Issue185 【0806G desperado小组】第二次作业 by charry

charryUID: 2426204

TOPIC: ISSUE185 - "Scandals—whether in politics, academia, or other areas—can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could."


WORDS: 430         TIME: unlimited          DATE: 2007-12-09

Scandal, which occurs in various fields of our society, can be viewed as a special incident that might not only have an impact on individuals involved but also come into being a series of related sequences for some aspects. Indeed, both sides can be brought about by these scandals: positive and negative.

In normal society, the well-balanced supervision system always exists blind areas more or less because of unsound legal system or the existence of certain privileges. In some sense, the disclosure of scandals benefits our society and makes us find out some facts that we can not obtain from other ways while speakers or reformers must take their responsibility accordingly in public affairs. A love affair between the former President of the United States, Bill Clinton, and Monica Lewinsky was disclosed by the media several years ago. And it takes a great impact on the political career and life of Clinton even the whole political circle of the United States.

However, If the purpose of scandals disclosure is only to meet curiosity of the masses, or to become the trace investigation for the private life of so-called celebrities, or to be the speculation of public opinion for the mistake of government policy and to make the effects on news and society, it is fully possible to shake our confidence of the social justice and equality and to undermine the trustworthiness and security each other, and even endanger the stabilization of our society. To some degrees, scandals confuse us from time to time and make us be more aware of the blame rather than of their contribution.

Sometimes, we must be on the alert and take the right attitude for the scandals for fear of believing blindly and doing harm to others. Scandals, which derive from insiders of various channels and relate to politics, academia, physical training, or other fields, have diverse intentions that we, as outsiders, do not know well in general. The super basketball star, Michael Jordon, once was reported by the media for many times about his bad habit of gambling and his disloyalty in marriage. This scandal hurt him extremely and seriously smirched his reputation. People turned their attention to his disadvantages rather than his achievements and the contributions for basketball. Therefore, we should doubt the authentically of these scandals at times and keep our minds open and sharp.

All in all, we should assess the effects of scandals in all the aspects justly and impartially. Some scandals can play an active role in society while others may take passive impact on individuals or the community.

绿松石UID: 2427549

Scandal, which occurs in various fields of our society, can be viewed as a special incident that might not only have an impact on individuals involved but also come into being（是不是不及物的啊？） a series of related sequences for some aspects. Indeed, both sides can be brought about （总觉得不对）by these scandals: positive and negative.In normal society, the well-balanced supervision system always exists blind areas more or less because of unsound legal system or the existence of certain privileges. In some sense, the disclosure of scandals benefits our society and makes us find out some facts that we can not obtain from other ways while speakers or reformers must take their responsibility accordingly in public affairs. A love affair between the former President of the United States, Bill Clinton, and Monica Lewinsky was disclosed by the media several years ago. And it takes a great impact on the political career and life of Clinton even the whole political circle of the United States.（我觉得这个例子用在这里不是很好，你这段说scandal能让我们发现问题，那么多很好的政治丑闻财政丑闻道德丑闻你不用，偏偏用这个，其实很多老美都觉得clinton在这件事上是受害者，不算丑闻，听人说要少用这个例子）

However, If the purpose of scandals disclosure is only to meet curiosity of the masses, or to become the trace investigation for the private life of so-called celebrities, or to be the speculation of public opinion for the mistake of government policy and to make the effects on news and society, it is fully possible to shake our confidence（用的挺好的） of the social justice and equality and to undermine the trustworthiness and security each other, and even endanger the stabilization of our society. To some degrees, scandals confuse us from time to time and make us be more aware of the blame rather than of their contribution.Sometimes, we must be on the alert and take the right attitude for the scandals for fear of believing blindly and doing harm to others. Scandals, which derive from insiders of various channels and relate to politics, academia, physical training, or other fields, have diverse intentions that we, as outsiders, do not know well in general. The super basketball star, Michael Jordon, once was reported by the media for many times （跟前面的once冲突？）about his bad habit of gambling and his disloyalty in marriage. This scandal hurt him extremely（用的不对吧,不行融人）and seriously smirched（good）his reputation. People turned their attention to his disadvantages rather than his achievements and the contributions for basketball. Therefore, we should doubt the authentically of these scandals at times and keep our minds open and sharp.All in all, we should assess the effects of scandals in all the aspects justly and impartially. Some scandals can play an active role in society while others may take passive impact on individuals or the community.

1．             建议写提纲，以后复习比较方便，否则过了10天你都不知道些什么了
2．             有些表达我觉得有点绕口，感觉有的句子语序不是很通，我觉得读起来有的时候不知道你说的什么意思，要看好几遍才能明白，可能还要改改
3．             2，3段的论述有点重，逻辑还可以更挖一下？你好像说的是一个意思

[ 本帖最后由 绿松石 于 2007-12-10 22:48 编辑 ]

harbersideUID: 2151376

Scandal(s)题目不是说丑闻在不同领域吗？我认为应该用复数, which occurs （occur) in various fields of our society, can be viewed as a special incident that might not only have an impact on individuals involved but also come into being a series of related sequences for some aspects. Indeed, both sides can be brought about by these scandals(这里你用上了复数，所以我认为开头的scandal也用上复数）: positive and negative.

In normal society, the well-balanced supervision system always exists （in）blind areas more or less because of unsound legal system or the existence of certain privileges. In some sense, the disclosure of scandals benefits our society and makes us find out some facts that we can not obtain from other ways while speakers or reformers must take their responsibility accordingly in public affairs. A love affair between the former President of the United States, Bill Clinton, and （Ms）Monica Lewinsky was disclosed by the media several years ago. And it takes （took) a great impact(s) on the political career and life of Clinton even the whole political circle of the United States.

However, If the purpose of scandals disclosure is only to meet curiosity of the masses, or to become the trace investigation for the private life of so-called celebrities, or to be the speculation of public opinion for the mistake of government policy and to make the effects on news and society, ( 这个地方用上排比很好，说明讨论问题连续性，一个问题所引起的系列问题，很好！向你学习）it is fully possible to shake our confidence of the social justice and equality and to undermine the trustworthiness and security each other, and even endanger the stabilization of our society. To some degrees, （不太明白是什么意思？）scandals confuse us from time to time and make us be more aware of the blame rather than of their contribution.

Sometimes, we must be on the alert and take the right attitude for the scandals for fear of believing blindly and doing harm to others. Scandals, which derive （是否用上被动语气） from insiders of various channels and relate to politics, academia, physical training, or other fields, have diverse intentions that we, as outsiders, do not know well in general. The super basketball star, Michael Jordon, once was reported by the media for many times about his bad habit of gambling and his disloyalty in marriage. This scandal hurt him extremely and seriously smirched his reputation. People turned their attention to his disadvantages rather than his achievements and the contributions for basketball. Therefore, we should doubt the authentically of these scandals at times and keep our minds open and sharp.

All in all, we should assess the effects of scandals in all the aspects justly and impartially. Some scandals can play an active role in society while others may take passive impact on individuals or the community.

有些小问题，单复数，还有就是有些表达我不是很明白（当然这些错误我也在犯）。 例如to so me degrees.总体的思路是清楚地，继续发扬。