matter in the fields of subjects they teach or the aspects of guiding positive living attitude, are beyond the capacities of both the parents and the society. Thus, teachers and other educators deserve our fully regard and extra （more）attention.

To sum up, parents and the society are encouraged to further engaged in the process of children's education, while this can not be a compensation of neglecting the effect of the teachers. Further, it is rather suggested that both parents, communities and teachers work together to promote the efficiency of education.
总体感觉不错，有一气呵成的感觉，每一段感觉都很充实，论证比较到位。自己确实也没找到有多少可以修改的地方，拼写错误差不多都没有了，:funk: 。有时间看下我的，thanks
  by 无边无际

[ 本帖最后由 glutton 于 2007-5-25 18:29 编辑 ]

TidusnakeUID: 2281340

Should parents and communities participate in the process of children's education, or leave it solely to professional educators? Concerning this complicated issue, any extreme response would be improper. Fundamentally, I am prone to assert that  the importance of teachers and other educators, for their unique professionalism in subjects taught in schools and teaching experience, must be regarded enough. However, it can not be more emphasizing the role of parents and the outer society is of extraordinary significance.First and foremost, parents do have the advantages and duty to have involved in the activities in local schools to ensure the overall effect of education and further offer assistances to the teachers.  As parents are the first teachers of the children, and the children , inevitably, might follow their parents' examples, though unconsciously. Thus, habits and predispositions of their fathers' might greatly influence the behaviors of these young kids. Good behaviors exemplify to the children good, while bad behaviors brings about evil .Consider, for instance, suppose a child's parents keep quarrelling all day long, naturally testy temper keeps deep in mind of the child. When he or she grows up, this child could do nothing but to follow the parents' irritable manner, which further incurs denouncement of others.  Additionally, the parents also have the convenience and ability to supervise the behaviors of the children. To extend the point, in schools the teachers might give many regulations to offer guide, while, it is in the realm of home and its adjacent locations that the children perform under the guide from the teachers. Without supervision of the parents, poor ability of self-rule might drives children commit mistakes, sometimes deleteriously.  To such extent, it is the most suggestion that parents joins local schools and educational system to cooperate with the teachers.What is more, as children inevitably join the activities of the society directly or indirectly, communities also place paramount impact in the process of children's growing. Individuals, no matter child or adult, live in the society, just as fish to the water. If the water offers litter nutrition, such species could not grow large. And if the water gets polluted, the fish might confront the faith of death, let alone growing large species. Similarly (水好使鱼好说得通，鱼好使水好说不通吧，similarly换个词), the society may beneficially assist the forming of probity of the children, if there worships the trend of being good. (there?) An illustrating example involves that once the government endows with awards to the hero who saves others' lives in great danger. And this definitely presents as an enlightening example to the youth, who might in the future form the habits of help others with glad. (我觉得这个例子通啊，不涉及政府职责的问题)Consequently, society and communities should fulfil their responsibility to set positive examples to the children.Admittedly, no one could take the place of teachers and other professional educators even though parents and communities are extraordinarily paramount in education. On the one hand, to much extent, the significance of parents and communities presents as assistance to the work of educators. While in contrary the core in educational system is the teacher. So, simply put, without effective instructions from the teachers, even parents and society successfully carry out their role of assistance, the result could not turn out good. On the other hand, the teachers have passed professional training to lead children to the right track. Andthe professional knowledge storages and experiences of teaching, no matter in the fields of subjects they teach or the aspects of guiding positive living attitude, are beyond the capacities of both the parents and the society. Thus, teachers and other educators deserve our fully regard and extra attention.（关注老师和教育工作者干吗？关注的是小孩，关注的是老师和这些工作者在教育中起的作用而不是他们本身，我觉得改成Thus, teachers’and other educators’roles deserve our fully regard and extra attention.）To sum up, parents and the society are encouraged to further engaged in the process of children's education, while this can not be a compensation of neglecting the effect of the teachers. Further, it is rather suggested that both parents, communities and teachers work together to promote the efficiency of education.

cy23UID: 2310318

Should parents and communities participate in the process of children's education, or leave it solely to professional educators? Concerning this complicated issue, any extreme response would be improper. Fundamentally, I am prone to assert that  the importance of[ teachers and other educators可不可以就说teachers或educators？], for their unique professionalism in subjects taught in schools and teaching experience, must be regarded enough. However,[ it can not be more emphasizing the role of parents（我感觉这句有点别扭，可不可以该为the role of parents can not be more emphasized不然总觉得和后面一句有点不配？）] and the outer society is of extraordinary significance.

First and foremost, parents do have the advantages and duty to [have ]involved in the activities in local schools to ensure the overall effect of education and further offer assistances to the teachers.  As parents are the first teachers of the children, and the children , inevitably, might follow their parents' examples, though unconsciously. Thus, habits and predispositions of their [fathers'（为啥只说fathers？是不是这里是一种泛指家长？用parents不行吗）] might greatly influence the behaviors of these young kids. Good behaviors exemplify to the children good, while bad behaviors brings about [（evil）（这词感觉有点过了） ].Consider, for instance, suppose a child's parents keep quarrelling all day long, naturally testy temper keeps deep in mind of the child. When he or she grows up, this child could do nothing but to follow the parents' irritable manner, which further incurs denouncement of others.  Additionally, the parents also have the convenience and ability to supervise the behaviors of the children. To extend the point, in schools the teachers might give many regulations to offer guide, while, it is in the realm of home and its adjacent locations that the children perform under the guide from the teachers. Without supervision of the parents, poor ability of self-rule might drives children commit mistakes, sometimes deleteriously.  To such extent, it is the most suggestion that parents joins[（join）] local schools and educational system [删去to]to cooperate with the teachers.

What is more, as children inevitably join the activities of the society directly or indirectly, communities also place paramount impact in the process of children's growing. Individuals, no matter child or adult, live in the society, just as fish to the water. If the water offers litter nutrition, such species could not grow large. And if the water gets polluted, the fish might confront the faith of death, let alone growing large species.[例子不错，但为什么都说水对鱼不好之处，若改为把前一句改为“水好鱼也好”，与后面类比更佳]Similarly, the society may beneficially assist the forming of probity of the children, if there worships the trend of being good. An illustrating example involves that once the government endows with awards to the hero who saves others' lives in great danger. And this definitely presents as an enlightening example to the youth, who might in the future form the habits of help others with glad. Consequently, society and communities should fulfil [（fulfill）]their responsibility to set positive examples to the children.

Admittedly, no one could take the place of teachers and other professional educators even though parents and communities are extraordinarily paramount in education. On the one hand, to much extent, the significance of parents and communities presents as assistance to the work of educators. While [（改为After all,可以吗？）]in contrary the core in educational system is the teacher. So, simply put, without effective instructions from the teachers, even parents and society successfully carry out their role of assistance, the result could not turn out good. On the other hand, the teachers have passed professional training to lead children to the right track. And the professional knowledge storages and experiences of teaching, no matter in the fields of subjects they teach or the aspects of guiding positive living attitude, are beyond the capacities of both the parents and the society. Thus, teachers and other educators deserve our fully regard and extra attention.

To sum up, parents and the society are encouraged to further engaged [(engage)] in the process of children's education, while this can not be a compensation of neglecting the effect of the teachers. Further, it is rather suggested that both [用both 不行吧？]parents, communities and teachers work together to promote the efficiency of education.
[思路清晰，语言流畅，衔接自然，值得学习]
BY小青蛙

[ 本帖最后由 cy23 于 2007-5-26 11:41 编辑 ]

zhoumaye425UID: 2262458

Should parents and communities participate in the process of children's education, or leave it solely to professional educators? Concerning this complicated issue, any extreme response would be improper. Fundamentally, I am prone to assert that  the importance of teachers and other educators, for their unique professionalism in subjects taught in schools and teaching experience, must be regarded enough. However, it can not be more emphasizing the role of parents and the outer society is of extraordinary significance.不知道哪里,有点不通样的

First and foremost, parents do have the advantages and duty to have involved in the activities in local schools to ensure the overall effect of education and further offer assistances to the teachers.  As parents are the first teachers of the children, and不需要and吧 the children , inevitably, might follow their parents' examples, though unconsciously. Thus, habits and predispositions of their fathers' might greatly influence the behaviors of these young kids. Good behaviors exemplify to the children good, while bad behaviors brings about evil .Consider, for instance, suppose a child's parents keep quarrelling all day long, naturally testy temper keeps deep in mind of the child. When he or she grows up, this child could do nothing but to follow the parents' irritable manner, which further incurs denouncement of others.  Additionally, the parents also have the convenience and ability to supervise the behaviors of the children. To extend the point, in schools the teachers might give many regulations to offer guide, while, it is in the realm of home and its adjacent locations that the children perform under the guide from the teachers. Without supervision of the parents, poor ability of self-rule might drives children commit mistakes, sometimes deleteriously.  To such extent, it is the most suggestion that parents joins local schools and educational system to cooperate with the teachers.

What is more, as children inevitably join the activities of the society directly or indirectly, communities also place paramount impact in the process of children's growing. Individuals, no matter child or adult, live in the society, just as fish to the water. If the water offers litter nutrition, such species could not grow large. And if the water gets polluted, the fish might confront the faith of death, let alone growing large species. Similarly, the society may beneficially assist the forming of probity of the children, if there是不是they呀 worships the trend of being good. An illustrating example involves that once the government endows with awards to the hero who saves others' lives in great danger感觉这个例子不好,有点牵强,举点社会组织大型慈善活动或学术活动的会不会好些. And this definitely presents as an enlightening example to the youth, who might in the future form the habits of help others with glad. Consequently, society and communities should fulfil their responsibility to set positive examples to the children.

Admittedly, no one could take the place of teachers and other professional educators even though parents and communities are extraordinarily paramount in education. On the one hand, to much extent, the significance of parents and communities presents as assistance to the work of educators. While in contrary这里用相反的不好吧,直接说真正的核心是老师就好了 the core in educational system is the teacher. So, simply put, without effective instructions from the teachers, even parents and society successfully carry out their role of assistance, the result could not turn out good. On the other hand, the teachers have passed professional training to lead children to the right track. Andthe professional knowledge storages and experiences of teaching, no matter in the fields of subjects they teach or the aspects of guiding positive living attitude, are beyond the capacities of both the parents and the society. Thus, teachers and other educators deserve our fully regard and extra attention.

To sum up, parents and the society are encouraged to further engaged in the process of children's education, while this can not be a compensation of neglecting the effect of the teachers. Further, it is rather suggested that both parents, communities and teachers work together to promote the efficiency of education.

感觉文章长但不一点也不罗嗦,内容很丰富,句子用得比我漂亮多了,实在是没太多我能改的了.我什么时候才能写长点写得有层次点喔~~   By KloseChou

[ 本帖最后由 zhoumaye425 于 2007-5-26 20:04 编辑 ]