Issue48 [Jet小组]第十次作业

benjamin07UID: 2310909

TOPIC: ISSUE48 - "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."
WORDS: 604          TIME: 上午 12:45:00          DATE: 2008-1-22

The speaker contends that the study of our history places too much emphasis on individuals because the most significant events and trends in history were probably made by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten, rather than by the famous few. As for me, I agree with the speaker insofar for that, indeed, some of the events were actually conducted by excellent groups of people. However, I would then argue that most of significant and momentous events in history were essentially produced by the famous few, according to the records of history and achievements of the physical science.

In the first place, the records of history indicate that it is the famous few in history, who eventually created the millennium which deserved our attention and respect, and then our learning and meditation. When we learn the history of the American Revolution, George Washington would undoubtedly appear in our mind first? Why? Because not only our history told us that he was the critical and excellent leader of the war, but his character charm and heroic spirits call our attention, which could be employed to educate and inspire ourselves and our next generalization, generally speaking. Similarly, it was the hero of Abraham Lincoln, who acted as the leader of the North Union of the Civil War and finally emancipated the slaves in the South. Due to his successful leadership, the U.S. made great progress in consolidating the whole country and then motivating the development of the science and technology. The facts above, at least, illustrate the point that it is because history was mostly conducted and created by the famous few, that leads to our study of history placing too much emphasis on individuals.

In the second place, in the realm of physical science, most of the profound and momentous discoveries and inventions were essentially created by individuals who played a pivotal role in motivating the progress of our science. From the theory of Heliocentric by Copernicus to the theory of Relativity by Einstein, from the Laws of classical mechanics by Newton to the various inventions such as light bulb by Edison, from the invention of the element of Calcium to the invention of the radioactive elements, all of which show that the most famous achievement and attainment in our physical science are all almost produced by our famous scientists who created the originals by themselves. Therefore, there is no denying that we have to emphasize them in the process of our learning.

Admittedly, history also exists some important and essential groups of people who co-producing significant events in the society. When asking the Chinese people who created the First Chinese Party Congress, they would, without hesitation, spouted out that it attributed to the twelve people who made the history together. No wander that under their leadership, China conducted the Civil War afterward, leading to the foundation of the New Country- People's Republic of China. From this piece of historical example, we can see that we can not neglect the truth that groups of people can play a considerable role in creating our history.

In sum, I agree with the speaker that the study of history places too much emphasis on individuals, however, the speaker neglects to see the deeper fact that actually most of the significant events and trends were produced by the famous few. What we further want to know about is that historians should provide much more historical facts which made by groups of people. As an old saying goes: " history is a mirror", which reflects that the true and final intention of studying history is to learn from them.

macross_36UID: 2306285

The speaker contends that the study of our history places too much emphasis on individuals because the most significant events and trends in history were probably made by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten, rather than by the famous few. As for me, I agree with the speaker insofar for that, indeed, some of the events were actually conducted by excellent groups of people. However, I would then argue that most of significant and momentous events in history were essentially produced by the famous few, according to the records of history and achievements of the physical science.

In the first place, the records of history indicate that it is the famous few in history, who eventually created the millennium which deserved our attention and respect, and then our learning and meditation. When we learn the history of the American Revolution, George Washington would undoubtedly appear in our mind first? Why? Because not only our history told us that he was the critical and excellent leader of the war, but his character charm and heroic spirits call our attention, which could be employed to educate and inspire ourselves and our next generalization, generally speaking(放在句首比较好). Similarly, it was the hero of Abraham Lincoln, who acted as the leader of the North Union of the Civil War and finally emancipated the slaves in the South. Due to his successful leadership, the U.S. made great progress in consolidating the whole country and then motivating the development of the science and technology. The facts above, at least, illustrate the point that it is because history was mostly conducted and created by the famous few, that leads to our study of history placing too much emphasis on individuals.（这段首句可以明确指出这一段是讲政治）

In the second place, in the realm of physical science, most of the profound and momentous discoveries and inventions were essentially created by individuals who played a pivotal role in motivating the progress of our science. From the theory of Heliocentric by Copernicus to the theory of Relativity by Einstein, from the Laws of classical mechanics by Newton to the various inventions such as light bulb by Edison, from the invention of the element of Calciumto the invention of the radioactive elements, all of which show that the most famous achievement and attainment in our physical science are all almost produced by our famous scientists who created the originals by themselves. Therefore, there is no denying that we have to emphasize them in the process of our learning.

Admittedly, history also exists some important and essential groups of people who co-producing significant events in the society. When asking the Chinese people who created the First Chinese Party Congress, they would, without hesitation, spouted out that it attributed to the twelve people who made the history together(才12个人，应该不能代表groups of people，这个例子不好。). No wander that under their leadership, China conducted the Civil War afterward, leading to the foundation of the New Country- People's Republic of China. From this piece of historical example, we can see that we can not neglect the truth that groups of people can play a considerable role in creating our history.

In sum, I agree with the speaker that the study of history places too much emphasis on individuals, however, the speaker neglects to see the deeper fact that actually most of the significant events and trends were produced by the famous few. What we further want to know about is that historians should provide much more historical facts which made by groups of people.（这句没必要了吧，感觉像是Argument）As an old saying goes: " history is a mirror", which reflects that the true and final intention of studying history is to learn from them.

总结：本文将题目的抽象概念具体化，谈了政治与科学两个方面，语言流畅，表达深刻，例子也十分丰富。如果可以避免第一段的赘述和最后一段例子的问题就更好了。

[ 本帖最后由 macross_36 于 2008-2-25 23:17 编辑 ]