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菲子UID: 2311527

TOPIC: ISSUE74 - "The most effective way to communicate an idea or value to large groups of people is through the use of images, not language."
WORDS: 514          TIME: 0:55:22          DATE: 2007-6-22  修改2007-8-4

1．  图象确实是有效的方式
2．  语言也是有效的方式
3．  两者结合才更有效

What is the most effective way to communicate an idea or value to large groups of people? The speaker claims that the answer is using images instead of language. But I maintain that using both images and language is the best way.

I concede that using images is a very effective way to convey ideas for the reason that the ideas in form of images are direct to the public. In most cases, people are more likely to be touched by images, such as photos and pictures. For instance, no matter how well the language is organized, people may more easily be shocked by the images of poor kids in Africa. The bony body and the desperate eyes of them, which cannot be explained in language well, both shock our hearts heavily. Without those images, most of people might never be able to imagine the miserable life of them. Although there might be no explanation of the pictures, they easily shows that people there need help since the pictures themselves have given a great impression on people. The videos which contain moving images can convey a more accurate and convincing information that many people will be touched. Therefore, in some cases, images might be a very effective way to communicate idea or value to many people for the direct impact on eyes.

Even if using images is very effective in some respects, language is the most common media to communicate, for it is very clear and so almost impossible to be misunderstood by most people if there are no vague words. More over, when an idea or value is being communicated to the mass, the words are carefully chosen to avoid ambiguity, which also ensure that in most circumstances, the language is better than images. It has been generally recognized that Picasso's Dove symbolizes peace, but no one dare to say that s/he totally understand the idea or value of Picasso, since the information conveyed by images are vague. Yet if Picasso explained his painting in language, it may be easily understood by the mass. It is much common that art works such as paintings are more difficult to understand than writings.

Both images and language are effective ways to communicate values and ideas, but I maintain that the combination of two will be better. By doing that, the advantages of both can be utilized, but the disadvantages will disappear. The TV programs serves as an example: by watching the TV news, people can get to know not only what happens but also how it develops. The situation in Iraq is more direct and clear in TV news than that in local newspapers. Nowadays, most people are inclined to receive information in multi-media, which also means that only the language or images will not meet the needs, since the idea or value can be communicated in a better way.

In conclusion, I concede that both images and language are effective enough in some respects, but the combination of both will have a better effect to communicate ideas and values to large groups of people.

njuzhshaoUID: 2258118

What is the most effective way to communicate an idea or value to large groups of people? The speaker claims that the answer is using images instead of language. But I maintain that using both images and language is the best way. [有点生硬,建议换个句式.]

I concede that using images is a very effective way to convey ideas for the reason that the ideas in form of images are direct to the public. In most cases, people are more likely to be touched by images, such as photos and pictures. For instance, no matter how well the language is organized, people may more easily be shocked by the images of poor kids in Africa. The bony body and the desperate eyes of them, which cannot be explained in language well, both shock our hearts heavily. Without those images, most of people might never be able to imagine the miserable life of them. [这个例子举得挺好的] Although there might be no explanation of the pictures, they easily shows that people there need help since the pictures themselves have given a great impression on people. The videos which contain moving images can convey a more accurate and convincing information that many people will be touched. Therefore, in some cases, images might be a very effective way to communicate idea or value to many people for the direct impact on eyes.

Even if using images is very effective in some respects, language is the most common media to communicate, for it is very clear and so almost impossible to be misunderstood by most people if there are no vague words. More over, when an idea or value is being communicated to the mass, the words are carefully chosen to avoid ambiguity, which also ensure that in most circumstances, the language is better than images. It has been generally recognized that Picasso's Dove symbolizes peace, but no one dare to say that s/he totally understand the idea or value of Picasso, since the information conveyed by images are vague. Yet if Picasso explained his painting in language, it may be easily understood by the mass. It is much common that art works such as paintings are more difficult to understand than writings.

Both images and language are effective ways to communicate values and ideas, but I maintain that the combination of two will be better. By doing that, the advantages of both can be utilized, but the disadvantages will disappear. The TV programs serves as an example: by watching the TV news, people can get to know not only what happens but also how it develops. The situation in Iraq is more direct and clear in TV news than that in local newspapers. Nowadays, most people are inclined to receive information in multi-media, which also means that only the language or images will not meet the needs, since the idea or value can be communicated in a better way.

In conclusion, I concede that both images and language are effective enough in some respects, but the combination of both will have a better effect to communicate ideas and values to large groups of people.


"The most effective way to communicate an idea or value to large groups of people is through the use of images, not language."

题目中的这个信息被你直接丢掉了，要看清楚的是: 这个正式题目的限定成分，也就是在这种前提和情形下再去讨论命题，而如此重要的信息不仅是没有充分阐释，甚至被直接略去，让人觉得可惜，直接导致偏题。

另外，从别的方面来讲，语言没有明显的语病，但是总体上让人觉得很生硬，表达不够流畅，建议能去研究一下句间结构和句式的变化，能为文章增色。
不考虑审题的问题，分论点支持自己的总论点做得挺好的。例子水平也可以，Africa 例子个人认为是举得最好的，而且分析得也已经充分了，赞。

另外， 菲子 修改的我的上一篇文章我有反馈信息在原贴上。

ghost33UID: 2267869

TOPIC: ISSUE74 - "The most effective way to communicate an idea or value to large groups of people is through the use of images, not language."WORDS: 514          TIME: 0:55:22          DATE: 2007-6-22  修改2007-8-41．  图象确实是有效的方式2．  语言也是有效的方式3．  两者结合才更有效What is the most effective way to communicate an idea or value to large groups of people? The speaker claims that the answer is using images instead of language. But I maintain that using both images and language is the best way.开头简洁明了，立场鲜明，不错！

I concede that using images is a very effective way to convey ideas for the reason that the ideas in form of images are direct to the public. In most cases, people are more likely to be touched by images, such as photos and pictures. For instance, no matter how well the language is organized, people may more easily be shocked by the images of poor kids in Africa. The bony body and the desperate eyes of them, which cannot be explained in language well, both shock our hearts heavily. Without those images, most of people might never be able to imagine the miserable life of them. Although there might be no explanation of the pictures, they easily shows that people there need help since the pictures themselves have given a great impression on people. The videos which contain moving images can convey a more accurate and convincing information that many people will be touched. Therefore, in some cases, images might be a very effective way to communicate idea or value to many people for the direct impact on eyes.

Even if using images is very effective in some respects, language is the most common media to communicate, for it is very clear and so almost impossible to be misunderstood by most people if there are no vague words. More over, when an idea or value is being communicated to the mass, the words are carefully chosen to avoid ambiguity, which also ensure that in most circumstances, the language is better than images. It has been generally recognized that Picasso's Dove symbolizes peace, but no one dare to say that s/he totally understand the idea or value of Picasso, since the information conveyed by images are vague. Yet if Picasso explained his painting in language, it may be easily understood by the mass. It is much common that art works such as paintings are more difficult to understand than writings.

这里你只是说它们都各有好处，但是论证不那么深入。图象能打动人，说理部分太少，感觉很空。在说语言好的时候，那个例子不是很信服。觉得找个正面积极的例子好些。比如那些名人的演讲啊，很能引起人的共鸣的。

Both images and language are effective ways to communicate values and ideas, but I maintain that the combination of two will be better. By doing that, the advantages of both can be utilized, but the disadvantages will disappear.这里很泛泛，鉴于你前面也没有太直接地把好处坏处写下来，不如在这里写明白吧。The TV programs serves as an example: by watching the TV news, people can get to know not only what happens but also how it develops. The situation in Iraq is more direct and clear in TV news than that in local newspapers. Nowadays, most people are inclined to receive information in multi-media, which also means看到这里我想写argument，这样的现象说明不了什么，只是多媒体在当代社会的泛滥。而作者需要更多的evidence才能让我相信。呵呵……我要疯了that only the language or images will not meet the needs, since the idea or value can be communicated in a better way.

In conclusion, I concede that both images and language are effective enough in some respects, but the combination of both will have a better effect to communicate ideas and values to large groups of people.

整篇文章语言上我都没有找到什么哈，进步进步！！

ghost33UID: 2267869

njuzhshao的观点不错哦，很有启发，学习

njuzhshaoUID: 2258118

ghost33 总是这么客气^

nornsUID: 2325187

TOPIC: ISSUE74 - "The most effective way to communicate an idea or value to large groups of people is through the use of images, not language."
WORDS: 514          TIME: 0:55:22          DATE: 2007-6-22  修改2007-8-4



What is the most effective way to communicate an idea or value to large groups of people? The speaker claims that the answer is using images instead of language. But I maintain that using both images and language is the best way.

I concede that using images is a very effective way to convey ideas for the reason that the ideas in form of images are direct to the public. In most cases, people are more likely to be touched by images, such as photos and pictures. For instance, no matter how well the language is organized, people may more easily be shocked by the images of poor kids in Africa. The bony body and the desperate eyes of them, which cannot be explained in language well, both shock our hearts heavily. Without those images, most of people might never be able to imagine the miserable life of them. [这个例子举得挺好的] Although there might be no explanation of the pictures, they easily shows that people there need help since the pictures themselves have given a great impression on people. The videos which contain moving images can convey a more accurate and convincing information that many people will be touched. Therefore, in some cases, images might be a very effective way to communicate idea or value to many people for the direct impact on eyes.

Even if using images is very effective in some respects, language is the most （感觉你的观点是在骑墙，那么这个most倾向性太明显了）common media to communicate, for it is very clear and so almost impossible to be misunderstood by most people if there are no vague words这是个assertion，例子？reason？而且你这for是分论点呢还是对TS的解释？. （第一句以为是TS的， 结果马上就转moreover了， 这表示你又开始一层分论点！那你的第一层呢？）More over, when an idea or value is being communicated to the mass, the words are carefully chosen to avoid ambiguity, which also ensure that in most circumstances, the language is better than images. It has been generally recognized that Picasso's Dove symbolizes peace, but no one dare to say that s/he totally understand the idea or value of Picasso, since the information conveyed by images are vague. Yet if Picasso explained his painting in language, it may be easily understood by the mass. （这个例子不好； 我还可以说critics and writers 怎么都不能表现出artist的艺术美感呢！ 要说语言有用， 很多方面啊 election为什么要演讲不用画的？ scientific report为什么主要还是讲为主？都可以）It is much common that art works such as paintings are more difficult to understand than writings.

Both images and language are effective ways to communicate values and ideas, but I maintain that the combination of two will be better. By doing that, the advantages of both can be utilized, but the disadvantages will disappear. The TV programs serves as an example: by watching the TV news, people can get to know not only what happens but also how it develops. The situation in Iraq is more direct and clear in TV news than that in local newspapers. Nowadays, most people are inclined to receive information in multi-media, which also means that only the language or images will not meet the needs, since the idea or value can be communicated in a better way.老实说吧 对于骑墙的观点这一段很重要 我们在讨论最effective 的方法
A effective B effective 那么加起来就effective了吗？不一定吧， 说不定还contradiction呢。 你要说A 有a的不足； B有B 的不足； 两个加起来可以互补， 这样才最有效－范文中 专才和通才的那篇你可以看看。 它的大致立场和你差不多

In conclusion, I concede that both images and language are effective enough in some respects, but the combination of both will have a better effect to communicate ideas and values to large groups of people.

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