issue150 [0710G 戴三个表冲刺小组] 第2次作业

nifeiUID: 2340954

Issue 150
"Because of television and worldwide computer connections, people can now become familiar with a great many places that they have never visited. As a result, tourism will soon become obsolete."   70
Along with the development of science and technology, television and Internet have been advanced enough to transmit sights of great places immediately and clearly, therefore, the speaker holds the opinion that tourism will depress in a short time. However, I believe that tourism will not back up because of the intrinsic traits of tour to another place which is far more than having a look at the well-known beautiful sights.
On the one hand, although the impressive view is one of the motivations for the tourists to travel, the places may have many other joys that attract people such as the clean air in La Habana and  the sunshine in California. When it comes to the local specialty, tourists often show great interest and are willing to have a try. In fact, there are much more physical feelings that can not be translated into data information by the modern technology and thus can not be transmitted by TV and Internet in the form of wireless and data. People who want to experience the life of the great places must go there by themselves. Therefore, the tourism can not be taken place by watching TV and browsing Web at home in a short time.
On the other hand, the spiritual experience is also a disputable factor for people to visit another place besides physical experience including intact natural environment and delicious taste. Quiet a few great places are famous for their historical and literae sense rather than the natural sights, such as the former resident of Lincoln, which is not grand but pull hundreds of thousands of visitors each year to come for its historical spirit. No idolater of Dali will drop the opportunities of visiting the Teatro-Museo Dalí merely because of he has clearly viewed all the works of Dali on Internet, no matter how familiar he is with the works. Maybe all of a person’s physical experience can be eventually translated into data and transmitted by TV, Internet and some unknown devices, the spiritual experience of being at the great places can not be transmitted and replaced no matter how advanced the technology is.
Therefore, I disagree with the speaker at all for the reasons above. The key point of tourism is much more than to see the sights of the places whether physically or spiritually. There is always something that the technology can not substitute and tourism will never depress because of the development of TV and Internet.

[ 本帖最后由 nifei 于 2007-7-28 02:58 编辑 ]

liuyi612256UID: 2302910

不好意思，不是本小组的，冒昧的发表一下看法。

Issue 150
"Because of television and worldwide computer connections, people can now become familiar with a great many places that they have never visited. As a result, tourism will soon become obsolete."   70
Along with the development of science and technology, television and Internet have been advanced enough to transmit sights of great places immediately and clearly, therefore, the speaker holds the opinion that tourism will depress in a short time. However, I believe that tourism will not back up because of the intrinsic traits of (a)tour to another place which is far more than having a look at the well-known beautiful sights.（这句话这样表述的话，并不是LZ要表达的意思－－而是说旅游并不是因为intrinsic traits of the tour而衰退的，言下之意是有别的原因导致tourism还是会back up; I believe that tourism will continue to thrive because of...)

On the one hand, although the impressive view is one of the motivations for the tourists to travel, the places may have many other joys that attract people such as the clean air in La Habana and  the sunshine in California. When it comes to the local specialty("feature" might be better), tourists often show great interest(s) and are willing to have a try. In fact, there are much more (many)physical feelings that can not be translated into data information by the modern technology and thus can not be transmitted by TV and Internet in the form of wireless and data( wireless and data似乎不是两个能够并列的形式吧，对不起，我以前是搞通讯的）. People who want to experience the life of the great places must go there by themselves(by themselves 是独自的意思;把by 去掉就好了）. Therefore, the tourism can not be taken place by watching TV and browsing Web at home in a short time.（这段我觉得观点我觉得写的挺清晰的）

On the other hand, the spiritual experience is also a disputable（arguable) factor for people to visit another place besides physical experience including (enjoying)intact natural environment and (savoring)delicious taste. Quiet a few great places(考虑用tourist attractions?) are famous for their historical and literae sense(atmosphere) rather than (for)the natural sights, such as the former resident of Lincoln, which is not grand but pull hundreds of thousands of visitors each year to come(这个to come可以去掉） for its historical spirit. No idolater of Dali will drop the opportunities of visiting the Teatro-Museo Dalí merely because of (of 去掉）he has clearly viewed all the works of Dali on Internet（我喜欢这句,这句的否定句＋because的用法是正确的！）, no matter how familiar he is with the works（这个no matter how放在这里的意义我不是很清楚，觉得放在这里有点不是太舒服。但是考虑到句子节奏，是感觉应该需要点什么，要是我的话我会写（去掉这个no matter how)，indeed, the research done on the internet would, in many cases, serve as the very incentive of being there, apprecating those masterpieces in one's own eyes）. Maybe all of a person’s physical experience can be eventually translated into data and transmitted by TV, Internet and some unknown devices, the spiritual experience of being at the great places can not be transmitted and replaced no matter how advanced the technology is. (说一个感觉，这段的逻辑很清晰，但是读者还是不知道LZ所说的这个spiritual experience到底是什么？LZ给出了几个physical experiences的例子比如 去享受自然，去品尝风味，但是spiritual expierence到底是什么，还是不是很清楚；如果这个spiritual expierence 是基于感观的，那么当所有的感观可以被通过INTERNET传送的时候，是不是我们在家里上上网也就可以感受到这个spiritual experiencen呢？）

Therefore, I disagree with the speaker at all for the reasons above. The key point of tourism is much more than to see the sights of the places whether（either?) physically or spiritually.(这句话我觉得比较严重，to see the sights spirtually?，感觉比较抽象，我怎么才能spiritually see the sights? 冥想？；而且spiritually这个是应该是楼主赞成的观点，因为需要去appreciate those spirtually,所以才应该通过亲身旅行，而不是通过上网浏览；但是这么一写好像是逻辑颠倒过来了）There is always something that the technology can not substitute and tourism will never depress because of the development of TV and Internet.（和首段那句一样的问题，否定句＋because表示的是，不是因为。。。而。。。I didn't do that because you asked me to的意思是我并不是因为你让我那么做才那么做的。）


总体来说，文章写的是不错的，但是应该注意一些表达，如果让看卷子的人读错了你的观点麻烦就大了。还有就是我的水平也很菜，如果有不对的地方，欢迎指正。


[ 本帖最后由 liuyi612256 于 2007-7-28 05:23 编辑 ]

nifeiUID: 2340954

非常感谢ls的修改，你提的意见都很中肯：我最大的痛苦是词汇的贫乏，你给了很多同义词。第一段和第四段两个because的句子的毛病真的是我以前不知道的，本来没看懂你的意思，不过看了例句就明白了，thank you very much。其实我想表达的是旅游的精神远远超出去看看风景，还有身体上的亲身体验，精神上的亲身体验，后者包括对某位名人的敬仰，对艺术的顶礼膜拜，只是我实在不知道怎么总结这个概念。继续求助。。。。。wireness and data那个我是想说电视和网络分别传播的东西，第一个想到的是wave and data，不知道应该是什么了。还有特色小吃没查到，只看到specialty,哪位知道怎么说的麻烦说一下。

再次感谢。

liuyi612256UID: 2302910

特色小吃：local flavor, feature flavor
micro-wave（satellite?) and optical fiber(微波和光缆)，不过现在的微波传输已经不怎么用了。。。,卫星？

VIVI_1004UID: 2348359

很不错了除了观点还不够丰富外，语言很值得我学习，楼上改的也很强