Argument53 07直接冲刺小组第12次作业

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT53 - Thirteen years ago, researchers studied a group of 25 infants who showed signs of mild distress when exposed to unfamiliar stimuli such as an unusual odor or a tape recording of an unknown voice. They discovered that these infants were more likely than other infants to have been conceived in early autumn, a time when their mothers' production of melatonin-a hormone known to affect some brain functions-would naturally increase in response to decreased daylight. In a follow-up study conducted earlier this year, more than half of these children-now teenagers-who had shown signs of distress identified themselves as shy. Clearly, increased levels of melatonin before birth cause shyness during infancy and this shyness continues into later life.
WORDS: 277          TIME: 00:30:00          DATE: 2007-7-27 16:30:46
修改后298 最近很怪，字数就是很少 大概写得不太好

The author’s conclusion is unsound based on the information above. And i will present my points below.

First, "25 infants" involved in this study are far more enough to conduct an authentic study. The number is too small to represent all human babies. Thus, this study may only reflect a part of the truth of child development; while more likely, many more children if studied would not show any distress or shyness.

Then, there is no direct connection between increased level of melatonin and shyness of infants.  In this study, the author indicates that these babies who showed signs of mild distress when exposed to unfamiliar stimuli are more likely affected by the high level of melatonin in autumn when they were still carried by their mother. As our common sense, it is very nature that infants would show distress when they are left in some unfamiliar places, let along the unusual odor and unknown voice. So it is possible that it was the unfamiliar stimuli rather than the melatonin received from their mothers caused distress.

Last, the follow-up study is also unreliable. The author fails to rule out such alternatives would cause shyness. The time length for these babies to grow up to teenagers is very long, so anything could be the reason of their shyness. Such as family sphere, if a child is raised by shy parents, this child would more likely to be shy; or it is possible that these children had bad experience with social communication, so they are shy too.

In sum, the author's reasoning is not logical and therefore the conclusion is not credible. People should disregard of the conclusion of increased level of melatonin before birth gives rise to the infant and their later life shyness. Otherwise, they might be misleading.

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Argument53 07直接冲刺小组第12次作业
TOPIC: ARGUMENT53 - Thirteen years ago, researchers studied a group of 25 infants who showed signs of mild distress when exposed to unfamiliar stimuli such as an unusual odor or a tape recording of an unknown voice. They discovered that these infants were more likely than other infants to have been conceived in early autumn, a time when their mothers' production of melatonin-a hormone known to affect some brain functions-would naturally increase in response to decreased daylight. In a follow-up study conducted earlier this year, more than half of these children-now teenagers-who had shown signs of distress identified themselves as shy. Clearly, increased levels of melatonin before birth cause shyness during infancy and this shyness continues into later life.
WORDS: 277          TIME: 00:30:00          DATE: 2007-7-27 16:30:46
修改后298 最近很怪，字数就是很少 大概写得不太好
The author’s conclusion is unsound based on the information above. And i will present my points below.
TSFirst, "25 infants" involved in this study are far morefrom enough to conduct an authentic study. The number is too small to represent all human babies. Thus, this study may only reflect a part of the truth of child development; while more likely, many more children if studied would not show any distress or shyness.
TSThen, there is no direct connection between increased level of melatonin and shyness of infants.  In this study, the author indicates that these babies who showed signs of mild distress when exposed to unfamiliar stimuli are more likely affected by the high level of melatonin in autumn when they were still carried by their mother. As our common sense, it is very nature that infants would show distress when they are left in some unfamiliar places, let along the unusual odor and unknown voice. So it is possible that it was the unfamiliar stimuli rather than the melatonin received from their mothers caused distress.
TSLast, the follow-up study is also unreliable. The author fails to rule out such alternatives would cause shyness. The time length for these babies to grow up to teenagers is very long, so anything could be the reason of their shyness. Such as family sphere, if a child is raised by shy parents, this child would more likely to be shy; or it is possible that these children had bad experience with social communication, so they are shy too.
In sum, the author's reasoning is not logical and therefore the conclusion is not credible. People should disregard of the conclusion of increased level of melatonin before birth gives rise to the infant and their later life shyness. Otherwise, they might be misleading.
this argument is clear, with each of the main fallacies thoroughly analyzed. So do not worry about the words. Maybe you get into the period called “flat roof”, reading ETS model essay and those articles you have ever written may help!