Issu130【07-10G Superstar大帖】第四次作业 by学野

学野UID: 2155973

TOPIC: ISSUE130 - "How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."
WORDS: 468          TIME: 00:45:00          DATE: 2007-5-21 23:25:04
同样是第一次限时，其实准备好久，结果仍然很失败，好像限时很难提升字数阿，试了很多次。。。大家狠拍吧，以做好心理准备，哈哈，有拍必回！！！！！
Socialization, a process by which people, especially children learn to behave according to prevailing norms or standards of the society. the speaker's assertion that how children are socialized determines the destiny of society is somehow oversimplifying, for the reason that although socialization to a degree conduce to the harmony of society, the society's destiny depends on some other important factors such as advancing technologies. What's more, the claim that people now have not learned to raise children who can help bring about a better society ignores a myriad of successes on socializing children.

First, socialization is in reality beneficial to the harmony of the whole society. From classrooms to playgrounds, schools to homes, children learn to behave to be accepted by the major of peers. A developed psychological understanding and social maturity may be revealed when well-socialized children have talk with others, compromise skillfully, tackle the conflicts in peers. Those who are not well-socialized may behave more aggressively, which is possible to make campus violence and jeopardize the society harmony. There is a compelling example aptly illustrates this point. a gunman who killed 32 students on the Virginia Tech campus is always behaving aggressive ever before, revealing that he was not well socialized. In short, socialization does help to the society's harmony which is crucial to the development of society.

However, the destiny of society doesn't depends merely on socialization, there are still other important factors such as the advancing technology and individual's originative thoughts which aggregate to a deep reform in society.Only after the invention of steam machine does most of the western countries go into the Industrial Revolution. Only after the Confucius apothegms and significant thoughts does China go into the well-rounded situation with high ethic standards.In this sense, the destiny depends on socialization is somehow oversimple neglecting other influencing factors.

As for the latter claim that it is unfortunate that people have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society, one must have a deep understanding about what is a better society. History informs us that  the criteria of a better society is flexible due to different historical backgrounds. If "a better society" is defined as a harmony society which people respect other's opinions and are tolerant to different cultures and values, the healthy socialization of children make good contribution in the form of a lot of good phenomena nowadays. Students tend to give more respect to the low social spheres and other religion realms as well as other kinds of cultures. As a result, the society becomes more harmonious and well-rounded in accordance with the criteria which we defined above.

In sum, the speaker's assertion is one -sided and rule out other factors of determining the destiny of society and too pessimistic on the education of socialization in today's world.

[ 本帖最后由 学野 于 2007-5-27 13:12 编辑 ]

huaxinluoboUID: 2326780

Socialization, a process by which people, especially children learn to behave according to prevailing norms or standards of the society. the speaker's assertion that how children are socialized determines the destiny of society is somehow oversimplifying, for the reason that although socialization to a degree conduce to the harmony of society, the society's destiny depends on some other important factors such as advancing technologies. What's more, the claim that people now have not learned to raise children who can help bring about a better society ignores a myriad of successes on socializing children.
First, socialization is in reality beneficial to the harmony of the whole society. From classrooms to playgrounds, schools to homes, children learn to behave to be accepted by the major of peers. A developed psychological understanding and social maturity may be revealed when well-socialized children have talk with others, compromise skillfully, tackle the conflicts in peers. Those who are not well-socialized may behave more aggressively, which is possible to make campus violence and jeopardize the society harmony. There is a compelling example aptly illustrates this point. a gunman who killed 32 students on the Virginia Tech campus is always behaving aggressive ever before, revealing that he was not well socialized. In short, socialization does help to the society's harmony which is crucial to the development of society.这个例子本人强烈建议不要用，干嘛提这么伤心的事呢，随便编个吸白粉，酗酒之类的就行
However, the destiny of society doesn't depends merely on socialization, there are still other important factors such as the advancing technology and individual's originative thoughts which aggregate to a deep reform in society.Only after the invention of steam machine does most of the western countries go into the Industrial Revolution. Only after the Confucius apothegms and significant thoughts does China go into the well-rounded situation with high ethic standards.In this sense, the destiny depends on socialization is somehow oversimple neglecting other influencing factors. 写的很好，例子也不错
As for the latter claim that it is unfortunate that people have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society, one must have a deep understanding about what is a better society. History informs us that  the criteria of a better society is flexible due to different historical backgrounds. If "a better society" is defined as a harmony society which people respect other's opinions and are tolerant to different cultures and values, the healthy socialization of children make good contribution in the form of a lot of good phenomena nowadays. Students tend to give more respect to the low social spheres and other religion realms as well as other kinds of cultures. As a result, the society becomes more harmonious and well-rounded in accordance with the criteria which we defined above.我觉得这段好像有点跑，和开头段里的意思联系也不大。要讨论的应该是到底人们有没有学会正确的教育孩子。
In sum, the speaker's assertion is one -sided and rule out other factors of determining the destiny of society and too pessimistic on the education of socialization in today's world.
总的来说写的不错，前两段论述的很准确，思维也很清晰。只有第三段有点问题，不过从开头和结尾段看的出来你的思路，下回稍加注意一定没问题的。

学野UID: 2155973

谢谢~我的第三段其实想表达不同意作者悲观观点,而是现在普遍现象孩子们都表现很好的socialization说明家长还是教育的很好的成果,而这些是基于a better society的标准是和谐社会,如果标准变了,那就另当别论,可能是没时间了很赶,所以没展开,其实第二段的例子应该展开更好说明对社会命运的其他决定因素.
至于第一段的例子......因为限时 所以就想到印象深刻的,没管他合不合适,下次一定注意!!