Issue38[0806G-AWER小组]第一次作业by穿着拖鞋追你

穿着拖鞋追你UID: 2375959

38 "In the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was. People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books." [05/57; 06/3]
在电视机时代，阅读书籍已经没有原来那样重要了。人们从电视上学到的东西丝毫不比从书本中学来的少。
With the popularity of television, people in increasing number begin to realize its’ importance and have come to be captivated ,and even some of them think so much about it that, in their opinion, most of the knowledge ,which have been traditionally absorbed from books ,now can be obtained from television without the need of reading again, the same thought as the speaker illustrated here .It seems sound and attempting at first glance, however, just with a deeper thought ,much insufficiency in the speaker's claim emerge, which I will elucidate below . As far as I am concerned, I can't agree with the speaker’s preference, and the importance of reading can never been substituted by television, and in turn, the latter just play an auxiliary role, which would be proved by too much evidence just as follows.
  
Undoubtedly, the position of television in mass' life should never be neglected, which make us informed of various knowledge of many fields, and all kinds of news of everywhere throughout the world. From this point, it manifests its’ particular advantage to books, which, however, also have little power to overthrow reading’s superiority.
  
In the first place, the knowledge on television are just superficial, not professional, from which, admittedly, can we have the access to much information, unfortunately, which always involve some typical or extreme cases, such as a huge breakthrough in some fields, which will never grant us a chance to get the detail of the process, or some other field’s development in which we may really be interested.

In the second place, you will never know what the television will present to you, boring advertizement, affecting soap play, or even some negative programs, such as some violent movies. For a supporting example we can get it from a popular movie named guhuozai, which propagates the earnest brotherliness among a crowd of local ruffians, and what’s worse, it justified the rightness of violence, and the pizzazz to be a ruffian. How can we depend on the so-called knowledge to replace reading, while which inoculates us with all sorts of sparkling thoughts of many great people.

In the third place, television program, in essence, just a commercial action. How to get fullest profit is what those behind the curtain are really concerned about. With a fierce competition and therefore the heavy burden, people in this society just desire to get a channel to indulge themselves with multifarious entertainment to relax, television naturally seizes the opportunity and caters to this trend. So what kinds of program will take on, and whether it can serve with helpful knowledge is suspectable and disconcerting.

From what have been discussed above, we clearly realize how ridiculous the thought, television can take place of reading, would be. And it is also a cliché here to prove the importance of reading to all of us, just taking a look at how modernization our world now, which, we could proudly declaim, should be attributed to reading books.

To sum up, we can easily draw a conclusion, reading books should always be superior to watching television, and only through reading can we obtain the knowledge which really meet our need, no matter from the quality or the practicability.


第一次写作了，有点费力，不过我是很认真的写的啊，也改过了，希望各位不要太留情面，有错误尽管指出来啊！:)   谢谢啦！

Betty210UID: 2398827

With the popularity of television, people in increasing number begin to realize its’ （its）importance and have come to be captivated ,and even some of them think so much about it that, in their opinion, most of the knowledge ,which have been traditionally absorbed from books ,now can be obtained from television without the need of reading again, the same thought as the speaker illustrated here .It seems sound and attempting at first glance, however, （It seems sound, attempting at first glance. However… ）just with a deeper thought ,much insufficiency in the speaker's claim emerges, which I will elucidate below . As far as I am concerned, I can't agree with the speaker’s preference, and the importance of reading can never been substituted by television, and in turn, the latter just play an auxiliary role, which would be proved by too much evidence just as follows.
  
Undoubtedly, the position of television in mass' life should never be neglected, which makes us informed of various knowledge of many fields, and all kinds of news of everywhere throughout the world. From this point, it manifests its’(真有这个用法吗？？看你两次使用了。不是用its就可以了吗？？？) particular advantages to books, which, however, also have little power to overthrow reading’s superiority.
  
In the first place, the knowledge on television are just superficial, not professional, from which, admittedly, can we （？？？？）have the access to much information, unfortunately, which always involve some typical or extreme cases, such as a huge breakthrough in some fields, which will never grant us a chance to get the detail of the process, or some other field’s development in which we may really be interested.(一句话阐述了一个观点强但是我认为除非再写点什么不然就一句话太复杂了况且用中文想一句话也不可能有多彻底的阐述  right?)

In the second place, you will never know what the television will present to you, boring advertizement, affecting soap play, or even some negative programs, such as some violent movies. For a supporting example we can get it from a popular movie named guhuozai, which propagates the earnest brotherliness among a crowd of local ruffians, and what’s worse, it justified the rightness of violence, and the pizzazz to be a ruffian. How can we depend on the so-called knowledge to replace reading, while which inoculates us with all sorts of sparkling thoughts of many great people.

In the third place, television program, in essence, just a commercial action. How to get the fullest profit is what those behind the curtain are really concerned about. With a fierce competition and therefore the heavy burden, people in this society just desire to get a channel to indulge themselves with multifarious entertainment to relax, television naturally seizes the opportunity and caters to this trend. So what kinds of program will take on, and whether it can serve with helpful knowledge is suspectable and disconcerting.

From what have been discussed above, we clearly realize how ridiculous the thought, television can take place of reading, would be. And it is also a cliché here to prove the importance of reading to all of us, just taking a look at how modernization our world now, which, we could proudly declaim, should be attributed to reading books.

To sum up, we can easily draw a conclusion, reading books should always be superior to watching television, and only through reading can we obtain the knowledge which really meet our need, no matter from the quality or the practicability.
(观点不错哟。若在每段论证中加点反证就更好了,如, a few of books, someone claims, also full of violence. 但是它有优美的语言，描写手法，这是人们可以学习的。嘿嘿， PRATE ！)

穿着拖鞋追你UID: 2375959

感谢Betty210的耐心和指导啊！

认真看了一下你提到意见，也仔细考虑了，觉得你思路很严谨啊，尤其是最后给提的“若在每段论证中加点反证就更好了,如, a few of books, someone claims, also full of violence. 但是它有优美的语言，描写手法，这是人们可以学习的”，开始一直没弄明白这样写到底能起什么作用，后来才意识到这样写的严谨性！高手啊。

还有其他的一些毛病，我得一一在此承认了，呵呵！
1："its’ （its），"是我表达错误，大脑当时短路，word纠错已经明确显示了，可是我始终没发现到底错在哪了，还以为是对的了，呵呵，好白痴哦！
2: “from which, admittedly, can we （？？？？）...”现在已经认识到应该写成。。。we can。。的
3：”一句话阐述了一个观点强但是我认为除非再写点什么不然就一句话太复杂了况且用中文想一句话也不可能有多彻底的阐述  right?  “   right！！！，下次一定改正！


收获颇多，多谢Betty20的修改意见！:handshake





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陈星君UID: 2416582

你好!我已帮你改了一下,不妥之处,请多多包涵!!
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-783254-1-1.html
彼此互相学习学习:handshake

Betty210UID: 2398827

不谢 不谢 我也在学习嘛 我在14楼  要是有空也帮我改改吧:loveliness:

嘿嘿 你评价好高哇 我好有成就感 哈哈