0806GRE奋斗小组:寒假集训1月21日作业Argument2

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In this letter, the committee of the Deerhaven Acres homeowners recommends that homeowner in Deerheven Acres should adopt a set of restrictions suitable to this community on landscaping and housepainting in order to enhance property values. To support this recommendation the author cites that since homeowners in Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting seven years ago, average property values have tripled in that community. However, the argument contains several facets that are questionable.

The threshold problem of this argument is that the author simply attributes the increase of average property values in Brookville community to a set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting without ruling out any other possible alternatives which may reinforce average property values. Such alternatives may include the fact that more posterity of Brookville people grow up and need new department to separate from their parents or that more people in other community rush into Brookville community due to the highly developing in Brookville, that will elevate the demand number of house. It is possible that prosperity of industry usurps more lands to establish new factories or extend their scale, which decreases availability space for living. In addition, the author failed to consider the tendency of other goods'price in past seven years. Perhaps the price of most goods raise more than three times comparing with of which seven years ago. Therefore, it appears reasonable for the author to focus on those trouble spots than to restrict landscaping and housepainting.

Even if one concedes that the restrictions in Brookville community successfully increase average property values, there is no evidences that doing so will similarly raise property values in Deerhaven Acres. It is not a wise idea for Deerhaven Acres to apply the same strategy as Brookville to heighten property values because there are too much differences between them. It is very possible that house-buyers in Deerhaven Acres does not care much on appearance of houses and show less interested in exterior appearance than Brookville house-buyers. Perhaps house-buyers in Deerhaven Acres even dislike this style of houses which make them losing individual identity and, moreover, this restrictions may potentially incline to decrease Deerhaver property values. Thus, without giving any consideration of those and other possible dissimilarities, the committee can not draw the conclusion that what raising property values in Brookville will bring about the same result in Deerhaven.

Overall, the committee draws the conclusion that adopting a set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting will raise property values in Deerhaven Acres without precluding many other factors may influence average property values and neglecting the differences between Deerhaven Acres and Brookville. It is essential for the committee to detailed analyze all alternatives ascribe to property values and finally attain effectual strategy.

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0806GRE奋斗小组:寒假集训1月21日作业Argument2
In this letter, the committee of the Deerhaven Acres homeowners recommends that homeowner in Deerheven Acres should adopt a set of restrictions suitable to this community on landscaping and housepainting in order to enhance property values. To support this recommendation the author cites that since homeowners in Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting seven years ago, average property values have tripled in that community. However, the argument contains several facets(facts) that are questionable.

The threshold problem of this argument is that the author simply attributes the increase of average property values in Brookville community to a set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting without ruling out any other possible alternatives which may reinforce average property values. Such alternatives may include the fact that more posterity of Brookville people grow up and need new department to separate from their parents or that more people in other community rush into Brookville community due to the highly developing in Brookville, that will elevate the demand number of house.(这个长句用的漂亮！) It is possible that prosperity of industry usurps（？？） more lands to establish new factories or extend their scale（是不是scope）, which decreases availability space for living. In addition, the author failed to consider the tendency of other goods'price in past seven years. Perhaps the price of most goods raise more than three times comparing with of which seven years ago. Therefore, it appears reasonable for the author to focus on those trouble spots than to restrict landscaping and housepainting.

Even if one concedes that the restrictions in Brookville community successfully increase average property values, there is no evidences that doing so will similarly raise property values in Deerhaven Acres. It is not a wise idea for Deerhaven Acres to apply the same strategy as Brookville to heighten property values because there are too much differences between them. It is very possible that house-buyers in Deerhaven Acres does not care much on appearance of houses and show less interested in exterior appearance than Brookville house-buyers. Perhaps house-buyers in Deerhaven Acres even dislike this style of houses which make them losing individual identity and, moreover, this restrictions may potentially incline to decrease Deerhaver property values. Thus, without giving any consideration of those and other possible dissimilarities, the committee can not draw the conclusion that what raising property values in Brookville will bring about the same result in Deerhaven.

Overall, the committee draws the conclusion that adopting a set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting will raise property values in Deerhaven Acres without precluding many other factors may influence average property values and neglecting the differences between Deerhaven Acres and Brookville.(又一长句) It is essential for the committee to detailed analyze all alternatives ascribe to property values and finally attain effectual strategy.

整篇文章写的很不错，特别是第二点的论证相当详细，值得学习，只是结尾处是不是应该更清楚的指明使论证可信的细节呢？说的不对之处，还请包涵！

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