086G-AW小组 第一次作业 ISSUE5 and ARGUMENT3

hcz8326UID: 2313584

TOPIC: ISSUE5 - "A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer."
WORDS: 368          TIME: 00:57:00          DATE: 2007-12-28 16:22:08

As the speaker says, it is better to require the students all over the nation to study the same national curriculum until they enter college than to allow schools to determine which courses to offer. Generally speaking, though this view is of quite a little value, there is also something inappropriate in the view.

In the first place, admittedly, the same national curriculum could offer us fair education all over the country. In my country, it is well known that in the poor developed areas, so poor is the education level that many valuable courses are not offered, which makes the unfairness existed in the education. For instance, the English learning in my country varies greatly in different areas. In metropolis, children begin to learn English, including listening, speaking, reading and writing, generally at primary school or even much earlier, while in small town or countryside, children even could not listen to the English tape at middle school. Thus, if the same national curriculum is forced to be used and financial supported by government, the unfairness would be reduced.

In the second place, however, if the government requires the students all over the nation to study the same national curriculum, something important for the students, such as individuality, would be also impaired. The purpose of education is to improve students' study and work ability and moral level rather than to train them to the same model. For this reason, the education would suffer because of the same national curriculum.

In the third place, it is impossible that the same national curriculum could include some valuable local courses, such as local culture, history and geography, which are necessary to be offered to the local students. If these course are not offered, the student would not know their home town well, which is never a expected consequence. Hence, we should not discard these local courses due to the same national curriculum.

To sum up, the same national curriculum could not be required all over the whole nation due to these reasons. However, it is possibly feasible that require schools to offer the key part of the national curriculum and preserve some valuable courses which are different from the national curriculum.


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TOPIC: ARGUMENT3 - The following appeared in a newspaper article about law firms in the city of Megalopolis.

"In Megalopolis, the number of law school graduates who went to work for large, corporate firms declined by 15 percent over the last three years, whereas an increasing number of graduates took jobs at small, general practice firms. Even though large firms usually offer much higher salaries, law school graduates are choosing to work for the smaller firms most likely because they experience greater job satisfaction at smaller firms. In a survey of first-year students at a leading law school, most agreed with the statement that earning a high salary was less important to them than job satisfaction. This finding suggests that the large, corporate firms of Megalopolis will need to offer graduates more benefits and incentives and reduce the number of hours they must work."
WORDS: 329          TIME: 00:38:00          DATE: 2007-12-28 16:22:08

In this part of the article, the arguer concludes that the large firms should offer graduates more benefits and incentives and reduce the work time to attract the graduates. To justify this conclusion, the arguer points out that the number of graduates who went to large firms declined, while the number of graduates who went to small firms increased. The arguer attributes this phenomenon to the reason that it lacks of satisfaction at large firms. However, when closer examming this argument, I find it problematical in the following several respects.

In the first place, the survey cited by the arguer could not actually reflect the real view of the graduate in that the objects of this survey are the first-year students at a leading school. The arguer provide no evidence that the first-year students' view is the same with the graduates' and the leading school also could be representative for all the law school in this area. Thus, this survey actually makes no sense.

In the second place, even if, as the survey indicates, the graduates really attach more importance to job satisfaction rather than earning a high salary, no evidence is provided to support the assumption that graduates would experience less job satisfaction in large firms. The arguer draws the conclusion based on an unwarranted assumption, which makes this argument unconvincing.

In the third place, even though it lacks of job satisfaction in large firms, the arguer unfairly equates the benefit, incentive and less work time to job satisfaction. As is known, there are also many factors would have influence on job satisfaction, such as a great working environment which small firms could seldom offer. Thus, the arguer's suggestion is too narrow.

To sum up, this argument is unconvincing due to the lack of powerful support.
It is necessary for the arguer to provide more information about the graduates' view and even a survey of the people who are already in both of the large and small firms.


两篇时间都超了，字数还不够（尤其是ISSUE）.
第一次交作业，大家狠拍啊！

ZZCZ_BishopUID: 2403776

难免啊，我都写2个小时了。结果还没憋出来

loudUID: 2387861

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兄弟，我真的很想帮你改，但是实在不知道该从和着手，
  
   建义写之前先多看看版上的同主题精华帖之类的，这样的文章很难改，而起感觉意义不大啊

barentsUID: 2310751

不要很明显的每段一开始都in the xxx place什么的啊。。。可以用相对来说隐晦一点的但是表达类似意思的啊，否则会显得很呆滞。

liuchun1987UID: 2398171

刚开始不要太在乎字数，时间。没手感的话先背几篇范文，先一段一段练着写写。