第三篇 求拍～～～

sunflower1207UID: 2318402

第三篇，觉得写的很挫，但是还是坚持吧。字数比前两篇少，280出头，花了30分钟。不过还要继续精简，呵呵。

Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not he real needs of the society in which they are sold.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Advertising is a strategy to make the public known various products which ranges widely from a little toothpaste even to a big house , covering near every aspects in daily life. Some people claim that advertisement make life convenient and easier while others hold the opinion that certain advertisement sell people things they don’t need. From the point of view, we should balance the opposite views because advertisement bring about advantages as well as disadvantages.

For starters, advertisement is an effective way to promote qualified goods to customers. A large number of advertising goods are brand-name products which may improve the public’s quality of life. In additon, thanks to the advertisement, people only have to spend less money for TV programs, magazines,newspapers and other media. The reason is that the income of the mass media mainly comes from the advertisement. It is hard to imagine how expensive a magzine is without any advertisement.

However, we have to admit the adverse effects of advertisement as well. For instance, some companies exaggerate the functions of their goods in order to increase sales.Therefore, an increasing number of people complains about them. I think there are some reasons. First, the public always believe in the mass media, which will not advertise for inqualified goods. Secondly, manufactors always invite the celebrities, such as film stars , sports players to be sponsors to attract the fans of them. To avoid cheating by fake commodities, the authorities should enforce laws and take proper measures to forbid the production and advertisement of such goods.

After all the discussion, we can safely draw the conclusion that advertisement plays an essential role in modern bussiness society, although it causes some problems.

夜空的彼方UID: 159120

好！
今晚我也写一篇，明天帮你改！

sunflower1207UID: 2318402

看到你写的作文了， 呵呵 咱俩都是夜猫型啊

forbeckUID: 2297645

:funk: 都得早晨起床才能看到你们的新作文

forbeckUID: 2297645

Advertising is a strategy to make the public known/这个是做宾补吗？我的理解是用KNOW的原型，或者用一个被动态 various products which ranges单复数 widely from a little toothpaste even to a big house , covering near every aspects不用复数 in daily life. Some people claim that advertisement makeS life convenient and easier while others hold the opinion that certain advertisement sell/广告不能销售商品吧？只能影响消费者的购物心态 people things they don’t need. From the point of view, we should balance the opposite views because advertisement bringS about advantages as well as disadvantages.

For starters, advertisement is an effective way to promote qualified goods to customers. A large number of advertising goods are brand-name products which may improve the public’s quality of life. In additon, thanks to the advertisement, people only have to spend less money for TV programs, magazines,newspapers and other media. The reason is that the income of the mass media mainly comes from the advertisement. It is hard to imagine how expensive a magzine is without any advertisement.后边的这个例子很刁钻哦：）不过，虽然提到了广告的作用，但没有提到广告对购物的影响，最好能换一个，要不诱骗体的嫌疑　　　

However, we have to admit the adverse effects of advertisement as well. For instance, some companies exaggerate the functions of their goods in order to increase sales.Therefore, an increasing number of people complains about them./这句话，我认为可以和上一句合并成一个长句，直接加上but outrage public opinion? I think这样的主观表达要避免 there are some reasons. First, the public always貌似不一定哦 believe in the mass media, which will not advertise for inqualified goods. Secondly, manufactors always invite the celebrities, such as film stars , sports players to be sponsors to attract the fans of them. 这里提出解决方案显得很突兀To avoid cheating by fake commodities, the authorities should enforce laws and take proper measures to forbid the production and advertisement of such goods.

After all the discussions, we can safely draw the conclusion that advertisement plays an essential role in modern bussiness society, although it causes some problems.
建议：
1、第三段的解决方案：我的个人意见是，这类argument的题目，倒没有必要提出solution 来，可以把节省下来的字数用来做更深入的话题讨论，让自己的观点更占得住脚~~
2、可以加上一些例子，要不单一的论证略显单薄

sunflower1207UID: 2318402

3x，谢谢蒙牛了。 觉得作文真的是需要有人改，否则就是彻底的内循环，每次都没有新思想。