作文求拍：In your opinion what factors contribute to a good movie?

onlyalpsUID: 208029

In your opinion what factors contribute to a good movie?
完成时间：40m, 多谢高手指点

Every one has his/her own taste towards movies, some are big fans of hollywood blockbusters, some like those studio made art movies, some prefer to scien-fictions with gorgeous stunt effect, or some even like cartoon movies which is completely made by computers. From my perspective, I think there are several factors which can make a movie really outstanding.

A unique and excellent script,is always a very important factor for a good movie. Usually when people decide to go to cinema, they want to know what kind of story a movie tells about, therefore telling a stunning story will always help attracting more people come to cinema to see the movie. However,a good screenplay not only focuses in telling a story,but also pays close attention to the lines, scene arrangements and how the actor/actress talk or act naturally, which is very important for those critical audiences.

For a good movie, both the directors and audiences would like to see are some really talented actors and actresses. Sometimes, even by just telling a simple and ordinary story, the real talented actors/actresses can make it a unforgetable movie. May you still remember the movie "On Golden Pond",in which Katharine Hepburn and Henry Fonda played two elderly couple living by a pond, it is a story of family members get along with each other well after some misunderstanding. but the excellent performance of both the actor and actress made this movie a real classic.

Movies are made by movie directors, it is obvious to see what a important role the director plays in a good movie. Even tell a same story, different directors will produce different movies.  Recent years, many movies were remade,I want to mention a movie calls "Lolita", a movie once made in 1962 by Stanley Kubrick, and was remade in 1997 by another director Adrian Lyne. By comparing the two versions, it is not difficult to find the latter version is more success in a way.

Actually, Factors which contribute to a good movie are too much to list them all, sometimes sound track, photographing, making-up or maybe simplay the place where the movie was shooted also play an important role, despite of all these, hope we can enjoy more and more good movies in the future.

forbeckUID: 2297645

先去吃饭，回来再改哈;d:

forbeckUID: 2297645

Every one/everyone has his/her own taste towards movies, some are big fans of hollywood blockbusters, some like those studio made art movies, some prefer to scien-fictions with gorgeous stunt effect, or some even like cartoon movies which is /are completely made by computers. From my perspective, I think there are several factors which can make a movie really outstanding.开头写的有些过于臃肿了，各种人的喜好不必分得太详细了，如果这么分，body部分可以考虑根据分类来写factorsA unique and excellent script,is always a very important factor for a good movie. Usually when people decide to go to cinema, they want to know what kind of story a movie tells about, therefore telling a stunning story will always help attracting more people come to cinema to see the movie. However, a good screenplay not only focuses in telling a story, but also pays close attention to the lines, scene arrangements and how the actor/actress talks or acts naturally, which is/指代不清，用is说的的是哪个因素呢？ very important for those critical audiences.For a good movie, both the directors and audiences would like to see are some really talented actors and actresses. Sometimes, even by just telling a simple and ordinary story, the real talented actors/actresses can make it an unforgettable movie. May you still remember the movie "On Golden Pond”, in which Katharine Hepburn and Henry Fonda played two elderly couple living by a pond, it is a story of family members get along with each other well after some misunderstanding. but/But the excellent performance of both the actor and actress made this movie a real classic.经典的例子，很不错哦，嘻嘻！可能因为我的个人喜好~~Movies are made by movie directors, it is obvious to see what an important role the director plays in a good movie. Even tell a same story, different directors will produce different movies.  Recent years, many movies were remade, I want to mention a movie calls "Lolita", a movie once made in 1962 by Stanley Kubrick, and was remade in 1997 by another director Adrian Lyne. By comparing the two versions, it is not difficult to find the latter version is more success in a way.Actually, Factors which contribute to a good movie are too much to list them all, sometimes sound track, photographing, making-up or maybe simplay/不认识这个单词？ the place where the movie was/时态有些不对 shooted also play an这个单复数没有同行 important role, despite of all these, hope we can enjoy more and more这个短语用得太滥了，可以考虑同意词替换 good movies in the future.

建议：
1、  总的来说，文章很有条理，首尾呼应的也很好，首段可以继续瘦身
2、  三个原因分析得比较深入，并且举例证明，很有力（看来楼主也是一个电影迷哈）
3、  文字挺活泼的（虽然没有这样的评分标准，但我一直认为活泼的文字更能给人留下好印象）
4、  文章中还有一些小错误，平时写的时候注意就好

onlyalpsUID: 208029

Forbeck, 太感谢你了！修改得真快，你的建议也让我能更客观了解自己的水平。
我还有两个问题请教你或想跟大家切磋：
先是关于文笔风格，IELTs写作两个task都要求用比较学术风格，客观、严谨，就是议论文风格，
但我每次提笔，笔下冒出来的句子感觉都像是记叙文或者是散文的风格，到最后发现活泼有余，严谨不够。不知道这个要不要刻意改正呢，还是顺其自然呢。
另外，不知道大家有没有同样的问题，就是练习的时候都是用电脑写，有时候边写边改，或者全部删掉重来，思路在这个过程中才逐渐清晰起来，可如果在纸上也这样写，岂不是要把考卷涂成一个大花脸，请问这个有什么建议么，还是说练习的时候就一定都要用纸笔来写才好呢？

myw201201UID: 2364177

ONLYALPS.我也是个新人,如有不妥处还请指教,首先LZ的水平我觉的蛮高了,
然后我认为学术的文章第一看结构,第二看用词
结构的严谨要看是否能有一句话能概括出一个段的大意,就像捆竹子,必须有一条绳子,才能捆紧一箩竹子,这一条绳子就是每段的开头,或中心句总分结构是国外大学论文最常用的结构了,应为他显够严谨,LZ的这片我觉概括FACTORS可以这么概括,一种FACTORS是主观的,就是人们被明星或著名导演吸引等,另一种是客观因素就是剧本,效果等,这样个人观点段旧可以分两段,一个开头说是主观的,,然后分开讨论,一个开头说客观的,然后分开讨论.
第2个用词尽量不要用口语词,LZ貌似有用过一个STUNNING,这貌似是个口语词,这一下子就把气氛打破了
第三,我认为要是考IELTS还是用笔练习好,写完了打到电脑上查下错误,,考试毕竟是笔试而且也没电脑检查错误,最好提前那笔多练习下.
LZ的作文写的不错,祝考鸭成功~

onlyalpsUID: 208029

谢谢蒙蒙，你的总结很好。
stunning我还以为是书面用语，后来想想看电影听到这个词好像是比较多用于口语哦，呵呵。
我也发现的确要开始用笔来联系写作文了，不然考试的时候看来也是对付不过来
也祝你考试成功，共勉！

ray-dayUID: 2366509

前面各位热心同学都给楼主很精彩的回复

蒙牛MM 也提出详细地修改意见.

偶就不再罗嗦拉,提点小修改的地方给楼主,就当参考~~~

Movies are made by movie directors, it is obvious to see what a important role the director plays in a good movie. Even tell a same story, different directors will produce different movies.  Recent years, many movies were remade....

其中,
different directors will produce different movies,,, 建议换成:

different directors produce different styles.


Recent years, many movies were remade....建议换成:

Recent years, many movies adapt new version...

个人看法:)

futuremanUID: 2327059

说个没边的
i also love Stanley Kubrick, as well as his movies, esp 2001 a space oddessey, im absolutely his frenetic fan~

forbeckUID: 2297645

我的个人看法是，只要结构严谨，散文不散，就有可能成为好文章，我记得我考试前曾经看过一篇考官写的作文，那篇文章是以意识流的写法写的，文章非常流畅，也很活泼，当然，最重要的还是深入讨论了题目，可能因为个人的偏好，我也尽量把自己的文章写成那样，尤其是近两写出漂亮的排比句，排比句是高分作文的一个特色哦，楼主的功底很好，可以尝试一下:)

onlyalpsUID: 208029

谢谢ray-day comment
蒙牛MM说得好，有时候感觉自己的论点苍白无力，站不住脚，还是要硬着头皮写下去，
看来俺还要继续磨练结构,加油！