issue130(AWER)

futuringUID: 2422731

130. "How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."
130. 今天的孩子社会化的方式决定了社会的明天。遗憾的是，我们还不知道如何去培养这些能有助于带来一个更好社会的孩子们。

提纲：
对于孩子的培养总体还是知道的
已经有一套教育体系和一些不错的教育理论，方法
通过社会学校家长的全方位教育手段
但是也有些盲区和错误的地方
总之我们还是懂的如何教育孩子社会化的

The speaker alleges that we have not yet learned how to raise well socialized children to build a better society. At first glance, this opinion seems to be somewhat appealing, but further reflection tells me that I can’t agree with it totally. For our education is continue to develop, and most children can adapt to the society.

To begin with, we have an education system to develop the children. What we knew and what we done come into effect already, and the outcome proof that the majority children can well socialized. We formed a system of education and accompany with the development of society continually. Though search the efficient education method is a developed process, what we grasp is accord to the situation now. The nation gives individuals the opportunity to develop themselves, and provide society with the skills it needs to evolve in its best interests. The educators have already concluded some education theories and made lots of methods. Such as basic education add special education, education for all-around development, guidance education etc.

In the second place, society, school and family form a complex educate net around the children and use their own means to develop the children to socialized persons. The children will affected by various ways to complete their socialized process. For society, it provide place to the children, such as the museum, cinema and amusement park. And it creates a positive environment. What the TV showed and what the publication told lead a right direction. For school, the vital place for the children, the educators know how to teach knowledge, shape character, foster interest of the children. For family, more parents realized that use proper method to raise their children, develop them into an independent person.

However, as we see, some problems and unknown areas exist in the education of children which hinder the process of their socialized. We have to admit that not every method is efficient to every child and perhaps some methods are improper. Just as in high school, we give the university passport to the student according the credits. We judge the students’ performance according the credits too. These bring to the student unilateral effects.

So, to some extend, we know how to raise our children and educate them to be a socialized persons. And most citizens’ well development show the education’s success. Though some children can’t well adapt the society, the fact is that the majority we raised could perform well and bring more benefit to it.

Betty210UID: 2398827

看后一些感受：

1、            文中没有考虑作者的第一句话：How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society.你可以在开头赞同一下，下面再讨论其后。
        In my view ,discuss this sentence is necessary. It can emphases the significance of your issue.  
2、            You demonstrate that we have knowledge of raising children. The reasons are compelling.
How about other aspects which take the same influence on socialization of children? Such as individual effort .etc.


(个人看法，多多指教)

futuringUID: 2422731

:handshake :loveliness: 谢谢阿！

陈星君UID: 2416582

130. "How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."
今天的孩子社会化的方式决定了社会的明天。遗憾的是，我们还不知道如何去培养这些能有助于带来一个更好社会的孩子们。

提纲：
对于孩子的培养总体还是知道的
已经有一套教育体系和一些不错的教育理论，方法
通过社会学校家长的全方位教育手段
但是也有些盲区和错误的地方
总之我们还是懂的如何教育孩子社会化的

The speaker alleges that we have not yet learned how to raise well socialized children to build a better society. At first glance, this opinion seems to be somewhat appealing, but further reflection tells me that I can’t agree with it totally. For our education is continue to develop, and most children can adapt to the society.

To begin with, we have an education system to develop the children. What we knew and what we done [+have] come into effect already, and the outcome proof that the majority children can well [+be]  socialized. We formed a system of education and accompany with the development of society continually. Though search[ing] the efficient education method is a developed process, what we grasp is accord to the situation now. The nation gives individuals the opportunity to develop themselves, and provide[+s]  society with the skills it needs to evolve in its best interests. The educators have already concluded some education theories and made lots of methods. Such as basic education add special education, education for all-around development, guidance education etc.

In the second place, society, school and family form a complex educate net around the children and use their own means to develop the children to socialized persons. The children will[+be] affected by various ways to complete their socialized process. For society, it provide[+s] place to the children, such as the museum, cinema and amusement park. And it creates a positive environment. What the TV showed and what the publication told lead a right direction. For school, the vital place for the children, the educators know how to teach knowledge, shape character, foster interest of the children. For family, more parents [have] realized that use proper method to raise their children, develop them into an independent person.

However, as we see, some problems and unknown areas exist in the education of children which hinder the process of their[them] socialized. We have to admit that not every method is efficient to every child and perhaps some methods are improper. Just as in high school, we give the university passport to the student[+s]  according the credits. We judge the students’ performance according the credits too. These bring to the student[+s]  unilateral effects.

So, to some extend, we know how to raise our children and educate them to be a socialized persons. And most citizens’ well development show[+s]  the education’s success. Though some children can’t well adapt [+to] the society, the fact is that the majority we raised could perform well and bring more benefit to it.

纯个人观点,仅供参考:
全文中有一些小小的错误,本文观点鲜明,行文流畅,论据合理.
是我学习的榜样.

ICEYOUNGUID: 2437642

偶有不同的看法，觉得这个题中How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society这句话是个ARGUMENT，但文章中却把这句话当作了一个事实似的，在文章中没有明确地表示同意的情况下， 在行文的时候却是完全接受的，但这个ARGUMENT是可以推敲的，就看你的POSITION 了
the destiny of society一定是由How children are socialized today 决定的吗?  未必吧
所以， 我觉得这句话是这个题的关键
而且，我觉得最后一段干巴巴的，思维没有延伸开来