Argument2【0806G-Sunbird小组】第2次作业

Bellona0428UID: 2418798

TOPIC: ARGUMENT2 - The following appeared in a letter sent by a committee of homeowners from the Deerhaven Acres to all homeowners in Deerhaven Acres.

"Seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. Since then, average property values have tripled in Brookville. In order to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres, we should adopt our own set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting."
WORDS: 475                 DATE: 2007-11-8

In this argument, the author recommends that Deerhaven Acres should adopt the same restrictions with Brookcille community, in order to raise their property values. To support this recommendation, the author cites that average property values of Brookwille community have tripled than seven years ago, it is due to this community adopting a set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting.  Carefully scrutiny of such evidence, however, reveals that it seems to be illogical.

To begin with, the committee of homeowners from the Deerhaven Acres is failing to consider other possible alternatives to raise property values. Such alternatives may include the fact that there is a strong economic growth of Brookville in these years, or that the changes in supply-demand relationship may be play a more crucial role in increasing property values. It is possible that the manicipal infranstructure of Brookville, such as transportion condition, urban greening, and health care, has been obviously enhanced along with economic prosperity, so that the real estate market are keeping a driving rise. Or perhaps the quantities of housing supply are fewer nowodays than it is seven years ago, relative of prices rose. In short, without ruling out other possible explanation, the author can not justifiable conclude that landscaping and housepainting were the cause of property values' raising.

Moreover, the author has failed to consider the difference of geographical location terrain of the two different areas. Perhaps Brookville is an area of near more commercial streets, so that their property values rising with the prosperity in the entire regional. To the contrary, Deerhaven just located in an area of an remote rural areas, faring away from commercial districts, and subsequently having a relative low prices. Or perhaps Brookville had a large potential of development, compared with Deerhaven Acres, an area of having a relatively saturated development.  Lacking a further investigation, the author cannot convince me that adopting a set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting is the only and vital factor due to the raise having tripled than before.

Finally, a seven-year period is a particularly long time for nowadays' people to emulate this old method. People maybe create some suspicious opinion. How long does the method keep effective? And what about the landscaping in Deerhaven Acres, and what percent values can be promote from landscaping? Without fully and completely estimating the difference about landscaping and housepainting in these two areas, the author can not prove that the suggestion is credible and sufficient for the recommendation..

In conclusion, the author fails to validate the conclusion that a strictly langscaping and housepainting will make property values raise. To solidify the argument, the author should provide more concrete evidence to prove that adorning landscaping and housepainting play a vital role in raising average property values. In addition, the author would have to rule out the abovementioned possibilities that would undermine the author's claim.

wode56585759UID: 2305566

我后面的作文没有找，到我怎么改段间能有空行阿，试了好多次，水平有限，包涵。。


[ 本帖最后由 wode56585759 于 2007-11-10 10:50 编辑 ]

wode56585759UID: 2305566

In this argument, the author recommends that DeerhavenAcres should adopt the same restrictions with Brookcille community, in order toraise their property values. To support this recommendation, the author citesthat average property values of Brookwille community have tripled than sevenyears ago, it is due to this community adopting a set of restrictions onlandscaping and housepainting.  Carefullyscrutiny of such evidence, however, revealsthat it seems to be illogical.

To begin with, the committee of homeowners from theDeerhaven Acres is failing to consider other possible alternatives to raiseproperty values. Such alternatives may include the fact that there is a strongeconomic growth of Brookville in these years, or that the changes insupply-demand relationship may be play a more crucial role in increasingproperty values. It is possible that the municipal (municipal)infranstructure (infranstructure) of Brookville,such as transportion （transportation） condition, urban greening, and health care, has been obviously enhanced along with economic prosperity,so that the real estate market are keeping a driving rise. Or perhaps nowodays （nowadays）the quantities ofhousing supply are fewer than it is seven years ago, relative of prices rose.In short, without ruling out other possibleexplanation, the author can not justifiable conclude that landscaping andhousepainting were the cause of property values' raising.

Moreover, the author has failed to consider thedifference of geographical location terrain of the two different areas. PerhapsBrookville is an area of near more commercial streets, so that their propertyvalues rising with the prosperity in the entire regional. To the contrary, Deerhaven just located in an area ofa remote rural area,faring可以这么用么？没发现有动词词性 away from commercial districts, and subsequently havinga relative low prices. Or perhaps Brookville had a large potential ofdevelopment, compared with Deerhaven Acres, an area of having a relativelysaturated development.  Lacking a furtherinvestigation, the author cannot convince me that adopting a set ofrestrictions on landscaping and housepainting is the only and vital factor dueto the raise having tripled than before.

Finally, a seven-year period is a particularly longtime for nowadays' people to emulate this old method. Peoplemaybe create some suspicious opinion. How long does the method keepeffective? And what about the landscaping in Deerhaven Acres, and what percentvalues can be promote from landscaping? Without fully and completely estimatingthe difference about landscaping and housepainting in these two areas, theauthor can not prove that the suggestion is credible and sufficient for therecommendation.

In conclusion, the authorfails to validate the conclusion that a strictlylangscaping and housepainting will make property values raise. To solidify theargument, the author should provide more concrete evidence to prove thatadorning landscaping and housepainting play a vital role in raising averageproperty values. In addition, the author would have to rule out the abovementioned possibilities that would undermine theauthor's claim.

[ 本帖最后由 wode56585759 于 2007-11-10 10:49 编辑 ]

norman518UID: 188582

有空也帮我侃侃哈！

In this argument, the author recommends that Deerhaven Acres should adopt the same restrictions with Brookcille community, in order to raise their property values. To support this recommendation, the author cites that average property values of Brookwille community have tripled than seven years ago, it is due to this community adopting a set of restrictions on landscaping and house-painting.  Carefully scrutiny of such evidence【①语法上：在句中做状语，那么后面就缺少主语；做主语呢？carefullyàcareful；②难道本A就只有evidence的缺陷，往下看吧！】, however, reveals that it seems to be illogical.

To begin with, the committee of homeowners from the Deerhaven Acres is failing to consider other possible alternatives to raise property values. Such alternatives may include the fact that there is a strong economic growth of Brookville in these years, or that the changes in supply-demand relationship may be play a more crucial role in increasing property values. It is possible that the manicipal infranstructure 【注意拼写：municipal infrastructure】of Brookville, such as transportion【注意拼写：transportation】 condition, urban greening, and health care, has been obviously enhanced along with economic prosperity, so that the real estate market are keeping a driving rise. Or perhaps the quantities of housing supply are fewer nowodays than it is seven years ago, relative of prices rose. In short, without ruling out other possible explanation, the author can not justifiable conclude【注意语法：cannot +adj+vàjustly conclude】 that landscaping and housepainting were the cause of property values' raising.
【B1:列举它因，实则是攻击其“建议的前提”，为何不一开始在主题句TP就提出，而是在结尾才娓娓到来；且短内攻击的逻辑也不够清晰】

Moreover, the author has failed to consider the difference of geographical location terrain【是想表达“地理位置”？“地形结构”？】 of the two different areas. Perhaps Brookville is an area of near more commercial streets, so that their property values rising with the prosperity in the entire regional. To the contrary, Deerhaven just located in an area of an remote rural areas, faring away from commercial districts, and subsequently having a relative low prices. Or perhaps Brookville had a large potential of development, compared with Deerhaven Acres, an area of having a relatively saturated development【想表达什么？】.  Lacking a further investigation, the author cannot convince me that adopting a set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting is the only and vital factor due to the raise having tripled than before.
【B2：通过地理位置的差异攻击其“不恰当的类比”，但没有表达透彻】

Finally, a seven-year period is a particularly long time for nowadays' people to emulate this old method. People maybe create some suspicious opinion. How long does the method keep effective? And what about the landscaping in Deerhaven Acres, and what percent values can be promote from landscaping?【既然有问，应该有回答哟---正好举反例呀！】 Without fully and completely estimating the difference about landscaping and housepainting in these two areas, the author can not prove that the suggestion is credible and sufficient for the recommendation..
【B3：通过时间的差异攻击其“不恰当的类比”，但没有表达深入、具体】

In conclusion, the author fails to validate the conclusion that a strictly langscaping and housepainting will make property values raise. To solidify the argument, the author should provide more concrete evidence to prove that adorning landscaping and housepainting play a vital role in raising average property values. In addition, the author would have to rule out the abovementioned possibilities that would undermine the author's claim.

[ 本帖最后由 norman518 于 2007-11-12 00:46 编辑 ]