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The author presents an assertion that it is art creations other than scientific achievements that reflect the essence of civilization. Temping as such claim may be at the first sight, especially for those who is professional at art, it deserves further consideration to deliver such declaration.

Admittedly, artistic creation, in forms of painting, sculpture, as well as music and so forth, plays a significant role in creating civilization, as is an indefinable fact. Not only are the valueless prehistoric materials preserved due to art, but the contemporary civilization will be handed down with its assistance, for it can record the every progress of us human beings'. Furthermore, the fact that the spiritual asylum of human beings is architected is attributable to art. The creations of Monet can aptly serves as an example. Every time I being watching his painting Impression: Sunrise, a subtle emotion would arise and I would feel as if I was wandering in a fantastic world, deserting all the troubles in mundane life.

On the other hand, the scientific accomplishments provide art with opportunities to creation surge; consequently, increasing number of civilization can be recorded. Take the architecture for example. Owing to it, extraordinary civilization in ancient time is maintained, even the bones of people who created them, have disappeared without any trace. The scientific accomplishments, such as the new inventions of various materials, offer architect more freedom to create the exact world in his mind, overcoming the limitations of physic mechanist. The picture of outstanding architecture created by the genius Frank Lloyd Wright, with the name falling water, never fails to fascinate its audience because of its incredible appearance, out of the controlling of physic rules imposed on his precedents. Moreover, scientific researches expand our vision on art. Now, without any doubt, we can take it for granted that art embraces films, photographs as well as animations, where technology takes steps to participate.  

Matching the influence of the scientific achievements on art is its attributions to reflecting civilization on its own.  As far as we concerned, the space exploration is the very refection of great improvement of civilization that human beings have the wisdom, intelligence and courage to challenge the uncertainty in universe. It just reminds me of the famous saying by Neil Armstrong (and I paragraphed), that is one small step for a man, one giant leap for mankindIn addition, scientific progress, to a large degree, flourishes our civilization. Diversity of machines are invented and put into daily use, which enhance the quality of our life. Computers, instead of human beings complete the number-crunching problem, saving precious labor and time for people. Again, thanks to internet, we can acquire knowledge all over the world, and it only occupies us a few seconds. On the basis of the information we attain, we could probably add more to the civilization.     

To sum up, it is a dixit to determine the art creations dedicate more to preserve the civilization than science does. They both serve to functioning in refection it, and the co-operation of them possibly, if not of necessity, can stimulate the soaring civilization in the every steps of history.
第一次作业,欢迎大家狠狠拍,谢谢!

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发表于 2007-12-14 23:21:38 |显示全部楼层
先说下哈,本人刚动手开始准备GRE...作文还基本没开始学。。。。所以只能当作一般的文章拍拍。。
有对于GRE考试“不合时宜”的地方请大家谅解。。。。。

The author presents an assertion that it is art creations             Not an extact restatement. Your meaning is "some
other than scientific achievements that reflect the essence      art creationgs which is not at the same time scientific
of civilization. Temping(?) as such claim may be at the first     achievements"
sight, especially for those who is professional at art,                   I'm not sure about this. Overinferenced?
it deserves further consideration to deliver such declaration.

Admittedly, artistic creation, in forms of painting, sculpture,
as well as music and so forth, plays a significant role in
creating civilization, as is an indefinable fact. Not only are       "Indefinable" means "not sure". You really mean this?
the valueless(?) prehistoric materials preserved due to art,      "As is an indefinable fact" and "Admittedly" appeared
but the contemporary civilization will be handed down with       in the same sentence, and I'm not clear about this.
its assistance, for it can record the every progress of us        You made a repeation or a contradiction.
human beings'. Furthermore, the fact that the spiritual           I'm wondering if you should use "we human beings".
asylum of human beings is architected is attributable to(?)         
art. The creations of Monet can aptly serves as an
example. Every time I being watching his painting
Impression: Sunrise, a subtle emotion would arise                 I'm puzzled on this sentence.
and I would feel as if I was wandering in a fantastic world,      I suggent you use "a world of fantasy". "Fantastic" is
deserting all the troubles in mundane life.                                      very near to "ridiculous".
                                                                                                       I'm wondering whether "mundane" is too
serious here.
On the other hand, the scientific accomplishments
provide art with opportunities to creation surge; consequently,
increasing number of civilization can be recorded.
Take the architecture for example. Owing to it,
extraordinary civilization in ancient time is maintained,
even the bones of people who created them, have        I suggent "even the people" is enough.
disappeared without any trace. The scientific
accomplishments, such as the new inventions of
various materials, offer architect more freedom
to create the exact world in his mind, overcoming
the limitations of physic mechanist. The picture
of outstanding architecture created by the genius
Frank Lloyd Wright, with the name falling water,
never fails to fascinate its audience because of
its incredible appearance, out of the control of          Beautiful!
physic rules imposed on his precedents. Moreover,
scientific researches expand our vision on art.
Now, without any doubt, we can take it for
granted that art embraces films,
photographs as well as animations, where
technology takes steps to participate.  

Matching the influence of the scientific achievements        I'm not sure what you want to say.
on art is its attributions to reflecting civilization on its own.  
As far as we concerned, the space exploration is
the very refection of great improvement of civilization
that human beings have the wisdom, intelligence and
courage to challenge the uncertainty in universe.
It just reminds me of the famous saying by Neil Armstrong
(and I paragraphed), that is one small step for a man,
one giant leap for mankind.In addition, scientific           This logic is not "in addition" but "even more" or sth like.
progress, to a large degree, flourishes our civilization.
Diversity of machines are invented and put into
daily use, which enhance the quality of our life.
Computers, instead of human beings complete
the number-crunching problem, saving precious
labor and time for people. Again, thanks to
internet, we can acquire knowledge all over
the world, and it only occupies us a few
seconds. On the basis of the information                   I'm wondering how you jump to this. Overinferenced?
we attain, we could probably add more to the
civilization.     

To sum up, it is a dixit to determine the art creations
dedicate more to preserve the civilization than science
does. They both serve to functioning in refection it,             You devote too much into advocate science in par.4,
and the co-operation of them possibly, if not of necessity,   such that this "balance" conclusion was a surprise to me
can stimulate the soaring civilization in the every steps of history.

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发表于 2007-12-17 19:08:26 |显示全部楼层

呵呵个人意见

issue243[aero小组]第一次作业 by liuyingbnu

The author presents an assertion that it is art creations other than scientific achievements that reflect the essence of civilization. Temping as such claim may be at the first sight, especially for those who is professional at(in) art, it deserves further consideration to deliver such declaration.

Admittedly, artistic creation, in forms of painting, sculpture, as well as music and so forth, plays a significant role in creating civilization, as is an indefinable (definable) fact. Not only are the valueless (priceless) prehistoric materials preserved due to art, but the contemporary civilization will be handed down with its assistance, for it can record the every progress of us (‘us’ could be deleted) human beings'. Furthermore, the fact that the spiritual asylum of human beings is architected is attributable to art. The creations of Monet can aptly serves as an example. Every time I being watching his painting Impression: Sunrise, a subtle emotion would arise and I would feel as if I was wandering in a fantastic world, deserting all the troubles in mundane life. (wonderful!)



On the other hand, the scientific accomplishments provide art with opportunities to creation surge; consequently, increasing number of civilization can be recorded. Take the architecture for example. Owing to it (developed technology on scientific), extraordinary civilization in ancient time is maintained, even the bones of people who created them, have disappeared without any trace. The scientific accomplishments, such as the new inventions of various materials, offer architect more freedom to create the exact world in (according to/by) his mind (imagination), overcoming the limitations of physic mechanist (material). The picture of outstanding architecture created by the genius Frank Lloyd Wright, with the name falling water, never fails to fascinate its audience because of its incredible appearance, out of the controlling of physic rules imposed on his precedents. Moreover, scientific researches (research) expand our vision on art. Now, without any doubt, we can take it for granted that art embraces films, photographs as well as animations, where technology takes steps to participate.  

Matching (whether add “to”?) the influence of the scientific achievements on art is its attributions to reflecting (reflect) civilization on its own (way).  As far as we concerned, the space exploration is the very refection (reflection) of great improvement of civilization that human beings have the wisdom, intelligence and courage to challenge the uncertainty (unknown fields) in universe. It just reminds me of the famous saying by Neil Armstrong (and I paragraphed), that is one small step for a man, one giant leap for mankind.In addition, scientific progress, to a large degree, flourishes our civilization. Diversity of machines are invented and put into daily use, which enhance the quality of our life. Computers, instead of human beings complete the number-crunching problem, saving precious labor and time for (of) people. Again, thanks to internet, we can acquire knowledge all over the world, and it only occupies us a few seconds. On the basis of the information we attain (have attained), we could probably add more (surprised inventions and discoveries) to the civilization.     


To sum up, it is a dixit to determine the art creations dedicate more to preserve the civilization than science does. They both serve to functioning in refection it (constitute the civilization of a society), and the co-operation of them possibly, if not of necessity, can stimulate the soaring civilization in the every steps of history.
很好呀 哈哈 加油 括号中是我的意见 呵呵 供参考

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