issue51 [SpringCity飞跃小组]第一次作业

Scofield_thuUID: 2447386

TOPIC: ISSUE51 - "Education will be trulyeffective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needsand interests of each student."

I fundamentally second the speaker’s assertion that education will be truly effective when itis specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of eachstudent, while there is a little supplement to the point of view, that is, itis the duty of Education to not only encourage the characteristics of each individualsbut equip the students with basic knowledge and background.

Just as the speaker’s claim teaching according to the student's ability is very important. Due to the different characteristics and interest of students, the Education is not supposed to take them as a whole and shape them to the exactly same products without any innovation and activity. In contrary the student should be treated as individual in  fully regard with his or her own potential and interest.Only in that way the student’s spirit will be set free to explore nature mysteries,create new artistic works and overcome scientific difficulties with passionand enthusiasm. In addition many great artists or scientists would become ordinary people if they wouldn’t have received the specific field of education they may had potential and insight in. What a pity！How can you imagine if Beethoven didn’t learn music and supposed to be a doctor by his father, if Einstein was force to learn art and have little change to get contact with physics?

The only supplement of the speaker’s assertion is that schools and universities have the historical responsibilities and functionalities in education and culture so as to keep the stability of the contemporary society and the passing by the cumulativecivilization to the following generations, whichare not like supermarket where people can pick up what they want arbitrarily.  So the Education should provide indispensable moral guide, necessary rudiments, basic knowledge and skills, which is not atthe students’ will in deed. That’s why almost all the Universities around the worldincluding Hartfordand Stanford carefully design the curriculums for their students which includethe compulsory courses as well as the elective courses as an option.

By the way, itis not possible to design the plan of education for each student which costshuge recourse and time in regard that there are still many children quitting school due to the poverty in lots of developing countries such as India, China,and poor countries in Africa.Due to the reality of thefact, students who have great goal and real want make splendid achievementshould pay attention by themselves to the field and knowledge which theyinterest in.

In summery, it willbe ideal and convincible that education will be truly effective when it isspecifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of eachstudent with the complement of necessary based knowledge, guide and basicskills for teacher and families

[ 本帖最后由 Scofield_thu 于 2008-1-15 13:24 编辑 ]

hischildUID: 2143480

I fundamentally second (?) the speaker’s assertion that education will be truly effective when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student, while there is a little supplement to the point of view, that is, it is the duty of Education (小写) to not only encourage the characteristics of each individuals but equip the students with basic knowledge and background.

Just as the speaker’s claim teaching according to the student's ability（不该是根据能力吧？是兴趣和爱好或者需要，题意！） is very important. Due to the different characteristics and interest of students, the Education is not supposed to take them as a whole and shape them to the exactly same products without any innovation and activity（initiative）. In contrary, the student should be treated as individual in fully and regarded with his or her own potential and interest. Only in that way the student’s spirit will be set free to explore nature mysteries, to create new artistic works and to overcome scientific difficulties with passion and enthusiasm. In addition, many great artists or scientists would become ordinary people if they wouldn’t （would not, 不能缩写）have received the specific field of education they may had potential and insight in (正着说，不然逻辑乱了，主语要与前面的student 一致) . What a pity！How can you imagine if Beethoven didn’t learn music and supposed to be a doctor by his father（前面是否定，这个句子不能并列吧？）, if Einstein was force to learn art and have little change（改变？是机会吧！） to get contact with physics?

The only supplement of the speaker’s assertion is that schools and universities have the historical responsibilities and functionalities（function） in education and culture so as to keep the stability of the contemporary society and the passing by the cumulative civilization to the following generations, which are not like supermarket where people can pick up what they want arbitrarily. (本段的主题句？如果是，在这段里面必须阐述所有相关观点，什么历史责任，保持社会稳定，传递下一代等等，但是下面的论述只包括了一点) So the Education should provide indispensable moral guide, necessary rudiments, basic knowledge and skills, which is not at the students’ will in deed. That’s why almost all the Universities around the world including Hartford and Stanford carefully design the curriculums for their students which include the compulsory courses as well as the elective courses as an option.

By the way（不能用，绝对口语）, it is not possible to design the plan of education for each student which costs huge recourse and time in regard that there are still many children quitting school due to the poverty in lots of developing countries such as India, China, and poor（many 不要用带主观色彩的词，尽量用中性词） countries in Africa. Due to the reality of the fact, students who have great goal and real want make splendid achievement should pay attention by themselves to the field and knowledge which they interest in.

In summary, it will be ideal and convincible that education will be truly effective when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student with the complement of necessary based knowledge, guide and basic skills for teacher and families.

红色是删的，蓝色是加的，橙色是改的
1、标点符号！！！！
2、大小写要注意啊，不要随便大写~
3、小心用词，拿不准的大词不要用
4. 我觉得还是要练习写主题句和主体句哦

[ 本帖最后由 hischild 于 2008-1-15 21:54 编辑 ]