ARGUMENT131-[SPRING 小组] 第一次作业

luckimonkeyUID: 2408088

ARGUMENT131 -"The marine sanctuary on Tria Island was established to protect certain marine mammals. Its regulations ban dumping and offshore oil drilling within 20 miles of Tria, but fishing is not banned. Currently many fish populations in Tria's waters are declining, a situation blamed on pollution. In contrast, the marine sanctuary on Omni Island has regulations that ban dumping, offshore oil drilling, and fishing within 10 miles of Omni and Omni reports no significant decline in its fish populations. Clearly, the decline in fish populations in Tria's waters is the result of overfishing, not pollution. Therefore, the best way to restore Tria's fish populations and to protect all of Tria's marine wildlife is to abandon our regulations and adopt those of Omni."
TIME:   07:00:00     DATE: 2007-10-25     WORDS: 537
   I think it is not rational for Tria’s government to abandon their own regulation and adopt those of Omni because that the evidences and information given above is neither sufficient nor cogent, which I will render in the discussion as follows:
   First, the fact of the decline of fish population in Tria’s waters is open to question. Because we have no idea how this result comes out. It can be the conclusion of a long term investigation or just a sudden one which may show a different result. Since some species of fishes live in different waters during their living period. Take salmon for example, this kind of fish will migrate to the river where they are born for propagation. If the investigation is taken at this time, it is possible that the result does not cover the population of fishes sharing the same habit as salmon.
   Second, it fails to provide the information about location and climate of the different island. As is known to us all, the number of species and population of fishes in tropic places are much larger than those in cold places. If the two islands have entirely different conditions of location and climate, it is ridiculous to compare the population of fishes.
  Third, those who suggest adopting the Omni’s regulations overlook the factor of water condition such as velocity, temperature, the amount of oxygen and salt, all of which are vital for fishes’ living. Few species of fishes are capable of living in the rapids and fewer will survive in waters lack oxygen.    Considering those factors it is necessary to offer more details about the water conditions of the two islands before making a decision.  
  Moreover, the creatures which are considered as part of environment for the fishes also can influence their population too. They build up a closely relationship by eating or being eaten, which means any significant changes of one creature would affect another one. Unfortunately, no information about this is given.
  Furthermore, human can influence the population of fishes in many ways besides dumping, fishing and offshore oil drilling. We can not simply blame overfishing because we see the ten more meters permitting for fishing. We need to compare the more regulations that may influence the marine environment between the two islands rather than focus only on the fishing.
  Last but not the least, how can we say that people in Tria fish more than residents in Omni simply based on the different regulation and then get the conclusion the Tria residents face the problem of overfishing ? The regulation permitting ten more meters for fishing does not mean people will do more fishing. There is no information about the number of fisherman or ships of the two islands nor is the frequency of the people fishing activities which can help us to check if the problem of overfishing for Tria Island does exist.
Taking all the factors above into account, we can see clearly that the problem of decline of fishes’ population can never be solved by the suggestion to abandon the previous regulation and adopt another one. More information and investigations should be collected and taken before coming up with a rational and feasible solution.

[ 本帖最后由 luckimonkey 于 2007-10-27 00:55 编辑 ]

gloriaguo1986UID: 2232808

Argument131修改
I think it is not rational for Tria’s government to abandon their own regulation and adopt those of Omni because that the evidences and information given above is neither sufficient nor cogent, which I will render in the discussion as follows:     First, the fact of the decline of fish population in Tria’s waters is open toquestion（学到一个不错的表达，谢谢！）. Because we have no idea how this result comes out. It can be the conclusion of a long term investigation or just a sudden one which may show a different result. Since some species of fishes live in different waters during their living period. Take salmon for example, this kind of fish will migrate to the river where they are born for propagation. If the investigation is taken at this time, it is possible that the result does not cover the population of fishes sharing the same habit as salmon.（此段论证有力）     Second, it fails to provide the information about location and climate of the different island. As is known to us all, the number of species and population of fishes in tropic places are much larger than those in cold places. If the two islands have entirely different conditions of location and climate, it is ridiculous to compare the population of fishes.     Third, those who suggest adopting the Omni’s regulations overlook the factor of water condition such as velocity, temperature, the amount of oxygen and salt, all of which are vital for fishes’ living. Few species of fishes are capable of living in the rapids and fewer will survive in waters lack oxygen.    Considering those factors it is necessary to offer more details about the water conditions of the two islands before making a decision.        Moreover, the creatures which are considered as part of environment for the fishes also can influence their population too. They build up a closely relationship by eating or being eaten, which means any significant changes of one creature would affect another one. Unfortunately, no information about this is given.    Furthermore, human can influence the population of fishes in many ways besides dumping, fishing and offshore oil drilling. （具体展开或例举下还有哪些人类的影响也许会更好）We can not simply blame overfishing because we see the ten more meters permitting for fishing. We need to compare the more regulations that may influence the marine environment between the two islands rather than focus only on the fishing（此句有点乏力）.    Last but not the least, how can we say that people in Tria fish more than residents in Omni simply based on the different regulation and then get the conclusion the Tria residents face the problem of overfishing ? The regulation permitting ten more meters for fishing does not mean people will do more fishing. There is no information about the number of fisherman or ships of the two islands nor is the frequency of the people fishing activities which can help us to check if the problem of overfishing for Tria Island does exist.
     Taking all the factors above into account, we can see clearly that the problem of decline of fishes’ population can never be solved by the suggestion to abandon the previous regulation and adopt another one. More information and investigations should be collected and taken before coming up with a rational and feasible solution.
文章的结构很清晰，而且主要的逻辑错误均已找出，如果能更有力的展开论述也许会更好。相信楼主在动笔之前都经过很多的思考，你的I和A都很值得我学习！！继续努力！

life2008UID: 2401740

I think it is not rational for Tria’s government to abandon their own regulation and adopt those of Omni because that the evidences and
information given above are neither sufficient nor cogent, which I will render in the discussion as follows:
First, the fact of the decline of fish population in Tria’s waters is open to question. Because we have no idea of how this result comes out. It can be the conclusion of a long term investigation or just a sudden one which may show a different result. Since some species of fishes live in different waters during their living period. Take salmon for example, this kind of fish will migrate to the river where they were born for propagation. If the investigation is taken at this time, it is possible that the result does not cover the population of fishes sharing the same habit as salmon.

Second, it fails to provide the information about  location and climate of the different island. As is known to us all, the number of species and population of fishes in tropical places are much larger than those in colder places. If the two islands have entirely different conditions of location and climate, it is ridiculous to compare the population of fishes.

Third, those who suggest adopting the Omni’s regulations overlook the factor of water conditions such as velocity, temperature, the amount of oxygen and salt, all of which are vital for fishes’ living. Few species of fishes are capable of living in the rapids and fewer will survive in waters lacking of  oxygen.    Considering those factors, it is necessary to offer more details about the water conditions of the two islands before making a decision.

Moreover, the creatures which are considered as part of environment for the fishes also can influence their population too. They build up a closely relationship by eating or being eaten, which means any significant changes of one creature would affect another one. Unfortunately, no information about this is given.

Furthermore, human can influence the population of fishes in many ways besides dumping, fishing and offshore oil drilling. We can not simply blame overfishing because we see the ten more meters permitting for fishing. We need to compare the more regulations that may influence the marine environment between the two islands rather than focus only on the fishing.

Last but not the least, how can we say that people in Tria fish more than residents in Omni simply based on the different regulation and then get the conclusion the Tria residents face the problem of overfishing ? The regulation permitting ten more meters for fishing does not mean people will do more fishing. There is no information about the number of fisherman or ships of the two islands nor is the frequency of the people fishing activities which can help us to check if the problem of overfishing for Tria Island does exist.

Taking all the factors above into account, we can see clearly that the problem of decline of fishes’ population can never be solved by the suggestion to abandon the previous regulation and adopt another one. More information and investigations should be collected and taken before coming up with a rational and feasible solution.
文章写得很好,错误很少,思路很清晰,看了你的文章之后我又学到了很多

[ 本帖最后由 life2008 于 2007-10-29 23:53 编辑 ]