Issue130 飞跃dreams第一次作业

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TOPIC: ISSUE130 - "How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."
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The controversy of how we should socialize children is ceaseless throughout the contemporary society. The children, backbone in the foreseeable future, always attract a great deal of attention from all spheres of society who have vigorous intention to avail improving the education system. However, there exist numerous unsolved problems in the profound education reform whose achievements are overshadowed by these problems.

Education is an all-inclusive and open-ended word especially when involving the children. It consists of complicated machinery assisted by parents, teachers, universities and governments at all levels, and influenced by trend of thought, policies, and doctrines of all forms. Because of the children's immaturity and innocence, careful attention will be paid to the process of educating them. Therefore, parents keep eyes staring at their sons and daughters when they have physical practice; teachers have conversation heart to heart with the young students, intending to help them escape from psychological depression; instructors make specific plan to fulfill their promises of leading graduates to the pantheon of science. All these efforts have added lungs to the ladder of education direct to prosperity of human beings, generation after generation.

However, despite the diligent endeavor of the entire society, education today reveals problems that surely undermine the achievement accomplished hitherto and even symbolize crisis nationwide. In the oriental countries, like China and Japan whose population density keeps a fantastic level, secondary education system are guided by the college entrance examination. Since most of the senior schools place undue emphasis on the proportion of students entering university of high level, and since the examination-oriented education attaches great importance on the scores of just one or two exam, students in these countries usually find themselves overwhelmed by endless exercises, homework and papers. Since the tedious repeats on single subject, students commonly find themselves excluded from reality, their creativity diminished, their skill to cooperate with others weakened and their psychological burden increased. All these phenomena signify an obstacle needed to overcome in the process of reform.

By contrast, the higher education system in these countries awaits more strengthened reform. Since society regards diploma as the first certificate of one's true talents, some of the undergraduates as well as the graduates put little emphasis on the promotion of political integrity and professional ability. What they take into consideration primarily is to pass the examination and earn a diploma. It would result in the tragedy of lackness of talent in society if fallacy of this kind remains unsolved.

In summary, the dilemma in education reform still requires dedication of whole country. So it is the high time the governments and universities took their reform projects into reality and the student in all ages unite to take their own responsibility of renewing the education.


[ 本帖最后由 syjsss213 于 2008-1-27 12:43 编辑 ]

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The controversy of how we should socialize children is ceaseless throughout the contemporary society. The children, backbone in the foreseeable future, always attract a great deal of attention from all spheres of society who have vigorous intention to avail improving the education system. However, there exist numerous unsolved problems in the profound education reform whose achievements are overshadowed by these problems.

Education is an all-inclusive and open-ended word especially when involving the children. It consists of complicated machinery assisted by parents, teachers, universities and governments at all levels, and influenced by trend of thought, policies, and doctrines of all forms. Because of the children's immaturity and innocence, careful attention will be paid to the process of educating them. Therefore, parents keep eyes staring at their sons and daughters when they have physical practice; teachers have conversation heart to heart with the young students, intending to help them escape from psychological depression; instructors make specific plan to fulfill their promises of leading graduates to the pantheon of science. All these efforts have added lungs to the ladder of education direct to prosperity of human beings, generation after generation.
（这一段写到了社会各个方面对于儿童教育的关注，写得比较详细，如果再加上一些儿童在一定的社会环境下受教育长大之后会对社会产生的影响，就更好了）

However, despite the diligent endeavor of the entire society, education today reveals problems that surely undermine the achievement accomplished hitherto and even symbolize crisis nationwide. In the oriental countries, like China and Japan whose population density keeps a fantastic level, secondary education system are guided by the college entrance examination. Since most of the senior schools place undue emphasis on the proportion of students entering university of high level, and since the examination-oriented education attaches great importance on the scores of just one or two exam, students in these countries usually find themselves overwhelmed by endless exercises, homework and papers. Since the tedious repeats on single subject, students commonly find themselves excluded from reality, their creativity diminished, their skill to cooperate with others weakened and their psychological burden increased. All these phenomena signify an obstacle needed to overcome in the process of reform.
（写中小学校里的教育问题也写得比较详细，如果能在这一段的末尾加上一两句，强调这些问题在儿童教育的socialization中产生的不好的影响，会起到呼应论题的作用）

By contrast, the higher education system in these countries awaits more strengthened reform. Since society regards diploma as the first certificate of one's true talents, some of the undergraduates as well as the graduates put little emphasis on the promotion of political integrity and professional ability. What they take into consideration primarily is to pass the examination and earn a diploma. It would result in the tragedy of lackness of talent in society if fallacy of this kind remains unsolved.
（这一部分需要补充得更详细一些）

In summary, the dilemma in education reform still requires dedication of whole country. So it is the high time the governments and universities took their reform projects into reality and the student in all ages unite to take their own responsibility of renewing the education.