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LZ再帮我看看作文好吗 给我指点指点 谢谢(SORRY TO DISTURB YOU)
ARGUMENT14 The following appeared in a memo from the owner of Green Thumb Gardening Center, a small business serving a suburban town. (写了30分钟 字数没数 )
"There is evidence that consumers are becoming more and more interested in growing their own vegetables. A national survey conducted last month indicated that many consumers were dissatisfied with the quality of fresh vegetables available in supermarkets. And locally, the gardening magazine Great Gardens has sold out at the Village News stand three months in a row. Thus, we at Green Thumb Gardening Center can increase our profits by greatly expanding the variety of vegetable seeds we stock for gardeners this coming spring."
For the purpose of increasing their company’s profits, it seems a dependable way to greatly expand the variety of vegetable seeds that they stock. Nonetheless, this conclusion is unconvincing for the author fails to provide any solid evidence to make it reliable, the mere facts in the argument are insufficient to be fully accepted.
First of all, we have good reasons to doubt the validity and representativeness about the national survey conducted last month. Since it is a national survey, the result may best reflect the situation of overall country, and is probably not accord with the truth in a specific suburban. It is possible that few people in the suburban town claim to be dissatisfied with the quality of fresh vegetables in their living districts. Furthermore, provided that people are indeed dissatisfied with the quality of fresh vegetables, it does not necessarily mean that they will surely like to grow their own vegetables. Perhaps because of they do not have enough land to plant seeds, they are too busy to have enough time to take care of those vegetables, or they simply not have the plan to do so.
Similarly, the fact that the gardening magazine Great Gardens has sold out at the Village News stand three months in a row could not lend enough support to the argument as well. The author here bases on the gratuitous assumption that people buy the magazines to get some knowledge about planting, gardening or botany because they’re willing to grow their own vegetables. However, the author fails to substantiate his assumption. On the contrary, there is a large possibility that people buy the gardening magazine just for leisure and fun, or they just want to know something about how to take better care of their flowers on their balconies. In one word, they are actually not interested in growing their own vegetables at all.
What’s more, even in case that people really want to plant their own vegetables, it is not guaranteed that the company will get more profits. Without a concrete analysis about the potential costs and proceeds, as well as an investigation about people’s affordability, it is impossible to make any tenable conclusion.
In sum, the argument is easily disputable for its lack of any solid evidence. To further strengthen his conclusion, the author should provide direct evidence that people in this suburban town are indeed interested in growing their own vegetables and are likely to buy their vegetable seeds. A specific survey aimed at people’s attitude towards fresh vegetables in their town and people’s willingness to grow their own vegetables will worth anticipating. |
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