Issu202【07-10G Superstar大帖】7.20 by Huaxinluobo

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这个写的不好，狠狠批一下吧
time 45'

Should most effective political leaders yield to public opinion for the sake of compromise, as the speaker asserts? I tend to disagree. While I concede that in numerous circumstances politicians need to yield to public opinion, in other cases effective leader have to stick to their principles and moreover, I think that a leader’s effectiveness has little to do with whether he/she yield to public.

Admittedly, in a democratic society where any leader is elected and supervised by all the people, compromising to public ideas and values is required for any politician to be a leader. Seen from some angle, one significant responsibility of top leaders just lies in making balance between groups, parties, classes that holds different opinions and people are willing to support and step on to vote for politicians whose opinion or policy coincide with theirs by natures. For instance, at the time when people complain about high tax and claim to reduce it, candidates whose policy goes in the same way to lower tax takes advantage than those who do not. And seen from these years election it is not hard to find out that winners are usually those whose opinion follows the people’s, which are not the politicians’ original opinions all the times.

However, to be a effective, sometimes only yielding to public opinion is not sufficient and even may be harmful to both politicians and society. One reason I base my view on lies in that as my observation, public opinions usually varies in different social groups and classes which means if politicians need to find some opinion to yield to, he/she must take risk. If he/she makes wrong choice, then opponents holding different ideas may give great pressure, which, sometimes may be harmful to one’s political career. The other reason for my view has something to do with the definition of effectiveness. As I see, to be a effective one leader must meet public demand by taking measures and reforms when needed. But there are always opponent sounds to any reforms or new plans which need politicians to stick to their opinions more than to totally change to opinions of those opponents. Otherwise any reform, especially those hard but valuable ones, could get success.

After deeper reflection, I tend to disagree with the speaker in the respect that one politician’s effectiveness is related to whether he/she yield to public opinions. In fact, in my view, the best criteria to measure a leader effectiveness is the extent to which he/she finish the job and task given by society and people. And the way one leader get to it seems less important when it is not beyond the standard of legal system and moral, and the most significant thing for politicians is to make right choices. However, by claiming that leader should stick to their own opinions I do not mean leaders need not to listen to public opinion. Sometimes they are not mutual exclusive because by propagandism politicians’ opinion may change publics’ and vice verse, in which case the opinion’s of the two coincide.

To sum up,

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Issu202【07-10G Superstar大帖】7.20 by Huaxinluobo
这个写的不好，狠狠批一下吧
time 45'

Should most effective political leaders yield to public opinion for the sake of compromise, [这个开头你采取了复述式的，但是这样的开头应该改换句式样，比如把形容词改成定语从句，把一些词组替换掉，或者领会了题目意思后完全用自己的话语表现出来，否则很没新意思也容易雷同。另外一个问题，你在复述时候把题目意思给减缩变味了，题目说的是“应该经常听取公众舆论，并且因妥协而放弃自己的原则。”，你的复述成了“最有效的政治领袖是否应该为了妥协而听取公众舆论？”。是妥协而放弃自己的原则，而非因妥协来听取公众舆论。]as the speaker asserts? I tend to disagree. While I concede that in numerous circumstances politicians need to yield to public opinion, in other cases effective leader have to stick to their principles and moreover, I think that a leader’s effectiveness has little to do with whether he/she yield to public. [后面表达自己的观点比较清晰。前面的复述修改下就更完美了：D]

Admittedly, in a democratic society where any leader is elected and supervised by all the people, compromising to public ideas and values is required for any politician to be a leader. Seen from some angle, one significant responsibility of top leaders just lies in making balance between groups, parties, classes that holds different opinions and people are willing to support and step on to vote for politicians whose opinion or policy coincide with theirs by natures[by nature]. For instance, at the time when people complain about high tax and claim to reduce it, candidates whose policy goes in the same way to lower tax takes advantage than those who do not. And seen from these years election it is not hard to find out that winners are usually those whose opinion follows the people’s, which are not the politicians’ original opinions all the times. [段末应该有个总结会比较好。例子是为了对本段的TS进行解释，在说完例子就结束，会感觉没有完整。在最后应该用简洁的话语对TS再次强调，或者进一步阐明。这样结构也比较分明]

However, to be a effective, sometimes only yielding to public opinion is not sufficient and even may be harmful to both politicians and society. [这个TS不错，但是在下文中应解释一下它对社会怎么有害比较好吧？否则就变成单薄的一句话，而没有论证了这个点。]One reason I base my view on lies in that as my observation, public opinions usually varies in different social groups and classes which means if politicians need to find some opinion to yield to, he/she must take risk. If he/she makes wrong choice, then opponents holding different ideas may give great pressure, which, sometimes may be harmful to one’s political career. The other reason for my view has something to do with the definition of effectiveness. As I see, to be a effective one leader must meet public demand by taking measures and reforms when needed. But there are always opponent sounds to any reforms or new plans which need politicians to stick to their opinions more than to totally change to opinions of those opponents. Otherwise any reform, especially those hard but valuable ones, could[这句应该表否定吧？not] get success. [加上总结句]

After deeper reflection, I tend to disagree with the speaker in the respect that one politician’s effectiveness is related to whether he/she yield to public opinions. In fact, in my view, the best criteria to measure a leader effectiveness is the extent to which he/she finish the job and task given by society and people. And the way one leader get to it seems less important when it is not beyond the standard of legal system and moral, and the most significant thing for politicians is to make right choices. However, by claiming that leader should stick to their own opinions I do not mean leaders need not to listen to public opinion. Sometimes they are not mutual exclusive because by propagandism politicians’ opinion may change publics’ and vice verse, in which case the opinion’s of the two coincide. [这段论证是在让步，立论，深入的基础上进行的。但是感觉深入得有些混乱。整理一下意思和句子结构吧：D]

To sum up,
[小结：你的用语和过渡都很巧妙，长句也写得很棒！逻辑也比较清晰！
继续加油！]