issue41 【Victors 小组】第九作业

baiyu_2005UID: 2255194

Issue 41
Such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science.

I partly agree with the point the statement supports above that the nonmainstream areas of inquiry really meet some people’s particular needs could not be reached by our orthodox science, such as physics, chemistry or mathematics. However on my observance, it is too hasty to judge that these nonmainstream disciplines play a critical role in the entire society because the harms they bring far surpass the advantages go with them.

In the first place, admittedly, in some special aspects, especially in spirit and mentality state, orthodox subjects dominate our academic study and research fail to answer a lot of questions people render because of the boundary which they lack the ability to exceed. When it comes to this, turning to astrology, fortune-telling, or other heterodoxy is always a way to find a seeming reasonable explanation for your problem or even tackle, at least as they claim, them. Lacking this sometimes the accumulated pressure or distraught on your mind without a vent to release it might cause some serious problem. In this aspect, the nonmainstream could really make a significant difference.

Nevertheless, basing on nonscientific fundament, the harms it brings could render the benefits minimal things. You need not look further than the fact the function it makes is just circumscribed on spirit level. If we rely entirely on them you would inevitably not only the right direction in life but also damage your health or interests. For example, every year there are innumerous people indulge in the heresy because too much depending on non-sciences, furthermore the abandoning would cause a series of result as squandering money to donate, losing normal mind and even ultimately suicide, maybe. In this aspect, the nonmainstream inquiry can serious destroyed the human beings as a whole sometimes.

In the other important issue that concerns with science development, it is also better to rely less on nonscientific base but more on its own theory system. If too many people depend too much on nonmainstream inquiry will distract attention from our science which further our society progress not only on economy but also on culture. Take Isaac Newton, a great English mathematician and scientist in 16 century. In his early year, inventing of differential calculus and formulating of the theories of universal gravitation, terrestrial mechanics, and color no doubt let him the most significant science harbinger on classic physics. However, his later time contribute only to some religion study from which he want to find explanation to the unsolved dilemmas in his physics research. No matter his own opinion on his later year study, the scientific historians almost criticize the religion fruits are nothing valuable aide from pure religion facet. As the same, there are a lot of people denoting a lot of money every year for religion or superstition reason instead of educational reason.

In sum, although the nonmainstream inquiry mentions in the topic really meet some need people required, but consider the human beings as a whole and the scientific progress nonscience damage us largely. So, on my own judge, it would never disappear or take more responsibility in our current age.     

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I partly agree with the point the statement supports above that the nonmainstream areas of inquiry really meet some people’s particular needs could not be reached by our orthodox science, such as physics, chemistry or mathematics. However on my observance, it is too hasty to judge that these nonmainstream disciplines play a critical role in the entire society because the harms they bring far surpass the advantages go with them.

In the first place, admittedly, in some special aspects, especially in spirit and mentality state, orthodox subjects dominate our academic study and research fail to answer a lot of questions people render because of the boundary which they lack the ability to exceed. When it comes to this, turning to astrology, fortune-telling, or other heterodoxy is always a way to find a seeming reasonable explanation for your problem or even tackle, at least as they claim, them. 【这个them的作用没看懂的说】
Lacking this sometimes the accumulated pressure or distraught on your mind without a vent to release it might cause some serious problem【复数】. In this aspect, the nonmainstream could really make a significant difference.

Nevertheless, basing on nonscientific fundament, the harms it brings could render the benefits minimal things. You need not look further than the fact the function it makes 【加个which更好些吧】 is just circumscribed on spirit level. If we rely entirely on them you would inevitably not only 【少动词啊，我猜少的是lose】the right direction in life but also damage your health or interests. For example, every year there are innumerous people indulge in the heresy because too much depending on non-sciences,【这个好像没有因果联系】 furthermore the abandoning would cause a series of result 【加个such好些】as squandering money to donate, losing normal mind and even ultimately suicide, maybe. In this aspect, the nonmainstream inquiry can serious destroyed the human beings as a whole sometimes.

In the other important issue that concerns with science development, it is also better to rely less on nonscientific base but more on its own theory system. If too many people depend too much on nonmainstream inquiry【前面好像没主语】 will distract attention from our science which further our society progress not only on economy but also on culture. Take Isaac Newton, a great English mathematician and scientist in 16 century【as an example】. In his early year, inventing of differential calculus and formulating of the theories of universal gravitation, terrestrial mechanics, and color no doubt let him the most significant science harbinger on classic physics. However, his later time contribute only to some religion study from which he want to find explanation to the unsolved dilemmas in his physics research. No matter his own opinion on his later year study, the scientific historians almost criticize the religion fruits are nothing valuable aide from pure religion facet. As the same, there are a lot of people denoting a lot of money every year for religion or superstition reason instead of educational reason.

In sum, although the nonmainstream inquiry mentions in the topic really meet some need people required, but consider the human beings as a whole and the scientific progress nonscience damage us largely. So, on my own judge, it would never disappear or take more responsibility in our current age
【总的来说要比我写的好很多很多，动词比较丰富的说，句型上也很讲究，但是有几句没太看懂的说，还望作者给讲解下。感觉结尾可以写的更好一些，尤其是最后一句话，感觉有点指代不明。第一次给别人改作文，没经验，说的不对的地方还望见谅】

baiyu_2005UID: 2255194

1。even tackle, at least as they claim, them. 【这个them的作用没看懂的说】
插入语应该加在“tackle”之前，放错了。
2。【前面好像没主语】，是忘了主语了
3。【少动词啊，我猜少的是lose】，恩，可能这次忘了用word纠错了
4。没有因果关系那个我在想象，当时是不知道找什么例子了
5。结尾是比较匆忙。
谢谢改的啊，这也是别人头一回给我改，让我找到了很多不足
另外我这写的没卡时间，大概用了一个多小时呢，尽量构造复杂句式，真正考的时候不一定能写这么长的句子