In this argument, the arguer concludes that the sales of Whirlwind video games are likely to increase dramatically in the next few months for they introduced several lifelike graphics video games to the people at the age of 10 to 25.To support the conclusion,the arguer quotes a recent survey concerning the features the players like best.However, this argument suffers from several critical fallacies.
First of all,the answers of the survey has no direct relationship with the increase of Whirlwind video games.The arguer reasons that the survey says that players think the most feature in video game is lifelike graphics,which is lack of evidence to prove that the players will choose the lifelike graphics video games.It is possible that they didn't have such a up-to-date computer which is required in the lifelike graphics video games.It is equally possible that it is not popular in playing such games,so they don't have parteners to play with. Survey方面还可以分析得更多一点,比如survey的群体问题,survey的具体内容,是否全面等
Moreover,as Whirlwind has introduced their games directed at the 10 to 25 years old people.They neglect most of the players themselves may not have enough money to buy this game,they have to ask money from their parents.It is also possible that this games are not fit for people in the range of the age.Deeper survey should be practice to solve all these doubts.
In addition,there is no evidence to support the conclusion that the sales of Whirlwind video games have declined over the past two years is causing by the claims as the argument said.Perhaps it caused by the uneffective management.It may also caused by the unreasonable sale strategy.The arger fails to prove the evidence between the two.
这个你也批驳啊!declined over the past two years是题目中的既成事实啊!
关于advertisement的效果才是可以好好批批的。
In sum,the arguer don't prove enough evidence to support the assumption that the sales of video games are likely to increase.The aguer should make a new survey containing more question which has a more precise consult value.
总的来说,结构清晰,语言有力,只是第三个批驳点找得不对。
好好写,大家一起加油!
[ 本帖最后由 linshao 于 2007-7-27 00:14 编辑 ] |