issue130 [0710G-summer小组]第十二次作业by sanliangmm

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ISSUE130"How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."
[Outline]:同意第一个观点，反对第二个观点
1.承认社会化的重要性
2.说人们还没教会孩子怎么适应社会是片面的。首先，一定程度上，社会化是一种天生的能力，孩子们可以通过玩，根本不需要教育系统的介入。
3．即使如此，随着科技发展，人们对社会化的教育越来越深入，也在发展

People are never born into separated environment, while society will be their destiny to face and join no matter whether they are willing to do so. After being educated in greenhouses of campus, children will one day step into this destiny inevitably, therefore making socialization an indispensable progress of their growth. However, it may be too extreme and pessimistic to say we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society, especially when socialization itself is a kind of inborn ability that people can fetch throughout daily lives without the help of education and nowadays the education along with other related fields are keeping a high-speed development.

Admittedly, socialization, defined as converting and meeting the social needs, determines a society's future by making its members work as effective parts of it. Society is a huge constitution combined by different individuals and groups, both of which need cooperation and communication for survive and thrive. After graduating, children will leave their greenhouses which are supported by their parents, teachers and society. They have to work and live directly with other social members. If they are not socialized, and just continue their greenhouse life, they will find the world as a vacuum, bogging them with complex relation of people. In Japan, a group of people are called OTAKUs, who are trapped by their childhood interests, including animation, video game, internet, and the sense of security at home. Those people are a reverse example of those who are not well socialized. They have their own worlds, cut off with others, and they are afraid of communicating. As a result, certain social problems have long been reported among these OTAKUs, such as suicide, crime, psychic diseases and so forth. In this case we may know the importance of socialization.

However, when it comes to the speaker's next claim that we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about better society, I think it is unilateral to agree so for two two main reasons. One reason is that socialization itself is an inborn ability that can be developed throughout our life time along to certain extent without the aid of education. From our childhood, we have already subconsciously developed this ability. To witness such inborn socialization, one need look no further than the playground, where children learn to negotiate, cooperate , and assert themselves in a respectful manner, and where they learn about the harmful results of bullying and other anti-social behavior. These lessions help children grow up to be good citizens and effective leaders, as well as tolerant and respectful menbers of society, without the support of education system but only voluntarily developed by themselves.

Another reason is that, modern education has developed in a way for students gaining more chances to cooperate and get in touch with the society, making them more socialized. For instance, my university has provided its students chances of working with their teachers and for the social agencies, including enterprises, governments and so forth. During these works, students will know their abilities and disadvantages when they one day come into the society totally, and amass the knowledge and senses to cover such disadvantages. The most recent quarter-century has seen an increasing sensitivity for governments and publics toward ensuring better cooperation and socialization in our education system.Therefore, asserting that we have not learned to raise children for socialization is problematic.

To sum up, socialization is a determining issue for children who are changing our world in future. Besides, in current society we have made great progress in developing socialization for children and such socialization can at the same time evolve in the growing process itself. As long as we keep an open mind to the necessity of socialization, and as long as we learn the proper way to raise children, our offspring will come a long way toward bringing about a better society.

[ 本帖最后由 sanliangmm 于 2007-8-1 09:24 编辑 ]

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ISSUE130"How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."[Outline]:对作者的两个部分都不同意1.承认社会化的重要性2.说人们还没教会孩子怎么适应社会是片面的。首先，一定程度上，社会化是一种天生的能力，孩子们可以通过玩，根本不需要教育系统的介入。3．即使如此，随着科技发展，人们对社会化的教育越来越深入，也在发展People are never born into separated environment, while society will be their destiny to face and join no matter whether they are willing to do so. After being educated in greenhouses of campus, children will one day step into this destiny inevitably, therefore making socialization an indispensable progress of their growth. However, it may be too extreme and pessimistic to say we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society, especially when socialization itself is a kind of inborn ability that people can fetch throughout daily lives without the help of education and nowadays the education along with other related fields are keeping a high-speed development.（这段作为开头，我觉得有些问题。应该先写一下作者观点，然后把这段的中间部分加进去，而且我觉的你的观点写得太详细，这略提一下，在后面再详细陈述）Admittedly, socialization, defined as converting and meeting the social needs, determines a society's future by making its members work as effective parts of it. Society is a huge constitution combined by different individuals and groups, both of which need cooperation and communication for survive and thrive. After graduating, children will leave their greenhouses which are supported by their parents, teachers and society. They have to work and live directly with other social members. If they are not socialized, and just continue their greenhouse life, they will find the world as a vacuum, bogging them with complex relation of people. In Japan, a group of people are called OTAKUs, who are trapped by their childhood interests, including animation, video game, internet, and the sense of security at home. Those people are a reverse example of those who are not well socialized. They have their own worlds, cut off with others, and they are afraid of communicating. As a result, certain social problems have long been reported among these OTAKUs, such as suicide, crime, psychic diseases and so forth. In this case we may know the importance of socialization.（我觉得觉得分析应该更详细些，可是我发现自己常常具完例子就紧接着一句话结尾了）However, when it comes to the speaker's next claim that we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about better society, I think it is unilateral to agree so for two two（去掉too） main reasons. One reason is that socialization itself is an inborn ability that can be developed throughout our life time along to certain extent without the aid of education. From our childhood, we have already subconsciously developed this ability. To witness such inborn socialization, one need look no further than the playground, where children learn to negotiate, cooperate , and assert themselves in a respectful manner, and where they learn about the harmful results of bullying and other anti-social behavior. These lessions help children grow up to be good citizens and effective leaders, as well as tolerant and respectful menbers of society, without the support of education system but only voluntarily developed by themselves. （这段观点很独特）Another reason is that, modern education has developed in a way for students gaining more chances to cooperate and get in touch with the society, making them more socialized. For instance, my university has provided its students chances of working with their teachers and for the social agencies, including enterprises, governments and so forth. During these works, students will know their abilities and disadvantages when they one day come into the society totally, and amass the knowledge and senses to cover such disadvantages. The most recent quarter-century has seen an increasing sensitivity for governments and publics toward ensuring better cooperation and socialization in our education system. Therefore, asserting that we have not learned to raise children for socialization is problematic.（我觉得这后面两段都在反驳作者的第二个论点，要是能加一些支持的发面的好了）To sum up, socialization is a determining issue for children who are changing our world in future. Besides, in current society we have made great progress in developing socialization for children and such socialization can at the same time evolve in the growing process itself. As long as we keep an open mind to the necessity of socialization, and as long as we learn the proper way to raise children, our offspring will come a long way toward bringing about a better society.

这篇文章和我写的思路有很多地方不一样，咱们俩写得应该都没跑题吧？

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能自圆其说就行吧