8.23新出炉的作文，哈哈，大家来拍吧

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V110(losing a variety of languages and cultures)
What are the reasons for losing a variety of languages and cultures? Give some solutions to solve the problem.

It can not be denied that minority languages and cultures are dying out as we entered the epoch of globalization. In fact, this trend may bring some disadvantages of different culture identity. To get a sense of how this phenomenon emerged, we must turn first to the causes to it.

First and foremost, it is the economic globalization that makes it possible for all the people to use only one common language to communicate, and even to make them identify others’ culture. In addition, when two completely different cultures meet at the first time, the one in inferior situation would probably be in the danger of extinction. Lastly, people who speak minor language could not pay enough attention to their language and culture. Instead, they inclined to speak more international one, which, they thought, is a kind of fashion.

From the three reasons I mentioned above, I would like to suggest some solutions to them. First of all, the government of those nations with minor languages should take some measures to enhance the awareness of protecting their own language and culture, which, otherwise, would potentially endanger national identity.(? 不知道对不对). Secondly, it is the non-governmental organization’s responsibility that provides some lectures to show the importance of their own language and how to protect their culture. Thirdly, all walks of society should help each other to preserve their culture.

As a proud citizen of our colorful global village, I do agree that there are irresistible benefits in having a common language. However, as each language and culture plays an essential role in diversity of the world, it is high time that we protected them.

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好
今天我就帮你改这篇
呵呵 ;d:

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It can not be denied that minority languages and cultures are dying out as we entered(感觉这里时态有问题，前后不对应) the epoch of globalization. In fact, this trend may bring some disadvantages of different culture identity（ies？）. To get a sense of how this phenomenon emerged, we must turn first to the causes to（？） it.First and foremost, it is the economic globalization that makes it possible for all the people to use only one common language to communicate, and even to make them identify others’ culture（前后单复数不，，）. In addition, when two completely different（你还用different啊？disparate dissimilar distinct diverse unlike都不错啊）cultures meet at the first time, the one in inferior situation would probably be in the danger of extinction. Lastly, people who speak minor language could not pay enough attention to their language and culture. Instead, they inclined to speak more international one, which, they thought, is a kind of fashion.From the three reasons I mentioned above, I would like to suggest some solutions to them. First of all, the government of those nations with minor languages should take some measures to enhance the awareness of protecting their own language and culture, which, otherwise, would potentially endanger national identity.(? 不知道对不对)（句子倒没有错，不过前面的which就应该不要了）. Secondly, it is the non-governmental organization’s responsibility that provides some lectures to show the importance of their own language and how to protect their culture. Thirdly, all walks of society（请教这是什么意思，呵呵互相学习） should help each other to preserve their culture. As a proud citizen of our colorful global village, I do agree that there are irresistible benefits（？）in having a common language. However, as each language and culture plays an essential role in diversity of the world, it is high time that we protected（？）them.


很中规中矩的一篇作文，嗯，都能“满足”题目的要求，不过我看不到很“闪光”的句子
同勉同勉

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are dying out as we entered(感觉这里时态有问题，前后不对应) the epoch of globalization
改称died out as we entered....对么？
which, otherwise, would potentially endanger national identity.(? 不知道对不对)（句子倒没有错，不过前面的which就应该不要了）.
which是引导后面的定语丛句的，如果没有which 就要加上it，对么？
all walks of society（请教这是什么意思，呵呵互相学习）这个是：社会各个阶层

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:)

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啥意思啊？评论以下我得话。。。。

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1  are dying out as we entere
2 otherwise，你是想用“反意思”吧 ？所以你后面加个it 去掉前面的which咯

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如果不加it而选用which也可以把？

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既然有67兄改了，我就休息一下把~~:loveliness:
留点脑细胞写ps:o

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原帖由 forbeck 于 2007-8-23 14:54 发表
既然有67兄改了，我就休息一下把~~:loveliness:
留点脑细胞写ps:o

嘿嘿
蒙牛MM
今日很少作文要改的啊
我们都可以休息了;d:

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改一下拉，多一个人改会更加进步的，呵呵，我这周就考了，帮一下忙拉:handshake

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就是
蒙牛MM想偷懒

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估计她累了。。。;d:

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:)

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晕，你太会灌水了。。。;d: