issue51【8月上海组】第一次作业--Leave

chentian_nkUID: 2340104

issue51  
提纲：有些极端需要平衡
(1)迎合需求确实有好处 (2)但是，也有坏处 (3)其实迎合每个人的教育是不存在的 (4)学生和教育之间应该平衡
Education is a process of education or teaching. What we take about here is students' education, which we often refer to the process to develop the skill, knowledge and character of students. An important goal of education is to maximize the capability of our students. But there is another problem related with education, that is the effect, education's effect. Someone think that education will be only effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student. As far as I am concerned, I think it is a piece of extreme position that missed the point somewhat.

To begin with, the education which can meet the needs and interests of students are more likely to inspire student to study harder. As Einstein once said: "I have no special gift- I am only passionately curious." we believe that a course which caters the needs and interests of students is more attractive. For that case, the student would pay more attention to their study and pay more time to reflect the question that asked by their teachers, which can develop their mind.

However, I must point out that, if the education is only designed to meet the needs and interests of students, there will be some problems that impede the process of education.  As we know, the basic knowledge is very important to each student and can not be ignored. However, what should we do if a student whose name is Mike does not like to study Math? If we only consider Mike's interests, should we permit he drop math? It does meet his interests, however, will bring big problem to his life. Without math knowledge, he may be confused when facing some simply problem, such as tax and fees that he should pay. Moreover, if Mike likes drawing, when he studies perspective, he may regret his neglect to math. He now knows that without math he cannot study perspective well. Who should be blamed for the situation? The education or Mike himself? Obviously, this kind of education impedes the development of students, let along the effect.

In face, the education which is designed to meet the needs and interests of each student does not exist. No two pieces of leaves are the same, so is applied to the students' needs and interests. Different students have different ideas about their needs and interests. No educator can design such education that applies to each student.

In sum, I think we should put a balance between students’ needs and the school education. On one hand, educators should try their best to design a good education that can develop students' skill, knowledge and character; On the other hand, the school should also provide some courses which satisfy the needs and interests of our students. In fact, both are necessary for maximizing students' capability.

soartangUID: 2326144

我比较弱的。也来改改吧。仅供参考

Education is a process of education or teaching. What we take(talk) about here is students' education, which we often refer to the process to(个人觉得用of+ing形式比较好） develop the skill, knowledge and character of students. An important goal of education is to maximize the capability of our students. But there is another problem related with education, that is the effect, education's effect. Someone think(thinks) that education will be only effective only(前面一个only可以省略吧？) when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student. As far as I am concerned, I think it is a piece of extreme position that missed the point somewhat.

To begin with, the education which can meet the needs and interests of students are（is） more likely to inspire student to study harder. As Einstein once said: "I have no special gift- I am only passionately curious." we believe that a course which caters（＋for？） the needs and interests of students is more attractive. For that case, the student would pay more attention to their study and pay more time to reflect the question that asked by their teachers, which can develop their mind.

However, I must point out that, if the education is only designed to meet the needs and interests of students, there will be some problems that impede the process of education.  As we know, the basic knowledge is very important to each student and can not be ignored. However, what should we do if a student whose name is Mike does not like to study Math? If we only consider Mike's interests, should we permit he drop math?（allow sb. to do sth.)It does meet his interests, however, (+it)will bring big problem to his life. Without math knowledge, he may be confused when facing some simply problem, such as tax and fees that he should pay. Moreover, if Mike likes drawing, when he studies perspective, he may regret his neglect to math. He now knows that without math he cannot study perspective well. Who should be blamed for the situation? The education or Mike himself? Obviously, this kind of education impedes the development of students, let along the effect.这一段感觉缺少点正儿八经的道理，全部在讲mike。能归结出理论最好，我觉得

In face,(in fact?) the education which is designed to meet the needs and interests of each student does not exist. No two pieces of（多余了吧，有点中国英语) leaves are the same, so is applied to the students' needs and interests(so is it when  applied to the students' needs and interests这样语法可能比较对). Different students have different ideas about their needs and interests. No educator can design such education that applies to each student.

In sum, I think we should put (keep比较好）a balance between students’ needs and the school education. On one hand, educators should try their best to design a good education that can develop students' skill, knowledge and character; On the other hand, the school should also provide some courses which satisfy the needs and interests of our students. In fact, both are necessary for maximizing students' capability.

第4段说理不够充分，阐述一下为什么不能达到迎合每个人的教育。
总体感觉说理性不够强。小的语法错误比较多。

呵呵。望参考

[ 本帖最后由 soartang 于 2007-7-15 13:33 编辑 ]

stonescjUID: 2359180

issue51  
提纲：有些极端需要平衡
(1)迎合需求确实有好处 (2)但是，也有坏处 (3)其实迎合每个人的教育是不存在的 (4)学生和教育之间应该平衡
Education is a process of education or teaching. What we take（talk） about here is students' education, which we often refer to the process to develop the skill, knowledge and character of students. An important goal of education is to maximize the capability of our students. But there is another problem related with education, that is the effect, education's effect（口语话了点）. Someone think that education will be only （这个only可以去掉）effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student. As far as I am concerned, I think it is a piece of extreme position that missed the point somewhat. (开头有点长，应该简洁点～呵呵)

To begin with, the education which can meet the needs and interests of students are more likely to inspire student to study harder. As Einstein once said: "I have no special gift- I am only passionately curious." we believe that a course which caters (cater to)the needs and interests of students is more attractive. For that case, the student would pay more attention to their study and pay more time to reflect the question that(可否不要that？) asked by their teachers, which can develop their mind（感觉不是很通顺，是思维吧？which can benefit for the development of their ideation）. 这段有点短，论证不是很充分，可以再加点。

However, I must point out that, if the education is only designed to meet the needs and interests of students, there will be some problems that impede the process of education.  As we know, the basic knowledge is very important to each student and can not be ignored. However, what should we do if a student whose name is Mike does not like to study Math（mathematics,专业点）? If we only consider Mike's interests, should we permit he drop math? It does meet his interests, however, will bring big problem to his life. Without math knowledge, he may be confused when facing some simply problem, such as tax and fees that he should pay. Moreover, if Mike likes drawing, when he studies perspective, he may regret his neglect to math（表达上有点欠妥）. He now knows that without math he cannot study perspective well. Who should be blamed for the situation? The education or Mike himself? Obviously, this kind of education impedes the development of students, let along the effect.

In face(fact), the education which is designed to meet the needs and interests of each student does not exist. No two pieces of leaves are the same, so is applied to the students' needs and interests. Different students have different ideas about their needs and interests. No educator can design such education that applies to each student.(同样的问题，欠论证，应该再深入讨论为何不存在。)

In sum, I think we should put a balance between students’ needs and the school education. On one hand, educators should try their best to design a good education that can develop students' skill, knowledge and character; On the other hand, the school should also provide some courses which satisfy the needs and interests of our students. In fact, both are necessary for maximizing students' capability.

总体：
结构还可以，但是论证还不充分
语言应该再多点变换，词汇不是特别丰富，呵呵～～
愚见愚见，望参考！

ShawninGTERUID: 2256189

issue51  

(1)Education is a process of education or teaching. What we take about here is students' education, which we often refer to the process to develop the skill, knowledge and character of students. (2)An important goal of education is to maximize the capability of our students. But there is another problem related with education, that is the effect, education's effect. (3)Someone think that education will be only effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student. As far as I am concerned, I think it is a piece of extreme position that missed the point somewhat.
// 第一部分在说背景，说明讨论的是教育相关的问题；第二部分讨论的主题，也是产生分歧的地方；第三部分在题目观点的基础上提出自己的观点；
// 第二部分对讨论主题的表述不是很清楚，比如that is the effect，给读者的概念还是比较模糊的，如果能再加以限定，加以明确，效果可能会更好；
// 第三部分的观点表述应该和第二部分确定的讨论焦点有关系，第二部分对讨论的主题进行聚焦后，再提出观点，但是这两部分的逻辑关系貌似比较弱。

To begin with, the education which can meet the needs and interests of students are more likely to inspire student to study harder. As Einstein once said: "I have no special gift- I am only passionately curious." we believe that a course which caters the needs and interests of students is more attractive. For that case, the student would pay more attention to their study and pay more time to reflect the question that asked by their teachers, which can develop their mind.
//观点＋例子，典型的段落结构，不过我觉得如果说理过程不是很复杂的话，把例子多写一些，讲透可能会好一点，最后再来个小总结。我也有这个问题，说出来自勉。


However, I must point out that, if the education is only designed to meet the needs and interests of students, there will be some problems that impede the process of education.  As we know, the basic knowledge is very important to each student and can not be ignored. However, what should we do if a student whose name is Mike does not like to study Math? If we only consider Mike's interests, should we permit he drop math? It does meet his interests, however, will bring big problem to his life. Without math knowledge, he may be confused when facing some simply problem, such as tax and fees that he should pay. Moreover, if Mike likes drawing, when he studies perspective, he may regret his neglect to math. He now knows that without math he cannot study perspective well. Who should be blamed for the situation? The education or Mike himself? Obviously, this kind of education impedes the development of students, let along the effect.
//观点过于宽泛。 There will be some problems..., 还是不知道是那些Problem。

In face, the education which is designed to meet the needs and interests of each student does not exist. No two pieces of leaves are the same, so is applied to the students' needs and interests. Different students have different ideas about their needs and interests. No educator can design such education that applies to each student.
//红字部分观点与文章第二段的观点貌似有点矛盾，，

In sum, I think we should put a balance between students’ needs and the school education. On one hand, educators should try their best to design a good education that can develop students' skill, knowledge and character; On the other hand, the school should also provide some courses which satisfy the needs and interests of our students. In fact, both are necessary for maximizing students' capability.
//红字部分的观点在前面没有出现过，，

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个人的一点想法，仅供参考
拍的较多，可能有偏颇之处，欢迎之处，
里面好多也是我正在努力克服的问题，
anyway, 加强交流，共同加油! : )

chentian_nkUID: 2340104

重写！中间有些句子直接抄的石头的，主要想借鉴一些句子表述方法和意思表达
尤其是开头和结尾，我觉得是比较简洁万用的模板。毕竟那个不是body不用花太多笔墨。

There is much debate over the truly effect of education. Some people maintain that only specifically designed education which meets the individual needs and interests of each student can be truly effective. As far as I am concerned, I agree with this notion conservatively since it will encounter some latent problem when bringing it into effect.

To begin with, an important goal of education is to bring up person with specialize excellent abilities and a education which cater to one's interests can achieve this goal. Psychological research reveals that when studying in the field they like, people can exert 80% of their potential, on the contrary, they can only exert 20%. That is to say, interest is an important factor in our study. As Einstein, a famous physics, puts it :"I have no special gift--I am just passionately curious." This view has been shared by more and more people now. Interests lead us to read more, reflect more and research more. With interest, we would not feel tired or monotone and have courage to conquer obstacles we meet. While without interest we are less likely to insist in studying and more likely to drop it. Thus, considering the influence which interests shed on the study educator should try their best to design such education that cater to students' interests.

However, such education system is a double-edged sword, in other words, it has some disadvantages. First, we must consider the fact that how we get true information about students' interests and needs. As we know, education usually begins at a early age, when children are so immature that they may possible not know what fields they interest in. Also, they are too young to have a sane program about their career. As a result, too early implementing student-concerned education will narrow their ken and capability for acclimation of future career. Secondly, some basic knowledge appears to be a little boring and complex and may not arouse students' interests. But only on this basic knowledge can we understand moral rules and build the splendid architecture of innovation and creativity.
As what discussed above, we can come to the conclusion that it is important and indispensable to implement student interests-oriented education pattern which may drive students to study on their own initiative, at the same time, basic knowledge can never be ignored.！