issue120 [0710G-summer小组]第三次作业by sanliangmm

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ISSUE 120--"So much is new and complex today that looking back for an understanding of the past provides little guidance for living in the present."

[Outline]:即使存在这样的情况，现在社会遇到的问题中可能是历史上从未见过的，从而从历史中可能学不到什么东西。文章观点仍然是错误的。实际上学习历史能启发我们，让我们吸取教训,而且历史具有重复性渗透到生活的每一个层面不能与现代生活隔开
1.学习历史能激励我们的斗志
2.学习历史能帮助我们吸取教训
3.历史是一种重复，新的事物有可能是历史的模仿或是再结合。


我承认我今天偷懒了，咳咳。。。大家批评我把批评我:vomit: :vomit:

The speaker alleges that looking back into the history offers us little guidance for living in the present. It hints that we do not require a rear-view mirror to recognize our society, while in certain circumstances it is reasonable since some phenomena might not have ever occurred in the history and thus we learn nothing from past such as the flood of Severe Acute Respiratory  Syndrome (SARS). However, I still find this allegation to be specious. In fact, studying history provides inspiration, innumerable lessons for living, and nurtures new value and perspective--all of which endow us to decide how to live our lives.

To begin with, learning about honorable accomplishments from the past offers us inspiration to pursue further achievements. For example, an entrepreneur inspired by the courage and tenacity of history's great president Roosevelt Franklin Delano, who assumed presidency at the depth of the Great Depression and World War II, might decide as a result to solve the enduring problems in his or her own company. This decision can, in turn, profoundly affect that entrepreneur's daily life-in the corporation and beyond. Even for those ordinary people who rarely have the opportunity to deal with such a mess, studying historical examples of courage in the face of adversity can provide motivation to face their own personal fears in life. In short, inspired by the spirit of grand achievements in the past can enable us to get through the everyday business of living, whatever that business might be, by emboldening us and lifting our spirits.

In addition, failure in the history can serve as a stern teacher teaching us how to avoid similar mistakes. One apt illustration of this point of view involves the so called "Star Wars" defense initiative, championed by the Reagan Administration during 1980s. In retrospect, the initiative was ill-conceived and largely a waste of taxpayer dollars; and few would dispute that the exorbitant amount of money devoted to the initiative might have gone a long way toward addressing pressing social problems, by establishing after-school programs for delinquent latchkey kids, by enhancing AIDS awareness and education, and so forth. As it turns out, at the end of the Star Wars we were left with rampant gang violence, AIDS epidemic, and unprecedented federal budget deficit. Thus, this history has helped us learn the appropriateness of addressing certain social issues, and how to strike a balance among competing societal objective. Fortunately, as a society we can apply this lesson by adopting a more practical program for the welfare of our dispirited, disadvantaged, and disenfranchised social members to avoid such failure again.

At last but not least, History has been always recur itself which ultimately has melted into the society as a whole. Currently a thing with a new looking is in great part possible to be an offspring of the old ones to some extent in mutation or remix. Although the concept of democracy is widespread accepted in the whole world in the past two hundred yeas, we are easily find an old counterpart in the Old Greece and the Old Rome Republic about two thousand years ago. In those times Roman people select candidates by slating while today we vote in public selecting the leader of our own country. It is so similar that we may regard current selective systems as a good mimicry on the basis of the understanding of the past. Also in field of fashion, nowadays new looking ones can easily give way to the more fashion ones in the face of the historical fashion concepts or elements--clearly illustrated by the development of the brand Christian Dior. Thus, our rich and varied modern world is by no means of a mere construction of neologism but a combination of historical factors.

In sum, the speaker fails to recognize that in all our activities and decisions-- from our grandest to our most rote-- history can inspire, inform, guide, nurture, and even be pregnant with new modern ideals. To some extent, the influence of history is unconsciously permeate in our every facet of daily life which cannot be easily separate as the speaker asserts.

[ 本帖最后由 sanliangmm 于 2007-7-20 12:46 编辑 ]

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怎么个偷懒法？

sanliangmmUID: 2363921

主要参考了北美范文 没怎么动脑子
被老板打击得不轻 写作文都没激情了

sanliangmmUID: 2363921

欢迎大家来拍我篇文章 超级冗长开头+二段论~~hoho 我发现我还是不到黄河心不死阿 总是抱有侥幸心理

ISSUE 147 - "Tradition and modernization are incompatible. One must choose between them."
Contemporary society can sometimes be portrayed as dominated by the experience of modernization. The rapid speed of technological innovation, urbanization and industrialization are from time to time changing our perspective of space, time and the rhythm of our lives. At the same time, burgeoning various cultures, meteoric form of art, fickleness of the audience are continually challenging or encroaching the traditional values. Then we inevitably encounter a controversy: How to treat the relationship between modernization and tradition. Must we choose either between tradition and modernization, as the speaker contends? I agree that in some circumstances especially relating to the culture and moral values the two are mutually exclusive. For the most part in other field, however, modernization does not reject tradition; in fact, in many cases the former can and does embrace the latter.

I concede that in certain instances, tradition must yield entirely to the utilitarian needs of modern life, especially in the field of culture and moral values. One apt illustration involves the Confucianism which was treated as authoritative and widespread in China for several thousand years. As Confucianism persisted, one should be eclectic and never become a maverick. A proverb, which best express the essential of Confucianism and is held by many Chinese as their tenet, is "outstanding trees will be destroyed by the wind." However, referring this thought with modern perceptive, it prohibits people from pursuing the desire in their soul and impede the sparks of creativity. Though more or less eroding by the time, the vestige can still be identified, especially when an American professor find that a few among his or her Asian students are extremely shy and reticent. Such thoughts were to some extent reasonable in the tyrannical times, including the feudal periods and the duration of Chairman Mao. However, we should recognize that conservativeness no long suit to the situation now and therefore, reevaluate the traditional values, reject the outmoded ones or coordinate them to the development of the human society to keep in better touch with the changing time.

Oftentimes, so-called "modernization" is actually an extension or new iteration of tradition, or a variation on it. Currently a thing with a new looking by name of "modernization" is in great part possible to be an offspring of the old tradition to some extent in certain field--such as law, fashion, and language. Although the concept of democracy is widespread accepted in the whole as the symbol for advanced modern world in the past two hundred yeas, we are easily find an old counterpart in the Old Greece and the Old Rome Republic about two thousand years ago. In those times Roman people select candidates by slating while today we vote in public selecting the leader of our own country. It is so similar that we may regard current selective systems as a good iteration on the basis of the tradition. Further, even if in other areas modernization departs from tradition in some respects, while embracing it in others. In the visual arts, for example, so-called "modern" designs, forms, and elements are also based on some timeless aesthetic ideals--such as symmetry, balance, and harmony-- and on some enduring spirit of art---self awareness, self examination and self questioning. Admittedly, modern art works often eschew these principles in favor of novelty. Yet, in my view the appeal of such works lies primarily in their brashness and unpredictable. Once the ephemeral novelty or shock dissipates, these works quickly lose their appeal because they violate firmly established artistic ideals.

The speaker of such a claim seems oversimplify the relationship between tradition and modernization and draw a cursory conclusion. We should evaluate traditional values and modern values first and judge whether they are incompatible. In sum, it needs case-by-case analysis.

[ 本帖最后由 sanliangmm 于 2007-7-20 17:27 编辑 ]

rainyni0812UID: 2186847

[Outline]:即使存在这样的情况，现在社会遇到的问题中可能是历史上从未见过的，从而从历史中可能学不到什么东西。文章观点仍然是错误的。实际上学习历史能启发我们，让我们吸取教训,而且历史具有重复性渗透到生活的每一个层面不能与现代生活隔开1.学习历史能激励我们的斗志（我就没想到这一点）2.学习历史能帮助我们吸取教训3.历史是一种重复，新的事物有可能是历史的模仿或是再结合。The speaker alleges that looking back into the history offers us little guidance for living in the present. It hints that we do not require a rear-view mirror to recognize our society,（好比喻阿） while in certain circumstances it is reasonable since some phenomena might not have ever occurred in the history and thus we learn nothing from past such as the flood of Severe Acute Respiratory  Syndrome (SARS).（不用写全称吧，可能全称老美也晕） However, I still find this allegation to be specious. In fact, studying history provides inspiration, innumerable lessons for living, and nurtures new value and perspective--all of which endow us to decide how to live our lives.To begin with, learning about honorable accomplishments from the past offers us inspiration to pursue further achievements. For example, an entrepreneur inspired by the courage and tenacity of history's great president Roosevelt Franklin Delano, who assumed presidency at the depth of the Great Depression and World War II, might decide as a result to solve the enduring problems in his or her own company. This decision can, in turn, profoundly affect that entrepreneur's daily life-in the corporation and beyond. Even for those ordinary people who rarely have the opportunity to deal with such a mess, studying historical examples of courage in the face of adversity can provide motivation to face their own personal fears in life. In short, inspired by the spirit of grand achievements in the past can enable us to get through the everyday business of living, whatever that business might be, by emboldening us and lifting our spirits.In addition, failure in the history can serve as a stern teacher好比喻阿 teaching us how to avoid similar mistakes. One apt illustration of this point of view involves the so called "Star Wars" defense initiative, championed by the Reagan Administration during 1980s. In retrospect, the initiative was ill-conceived and largely a waste of taxpayer dollars; and few would dispute that the exorbitant amount of money devoted to the initiative might have gone a long way toward addressing pressing social problems, by establishing after-school programs for delinquent latchkey kids, by enhancing AIDS awareness and education, and so forth. As it turns out, at the end of the Star Wars we were left with rampant gang violence, AIDS epidemic and unprecedented federal budget deficit. Thus, this history has helped us learn the appropriateness of addressing certain social issues, and how to strike a balance among competing societal objective. Fortunately, as a society we can apply this lesson by adopting a more practical program for the welfare of our dispirited, disadvantaged, and disenfranchised social members to avoid such failure again.（例子有点长啊）At last but not least, history has been always recur itself which ultimately has melted into the society as a whole. Currently a thing with a new looking is in great part possible to be an offspring of the old ones to some extent in mutation or remix. Although the concept of democracy is widespread accepted in the whole world in the past two hundred yeas, we are easily find an old counterpart in the Old Greece and the Old Rome Republic about two thousand years ago. In those times Roman people select candidates by slating while today we vote in public selecting the leader of our own country. It is so similar that we may regard current selective systems as a good mimicry on the basis of the understanding of the past. Also in field of fashion, nowadays new looking ones can easily give way to the more fashion ones in the face of the historical fashion concepts or elements--clearly illustrated by the development of the brand Christian Dior. Thus, our rich and varied modern world is by no means of a mere construction of neologism but a combination of historical factors.In sum, the speaker fails to recognize that in all our activities and decisions-- from our grandest to our most rote-- history can inspire, inform, guide, nurture, and even be pregnant with new modern ideals. To some extent, the influence of history is unconsciously permeated in our every facet of daily life which cannot be easily separate as the speaker asserts.（结尾很精练）

rainyni0812UID: 2186847

147的感觉还是开门见山的好,不然读起来很累,三行阅卷者还没看到意思的话会恼的,另外电子判卷更讲究直观,这样的结构对它很有挑战.
不要不舍得句子,很多分拆开还是可以用在这篇文章里边的啊

rainyni0812UID: 2186847

147的感觉还是开门见山的好,不然读起来很累,三行阅卷者还没看到意思的话会恼的,另外电子判卷更讲究直观,这样的结构对它很有挑战.
不要不舍得句子,很多分拆开还是可以用在这篇文章里边的啊

dragonraceUID: 178536

At last but not least, history has been always recur itself which ultimately has melted into the society as a whole. Currently a thing with a new looking is in great part possible to be an offspring of the old ones to some extent in mutation or remix. Although the concept of democracy is widespread accepted in the whole world in the past two hundred years, we are easily find an old counterpart in the Old Greece and the Old Rome Republic about two thousand years ago. In those ..........To some extent, the influence of history is unconsciously permeated in our every facet of daily life which cannot be easily separate as the speaker asserts.
我感觉你确实是偷懒了，呵呵，这个题目你分析得不够透彻，照搬历史的弊端是这个话题避免不了的。并且ETS比较欣赏大正小负或者大负小正的混合态度，我们不刻意追求这个，但是如果话题内容确实非常明显的包含两面性的话，我觉得还是分析的全面一点比较好。

eenbrUID: 2259468

挺好的， 我要改的前面两位里面已经提及，不在赘述。
指出一点，记得last but not least是口语多用，不太正式。

[ 本帖最后由 eenbr 于 2007-7-21 05:58 编辑 ]