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调整生物钟了,蒙牛MM 不用一大早起来帮我改作文了。


Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subjec. Do you agree or disagree.



Nowadays, some universities enroll the unequal numbers of male and female students in every subject. Some people agree with the policy while others hold a different view. As far as I am concerned, I am in favor of the latter one.

For a start, the equal acceptance of both genders means there is no discrimination between different sexes in academic. In history, women struggled for a long period to acquire the same rights as men’s in different aspects including education. It is undouted that education is necessary for both male and female. Therefore, universities should allow all the students to select subjects which they like freely.

Another reason is that equal gender ration of a university is beneficial for students’ psychological health. In our society, the number of men is nearly the same as that of the women. Hence, it is natural that students will feel comfortable and easily under the circumstance that the sex ratio is equal in the universities. Some experts even point out that female are likely to have a good manner when they are studying or working with girls.

The last thing I want to state is that students can learn a great deal from the opposite sex. For instance, female students tend to be more careful than male on study. Instead, men always good at dealing with practical problems . If students of both sexes frequently study together, it is likely that they will absorb some merits from students of the other gender.

From all the dicussion above, we may safely draw the conclusion that there are innumerous advantages for enrolling equal numbers of the bothe genders in universities.
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发表于 2007-9-4 16:48:54 |只看该作者
发作文请在这里留下链接,有加分
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-724783-1-1.html
同时热心板油(牛儿天空和啦啦啦)会给你修改
如果需要菠萝修改请在这里留下链接https://bbs.gter.net/thread-729183-1-1.html
同时欢迎你也给别人改作文(有加分啊),从而学习别人的长处,更快的提高自己咯

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好的呵呵

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Nowadays, some universities enroll the unequal numbers of male and female students in every subject改写标题,不能仅仅指修改几个词. Some people agree with the policy while others hold a different view. As far as I am concerned, I am in favor of the latter one.

For a start, the equal acceptance of both genders means there is no discrimination between different sexes in academic. In history, women struggled for a long period to acquire the same rights as men’s in different aspects including education. It is undouted that education is necessary for both male and female. Therefore, universities should allow all the students to select subjects which they like freely.

Another reason is that equal gender ration of a university is beneficial for students’ psychological health. In our society, the number of men is nearly the same as that of the women貌似县灾难性总数比女性多好多阿:). Hence, it is natural that students will feel comfortable and easily/easy under the circumstance that the sex ratio is equal in the universities. Some experts even point out that female are likely to have a good manner when they are studying or working with girls/boys?.

The last thing I want to state is that students can learn a great deal from the opposite sex. For instance, female students tend to be more careful than male on study. Instead, men are always这个词太绝对了 good at dealing with practical problems . If students of both sexes frequently study together, it is likely that they will absorb some merits from students of the other gender.

From all the discussions above, we may safely draw the conclusion that there are innumerous advantages for enrolling equal numbers of the bothe/both genders in universities.

建议:
1、我认为这是最保险的一种写法,首尾呼应,body分三部分来支持自己的观点
2、当然,要是想那高分,主要还是在句字上下功夫吧!在我看到的所谓高分范文中,都在文章中出现了很漂亮的排比句,你也可以考虑运用一下哈~~

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