Argument9 【SWEETBOX】第三次作业 by 小破孩

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Argument9
The following appeared in a memorandum from a dean at Omega University.

"Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by thirty percent. Potential employers apparently believe the grades at Omega are inflated; this would explain why Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs, as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should now terminate student evaluation of professors."

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In the above argument, the arguer suggests terminating student evaluation to avoid over grading from the instructors and ensure better jobs for the graduates, which is neither cogent nor persuasive. Closer scrutiny could reveal several logical fallacies he commits as illustrated below.

First of all, whether graduates from Omega University (OU) are less popular than those from Alpha University (AU) in the job market is due to their unreliable grades is open to doubt. No evidence even indicates that employers thought grades of OU are inflated. Additionally, myriads of variables should be taken into consideration upon job-hunting for graduate students, such as extracurricular activities in the students’ societies, internship or part-time job experience, communication skills, leadership skills, etc. Without information related to the above aspects provided, hardly can we find the reasons causing differences between graduates from two universities. It is quite possible that the student office from AU provides plenty of internship opportunities and prepares lots of career talks, helping students finding their interests early before graduation, and choosing suitable industry development upon their own needs; whereas the office from OU just put the information on the websites without further movements.

Secondly, whether it is the evaluation that prompts the instructors to giver higher grades is suspected. There are many influencing factors determines how an instructor grades the class, for instance, the grading guidance provided from the university, comparison with previous students, availability of effective teaching facilities, arrangement of syllabus, etc. It is possible that due to the tough local economy, students are more indigent for further work therefore the overall performance is improving. It is also likely that after adoption of an updated set of teaching materials and newly imported teaching overhead projectors or computers, the instructor can express their ideas in a more straightforward way, making the courses easier and more interesting. Unless all relevant changes of OU are provided and investigated thoroughly, the conclusion that after evaluation, the students’ grades are assigned unusually higher is too hasty.

Moreover, the claim that terminating the evaluation would ensure better jobs for graduates is unwarranted. Grades are not the only thing the employ looks into from a graduate, therefore reasonable grading is not sufficient for a suitable and successful job. OU should find more efficient way to improve their gradates’ competitiveness. For instance, the ability to solve problems calmly in an emergency, compatibility to work with others in a team, initiation and independence in work, etc, all of which requires tough training and need much financial input, but indefinitely will give their graduates life long benefits.

Taken together, the above argument is not well reasoned as it stands which renders it lacks credibility and unconvincing. Without providing the comparison of the differences between OU and AU or the discussion upon how to foster a successful graduate, the arguer’s suggestion cannot be adopted.

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In the above argument, the arguer suggests terminating student evaluation to avoid over grading from the instructors and ensure better jobs for the graduates, which is neither cogent nor persuasive. Closer scrutiny could reveal several logical fallacies he commits as illustrated below.

First of all, whether graduates from Omega University (OU) are less popular than those from Alpha University (AU) in the job market is due to their unreliable grades is open to doubt. No evidence even indicates that employers thought grades of OU are inflated. （这点我觉得和你一样，觉得点到就好了，好像还真不好展开）Additionally, myriads of variables should be taken into consideration upon job-hunting for graduate students, such as extracurricular activities in the students’ societies, internship or part-time job experience, communication skills, leadership skills, etc. Without information related to the above aspects provided, hardly can we find the reasons causing differences between graduates from two universities. It is quite possible that the student office from AU provides plenty of internship opportunities and prepares lots of career talks, helping students finding their interests early before graduation, and choosing suitable industry development upon their own needs; whereas the office from OU just put the information on the websites without further movements.

Secondly, whether it is the evaluation that prompts the instructors to giver higher grades is suspected. There are many influencing factors determines how an instructor grades the class, for instance, the grading guidance provided from the university, comparison with previous students, availability of effective teaching facilities, arrangement of syllabus, etc. It is possible that due to the tough local economy, students are more indigent (感觉这个词不太好，更想找工作？) for further work therefore the overall performance is improving. It is also likely that after adoption of an updated set of teaching materials and newly imported teaching overhead projectors or computers, the instructor can express their ideas in a more straightforward way, making the courses easier and more interesting（到这似乎还要说要学生表现好了好点）. Unless all relevant changes of OU are provided and investigated thoroughly, the conclusion that after evaluation, the students’ grades are assigned unusually higher is too hasty.

Moreover, the claim that terminating the evaluation would ensure better jobs for graduates is unwarranted. Grades are not the only thing the employ looks into from a graduate, therefore reasonable grading is not sufficient for a suitable and successful job. OU should find more efficient way to improve their gradates’ competitiveness. For instance, the ability to solve problems calmly in an emergency, compatibility to work with others in a team, initiation and independence in work, etc, all of which requires tough training and need much financial input, but indefinitely will give their graduates life long（lifelong） benefits.

Taken together, the above argument is not well reasoned as it stands which (which用在这有语法错误了，and) renders it lacks (render 好像没这种用法) credibility and unconvincing. Without providing the comparison of the differences between OU and AU or the discussion upon how to foster a successful graduate, the arguer’s suggestion cannot be adopted.
每次看你的阿狗都像当范文一样的看，感觉相当的好。