Argument240 飞跃dreams第一次作业

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT240 - The following appeared in a memo written by a dean at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a new dormitory. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, should double over the next fifty years, thus making existing dormitories inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has increased in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, an attractive new dormitory would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
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In this argument, author argues that new dormitory should be built in Buckingham College. To support the conclusion the argue points out that the current trends of enrollment growth surely result in insufficiency of existing dormitories after fifty years. Additionally, he cites the fact that average rent in his town has increased these years, and reasons that it is increasingly difficult for students to afford off-campus housing. As a result, he makes the recommendation that building attractive new dormitory is a feasible measure to expand the enrollment of Buckingham. This argument suffers from several critical fallacies.

One problem with the argument is that in the absence of convincing evidence whether the enrollment of Buckingham can keep its current growth is quite open to doubt. As pointed out in the argument, the number of students enter Buckingham will double in the next fifty year based on the current speed. That is to say, enrollment increases by only two or three percentage each year during these years. And how to stabilize this acceleration in the next nearly half the century requires further evidence including the local adolescent population in the right age, the willingness of parents to avail their sons and daughters accomplishing college study, and the economical condition among the families.

Furthermore, the arguer fails to establish casual relationship between increase of average rent and the students' assurance to live in the campus. Firstly, if this increase results from inflation due to economic policy, the salary of local workers will correspondingly increase, helping students pay for added rent. Secondly, whether a new dormitory will guarantee a reduction of students' accommodation fees lacks sufficient information. It is entirely possible that Buckingham itself adjusts the price according to the flux of economy, and in this case students still have no easy access to available, convenient and inexpensive accommodation.

Finally, argue ignores other important factors determining the enrollment of college. The scholarship, available financial aides, college's academic atmosphere, the environment of campus, the traffic condition nearby, the quality of teaching faculty and co-op programs will certainly be taken into consideration when choosing universities.

In summary, the argument is not well reasoned. To make it logically acceptable, the arguer would have to provide more specific statistics demonstrating the growth of enrollment in the year to come, and have to make comprehensive survey to find major factors determining the selection in numerous colleges.

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In this argument, author argues that new dormitory should be built in Buckingham College. To support the conclusion the argue points out that the current trends of enrollment growth surely result in insufficiency of existing dormitories after fifty years. Additionally, he cites the fact that average rent in his town has increased these years, and reasons that it is increasingly difficult for students to afford off-campus housing. As a result, he makes the recommendation that building attractive new dormitory is a feasible measure to expand the enrollment of Buckingham. This argument suffers from several critical fallacies.

One problem with the argument is that in the absence of convincing evidence whether the enrollment of Buckingham can keep its current growth is quite open to doubt. As pointed out in the argument, the number of students enter Buckingham will double in the next fifty year based on the current speed. That is to say, enrollment increases by only two or three percentage each year during these years. And how to stabilize this acceleration in the next nearly half the century requires further evidence including the local adolescent population in the right age, the willingness of parents to avail their sons and daughters accomplishing college study, and the economical condition among the families.

Furthermore, the arguer fails to establish casual relationship between increase of average rent and the students' assurance to live in the campus. Firstly, if this increase results from inflation due to economic policy, the salary of local workers will correspondingly increase, helping students pay for added rent. Secondly, whether a new dormitory will guarantee a reduction of students' accommodation fees lacks sufficient information. It is entirely possible that Buckingham itself adjusts the price according to the flux of economy, and in this case students still have no easy access to available, convenient and inexpensive accommodation.
（这一部分的论证发展得很好）

Finally, this argue ignores other important factors determining the enrollment of college. The scholarship, available financial aides, college's academic atmosphere, the environment of campus, the traffic condition nearby, the quality of teaching faculty and co-op programs will certainly be taken into consideration when choosing universities.

In summary, the argument is not well reasoned. To make it logically acceptable, the arguer would have to provide more specific statistics demonstrating the growth of enrollment in the year to come, and have to make comprehensive survey to find major factors determining the selection in numerous colleges.
（感觉你写的文章在总体上来看很不错，如果能把时间缩短到30分钟以内就非常好了）