Issue38【0710G-小猪快跑小组】第3次作业 by XP

ldongxpUID: 2311083

TOPIC: ISSUE38 - "In the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was. People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books."
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The speaker asserts that in the age of television people learn by watching television as much as reading books and thus reading books is no more important as it was. I concede that in some aspects television can provides us with efficient and effective ways of learning. However, in most aspects television cannot replace the books when it comes to learning.

Admittedly, television can offer us visible pictures and therefore are more powerful in some aspects than books in our learning. For instance, when we are learning ballet, we can see the exact actions of the ballet dancers and thus we are able to easily imitate their performance. Yet, it is difficult for any writer to use words in the books to provide us with such a vivid (?) example to learn from. Moreover, while we are studying an event, for example, a demonstration, through the screen of the television, we can see the faces of the crowded people in the street and hear their slogans while no book can convey such details to us. In the respects that need visible details, television is more effective than books.

However, television is a poor substitute of books when it comes to learning something invisible. There are many abstract notions that are difficult for television to display while the words in books can explain these things. For example, the poem require people imagine the scene in their minds and different people have distinct imaginations. It is hard for television to give special images to reflect all people's thought. Also, the abstract ideas of philosophers in the books are impossible for television to describe. Besides, there are many mathematic thoughts, the mood and emotion of the heroes in novels, theories in physics and so forth which are nightmares (?) for television to show. That's why we can see students reading books in classrooms rather than watching television at home for learning. So television can not take the place of books in studying.

Furthermore, books hold several advantages over television in imparting knowledge. First, we can make a bookmark in the book and continue reading directly from the exact page we read last time while the television broadcast would not change their plan for us. Secondly, we are able to refer to other books to seek answer to some questions when we are reading some book whereas television programs always do not offer us any reference. Finally, books do not need electricity, cable or airwaves signals and are therefore more convenient than television. In short, books are superior to television because of convenience of cross reference and less limits.

To conclude, television can be more efficient than books in the aspects involving moving imagery. However, books can provide us with all kinds of knowledge including abstract ideas, thoughts, concepts, special events and so forth and is convenient to use while television can hardly help us learn abstract things and has limits such as electricity, signal and so on.

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7 "The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records." 数码相机可以精确、令人信服地记录当代人们的生活，作为一种记录方式，它的重要性已经超过了纸笔记录。

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摄象机可以生动而记录发生事件
国庆庆典， wedding ceremony， a NBA game
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摄象机可以真实记录发生事件，作为证据
bank robbery，stealing in supermarket，violation of traffic rule
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量化的，抽象的东西不能为摄像机描述
统计信息（学校人数、房间，设备数量等）， 人的内心感受，抽象概念等

109 "The purpose of many advertisements is to make consumers want to buy a product so that they will 'be like' the person in the ad. This practice is effective because it not only sells products but also helps people feel better about themselves."
很多广告的目的是要让消费者因为拥有产品后“像”广告中的人物而购买某种产品，这样的广告是有效的，因为这样既销售了产品，又让人们自我感觉良好。

1 + 名人广告促进销售，人们有成为那种成功人士的愿望
乔丹鞋，李连杰的服装广告

2 - 虽然广告很有效的促进了销售，不能帮助人们更好的生活。

3 - 虚假广告，怎对商家和用户都不利。

aashunUID: 2362747

ISSUE38 - "In the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was. People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books."
The speaker asserts that in the age of television people [could] learn by watching television as much as reading books and thus reading books is no more important as it was. I concede that in some aspects television can provides us with efficient and effective ways of learning. However, in most aspects television cannot replace the books when it comes to learning.

Admittedly, television can offer us visible pictures and therefore are more powerful in some aspects than books in our learning. For instance, when we are learning ballet, we can see the exact actions of the ballet dancers and thus we are able to easily imitate their performance. Yet, it is difficult for any writer to use words in the books to provide us with such a vivid example to learn from. Moreover, while we are [narrowing foci on] an [historical] event, for example, a demonstration [?不明白 是不是漏了什么东西？], through the screen of the television, we can see the faces of the crowded [这个词不好 表示拥挤 都拥挤了 还怎么看脸呢？] people in the street and hear their slogans while no book can convey such [flesh] details to us. In the respects that need visible details, television is more effective than books.

However, television is a poor substitute of books when it comes to learning something invisible. There are many abstract notions that are difficult for television to display while the words in books can explain these things. [good 和前文tele的优点对比起来了] For example, the poem require people imagine the scene in their minds and different people have distinct imaginations. [此处可以插入一句名言：如沙翁说的：一千个人有一个个哈姆雷特……] It is hard for television to give special [fixed and without distinguish] images to reflect all people's thought. Also, the abstract ideas of philosophers in the books are impossible for television to describe.[这个例子需要扩展一下 不能这样一笔带过] Besides, there are many mathematic thoughts, the mood and emotion of the heroes in novels, theories in physics and so forth which are nightmares for television to show. [此处再加一句强调句：强调books good at sth. that abstract 小结前面说的三个小层次] That's why we can see students reading books in classrooms rather than watching television at home for learning. So television can not take the place of books in studying [especially in the abstract areas].

Furthermore, books hold several advantages over television in imparting knowledge. First, we can make a bookmark in the book and continue reading directly from the exact page [where] we read last time while the television broadcast would not change their plan for us. Secondly, we are able to refer to other books to seek answer to some questions when we are reading some book whereas television programs always do not offer us any reference. Finally, books do not need electricity, cable or airwaves signals and are therefore more convenient than television. [三句构成排比 但是第三点 没有形成与前两点那么明显的对应关系 建议修改一下 ] In short, books are superior to television because of convenience of cross reference and less limits.[这个总结句很赞！很全面！]

To conclude, television can be more efficient than books in the aspects involving moving imagery [and the voice]. However, books can provide us with all kinds of knowledge including abstract ideas, thoughts, concepts, special events and so forth and is convenient to use while television can hardly help us learn abstract things and has limits such as electricity, signal and so on.

[文章整体结构完整，所挑选的例子充分的说明了作者的观点。
例子的选取上，要是能更加的细节化就好了。Eg 说明电视重点在视觉和听觉的优点上的时候，直接写一个比较珍贵的镜头or电影会更好。]

Shania.33UID: 2363464

The speaker asserts that in the age of television people learn by watching television as much as reading books and thus reading books is no more important as it was. I concede that in some aspects television can provides us with efficient and effective ways of learning. However, in most aspects television cannot replace the books when it comes to learning.

Admittedly, television can offer us visible pictures and therefore are（therefore are不要，显得多余）more powerful in some aspects than books in our learning. For instance, when we are learning ballet, we can see the exact actions of the ballet dancers and thus we are able to easily imitate their performance. Yet, it is difficult for any writer to use words in the books to provide us with such a vivid example to learn from. Moreover, while we are studying an event, for example, a demonstration, through the screen of the television, we can see the faces of the crowded people in the street and hear their slogans while no book can convey such details to us（相比上一个例子，这个例子我觉得不是很能够构成“moreover”的递进关系。例子不丰满的重复了。想表达的是电视有活泼的画面，上面一个芭蕾舞例子够了，下面可以换个其他的方面） In the respects that need visible details, television is more effective than books.

However, television is a poor substitute of books when it comes to learning something invisible.（TS简洁漂亮，赞。）There are many abstract notions that are difficult for television to display while the words in books can explain these things. For example, the poem require（requires。单数加s） people imagine the scene in their minds and different people have distinct imaginations. It is hard for television to give special images to reflect all people's thought. Also, the abstract ideas of philosophers in the books are impossible for television to describe. Besides, there are many mathematic thoughts, the mood and emotion of the heroes in novels, theories in physics and so forth which are nightmares (?) for television to show（nightmares用这里表达什么意思？我不是很明白。我觉得前面都说的很好，“数学思想、小说里英雄的情绪情感、物理理论”应该是电视都难以表达吧？difficult是不是简单而更合适些呢？）That's why we can see students reading books in classrooms rather than watching television at home for learning.（其实有电视上课的电大哦，所以不妨加个“most of”的限制更客观；或者说大多数的儿童青少年期学校教育。）So television can not take the place of books in studying.

Furthermore, books hold several advantages over television in imparting knowledge. First, we can make a bookmark in the book and continue reading directly from the exact page we read last time while the television broadcast would not change their plan for us. Secondly, we are able to refer to other books to seek answer to some questions when we are reading some book（想表达的是我们阅读一些书的时候可以查阅其他书寻找答案吧，换成字典是不是更容易懂些？）whereas television programs always do not offer us any reference. Finally, books do not need electricity, cable or airwaves signals and are therefore more convenient than television（这句总结的很好，因为书不需要电、电缆或者广播信号所以方便。但后面加个补充就显得更足了。如果改成这样呢：Finally, books do not need electricity, cable or airwaves signals, which are more convenient to provide knowledge than television in the isolated or penniless area.）In short, books are superior to television because of convenience of cross reference and less limits.

To conclude, television can be more efficient than books in the aspects involving moving imagery. However, books can provide us with all kinds of knowledge including abstract ideas, thoughts, concepts, special events and so forth and is convenient to use while television can hardly help us learn abstract things and has limits such as electricity, signal and so on.（最后一句用了三个and，可否试试从句表达？）

文章结构完整，论证的也比较充分，一看就是喜欢用例子证明的高手，呵呵。

但是从字里行间，略看出了语言方面的薄弱。发现“and thus”“ and therefore”“and be……”的出镜率都很高，呵呵，基本上长句子都是这样两个或几个简单句用and连接构成的。

我觉得后期可以加强一些句法的表达，比如从句，比如倒装，比如被动语态。稍微复杂多变一点会更好，呵呵，我的一点小建议，供参考

[ 本帖最后由 Shania.33 于 2007-8-1 15:47 编辑 ]