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蝾螈UID: 2326125

Topic:Do you agree or disagree the following statement?Parents are the best teachers.
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Nowadays,some people may hold the opinion that parents are the best teachers.But others may have a negtive attitude.As far as I am corcerned,I think parents are not the best teachers.I will use several specific reasons to illustrate  my idea.

One of the primary reasons is that every parents more or less have bad habits.Even the wise men are not free from error.And all the children tend to unconsciously or subconsciously copy everything from their parents.There is such a case that among all of my male classmates,those who smoke mostly have a smoking-father,while those who do not smoke,none of whose fathers smokes.Parents do teach their children a lot useful,but  meanwhile something is also passed down to their offsprings unnecessarily.

To make a morel sense,I think that another reason why I prefer the argument of parents being not the best teachers is that most parents lack the common sense of education.Mostly,they educate their children merely by instinct rather than by proper approaches and too often we see somany parents pursue their own cherished but failed dreams by forcing their children to develop in a prearranged direction.My mother is just this kind of parents.She did not got the chance to study in college,so she did everything she could to make me to go to college.For fear that I could not catch up with my classmats,she bought me inches of referrance books when I was only seven years old.As we can see , in this way,lots of children lost their chance developing their own favourites.

However,most parents love their children and wish them success,we must admit that most parents teach their children subjectively.They lack the common sense of education and they may even lead their children to a wrong direction.In a word,parents are generally the most committed of all teachers but not the best teachers.

xiaosi326UID: 2344433

Nowadays, some people may hold the opinion that parents are the best teachers. But others may have a negtive（negative） attitude. As far as I am concern, I think parents are not the best teachers. I will use several specific reasons to illustrate  my idea.

One of the primary reasons is that every parents more or less have bad habits.Even the wise men are not free from error.And all the children tend to unconsciously or subconsciously （我很喜欢这对词啊：））copy everything from their parents. There is such a case that among all of my male classmates, those who smoke mostly have a smoking-father（for instance, among all of my male classmates who smoke, Mostly, have a smoking-father）,while those who do not smoke,none of whose fathers smokes. (这句很多余，而且使句子觉得很不舒服，去掉)Parents do teach their children a lot useful,but  meanwhile something is also passed down to their offsprings unnecessarily.（ meanwhile 和also 重复了。。。）

To make a morel sense,I think that another reason why I prefer the argument of parents being not the best teachers is that most parents lack the common sense of education. Mostly, they educate（breed 会比较好点） their children merely by instinct （这个词看得好爽：）） rather than by proper approaches ，（.）and too often we see so many parents pursue their own cherished but failed dreams by forcing their children to develop in a prearranged direction. (frequently, most of them force their children to purse their own cherished but failed dream in a prearranged direction.)My mother is just this kind of parents. She did not got the chance to study in college, so she did everything she could to make me to go to college. For fear that I could not catch up with my classmats,she bought me inches of referrance books when I was only seven years old.(尽可能不要用我做主语，因为那样会使例子显得不够说服力)As we can see , in this way, lots of children lost their chance developing their own favourites.

However,most parents love their children and wish them success,we must admit that most parents teach their children subjectively.They lack the common sense of education and they may even lead their children to a wrong direction.In a word,parents are generally the most committed of all teachers but not the best teachers.（可以看得出你的英语底子很强，文章结构很流畅，只是偶尔有点小问题，我觉得你如果再写多两篇的话，绝对是这里边的高手『我看了一下你改的文章，嘻嘻』）

蝾螈UID: 2326125

谢谢LZ啊~

kevinliu6883UID: 2338522

Generally, this writing is very good. I mean it has a good structure, logical reasoning and the examples are quite convincing.

Let's look at the topic again. We may find the problem lies in the defination of best teacher.

What quality should a best teacher have? 1) love 2) professional knowledge.

Most parents love their children but lack of professional training. They don't know how to educate their kids. This part is best illustrated in your composition.

A teacher is a vocation in modern society. Teachers make their living on their job. Some teachers devote themselves into education while some don't.

Some parents hold teching jobs. But not all kids in this type of family develop successfully.

In any means, the saying that parents are best teacher is too general. It may apply for some cases.

[ 本帖最后由 kevinliu6883 于 2007-7-31 06:09 编辑 ]

蝾螈UID: 2326125

I definitely agree with you .It is too general to say that parents are the best teachers.But in order to write this essay a little easier, I chose a clear opinion.Otherwise you will find this essay totally a rubbish